Darkly flutter'd ~~

Darkly entranced 

butterflies,  

           

flying

 towards the night shadows

             fluttered 

to their demise,

too close to a

deceptive black moon,   

      

competing with

                      the numbness of death

Author's Note

Reviews

[David Scott]

Like many of your poems, you create a mood very well and deliver a profound thought in the final line.
It seems sad at first, this dark demise. Yet, as you say so eloquently, it is a staving off of the nothingness of death. You invite me to ask myself many questions. Is pain not preferable to death at times? How much more is it desirable to feel a dark "fluttering" when there is nothing else?

Lovely writing.

[Frieda P]

Oooh, I like your review better than my poem Scott...now you're making me think again about my own writing, thanks muchly! x

[ron]

Oooo this is darkly beautiful Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Thanks muchly ron, jazz'd you enjoyed this one.

[ron]

You are most welcome Frieda.

[Cory Barrett]

Oh... What was the dark moon? I need to know

[Frieda P]

Oh I can't divulge that, a girl has to have some secrets Streamline haha....thanks for reading.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"competing with the numbness of death"

such a beautiful, dark line....

casts a long shadow.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much jacob, appreciate your kind words.

[A. Amos]

Now this was pure magical, the depth of this poem is poignant truth...we humans are also like dark butterflies and most of the time we get ourselves involve in most stupid things. This piece of art has millions of questions and concurrently seriously thought provoking....

Hope all is well FP?

[Frieda P]

Ahhh you humble me dear poet, thanks so much. And getting there, slow road, thanks A.

[A. Amos]

Be strong and God willing, all will be fine, you're always in prayers!

[Einstein Noodle]

wow! how marvelous ... so creative! butterflies are never dark .. i feel wrapped in magical melancholy .. bewitched to let go and flow with it .. this is going into my favorites .. what a beautiful expressive write .. well done says i ..
E.

[Frieda P]

Yes I know, but I watched that movie Black Butterflies about the South African poet Ingrid JonkeI and for some reason this came to me....thanks E! x

[Einstein Noodle]

oooooooo! looking up Ingrid now ... love and peace and hugs big big! :)
E.

[Frieda P]

Interesting story, another mad, tortured poet....

♥♥

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful and well written poem. The good music, artwork and words took the reader to the dark moon and the deadly journey. I like the thoughts and visions create by the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Frieda P]

Thanks John, means a lot coming from you...

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome. Always a pleasure to read your words.

[Vikrantsingh]

Wow this is really close enough and very touching indeed... Love your poem Frieda :)
Anyway how are you?
Been long time and now I got sometime to check poem so started with this one :)

Great work well never heard this song - Youtube link.

- Singh.
- Cheers!

[Frieda P]

Singh!!! So good to see you again, yep....long time, so happy to see you back, thanks so much for your glowing review. Cheers! x

[Vikrantsingh]

Welcome dearie :) xxx