Darkly flutter'd ~~

Darkly entranced 

butterflies,  

           

flying

 towards the night shadows

             fluttered 

to their demise,

too close to a

deceptive black moon,   

      

competing with

                      the numbness of death

Author's Note

Reviews

[David Scott]

Like many of your poems, you create a mood very well and deliver a profound thought in the final line.
It seems sad at first, this dark demise. Yet, as you say so eloquently, it is a staving off of the nothingness of death. You invite me to ask myself many questions. Is pain not preferable to death at times? How much more is it desirable to feel a dark "fluttering" when there is nothing else?

Lovely writing.

[Frieda P]

Oooh, I like your review better than my poem Scott...now you're making me think again about my own writing, thanks muchly! x

[Bright Ocean Star]

Frieda, this one is dark and sad. I love butterflies and the imagery of this one is painful to read. Great write, though. I love how you paired it with this music. Very deep and intense.

[Frieda P]

I love butterflies too, who doesn't really, was inspired by the movie Black Butterflies about the South African poet Ingrid Jonke, it was rather dark and sad too, thanks Star, muchly appreciated. Enjoy your weekend!

[Kleio13]

Still dark and beautiful!


K

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Kleio!

[Ken Simm.]

Don't use expletives. Or, ok rarely use expletives. Well perhaps do use them when warranted. And here they are. So £%*&@"*%^! Or Bugger this is good!

[Frieda P]

Bugger, I love that word....thanks muchly Ken!

[Ken Simm.]

A good woody word....... not a tinny word at all. I like Fecund myself.

[Frieda P]

Hmm I never thought that word offensive before, but now I ponder the thought.....

[Ken Simm.]

No, never offensive. Woody and tinny is how Monty P used to describe words. Fecund is my favourite word. For the way it sounds rolling around the mouth, (oops I'm getting worse sorry)more than for what it means. And woody perhaps means something different too. So sorry, er, sorry for the er, I mean sorry that I, er I can only apol, er oh BUGGER!

[Frieda P]

There you go...ha I happen to love quiver and flutter, I won't write the expletives here, most are in Italiano and worse than anything you can imagine....cheers. ;-)

[Ken Simm.]

Thank you for forgiving my lapses Frieda. The poem is exceptionally beautiful.

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille Ken, enjoy your weekend my sweet friend.

[Matching Socks]

These beautiful little creatures are symbols of hope.
But sometimes hopes and dreams are lost
And makes no sense, hard to understand why...
Loved your poem Frieda. xx

[Frieda P]

So true, I have a special affinity for butterflies, so jazz'd you enjoyed this one, thanks muchly Ance! xo

[Shubhangi]

you wrote a poem using one of your favorite words- flutter. its a really short n sweet one...i liked it very much! :)

[Frieda P]

haha yes it is, how did you know? ;-) Grazie mille Shubhangi!

[Madalyn Beck]

This is a dark and emotional write. You kept me entranced with every line. Going into mah favs seeing as I have a thing for the dark side. Mahhvelous!! xo :)

[Frieda P]

Ha yes we are darkly colored poetic sistas, thanks Mads! ;-) xo

[Mizo4]

nice write.
Cool imagery.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much for your visit & review Marion.

[Lyn Anderson]

A dark, emotional piece, well delivered in a short space. Crazy question, but why not the trademark apostrophe within the poem? Just when I got used to them, lol ...

[Frieda P]

I don't know, I'm off my game, I haven't been as lucky as you, ya know? haha

[Vidya Bacchus]

This is sad and dark chica.Sometimes we are deceived into thinking we are safe when in reality we are not.

[Frieda P]

Exactly, thanks muchly pazzo....

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome :)

[Frieda P]

All better? :-)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Yes my sweet friend .Fit as a fiddle thank you for asking chica :)

[Frieda P]

Good to know, we can't have you anymore pazzo than you already are ha ;-)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Hahahaha you have a point there.You would have to put me in an asylum lol

[Frieda P]

We'd get you a jazzy straitjacket though, no worries ha

[Vidya Bacchus]

Okay it must be pink......what? its my favorite color.I am such a girl lol

[Frieda P]

I just rolled my eyes at you, you dork! haha

[Vidya Bacchus]

Hahaha eye rolling will get you nowhere and you are a dork also by association lol

[Frieda P]

I know, that's why I can say that lol

[Vidya Bacchus]

Hahaha you have a point :)

[Frieda P]

Yes and my kids would agree with you wholeheartedly. ;-)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Yes mine also look at me funny on occasion like "She is so looney"

[Frieda P]

Payback I guess ha

[Vidya Bacchus]

Lol must be :)