Darkly flutter'd ~~

Darkly entranced 

butterflies,  

           

flying

 towards the night shadows

             fluttered 

to their demise,

too close to a

deceptive black moon,   

      

competing with

                      the numbness of death

Author's Note

Reviews

[David Scott]

Like many of your poems, you create a mood very well and deliver a profound thought in the final line.
It seems sad at first, this dark demise. Yet, as you say so eloquently, it is a staving off of the nothingness of death. You invite me to ask myself many questions. Is pain not preferable to death at times? How much more is it desirable to feel a dark "fluttering" when there is nothing else?

Lovely writing.

[Frieda P]

Oooh, I like your review better than my poem Scott...now you're making me think again about my own writing, thanks muchly! x

[Zahra]

Another butterfly poem, nicely woven darkness. Superb.

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

frieda, you are so talented. :-)

Kaze~

[Tai Ryens]

Competing with the numbness of death, beauty struggling to maintain its whimsical facade even in the face of the darkest of adversities, still believing that said adversity is a deceptive black moon.. still believing that said adversity is still the savior from its own troubles.

Truly a profound piece.

[Kai Rollins]

I haven't read your works in quite a long time but I do remember the effect they always had. They are magical. Quite like the mood here.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Kai, muchly appreciate the visit and your thoughts...

[Scott Metro]

A deceptive moon...I like that..!!!
Well done..!!


Scotty
xo

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille Scotty!! xo

[Scott Metro]

:)
Scotty.........

[Frieda P]

When's your better half coming back, I miss her....

[Scott Metro]

She's always busy..I keep telling her to come on....she'll just give me a hard time...she thinks I'm a flirt or some such thing...LOL

[Frieda P]

Did you hear me rolling my eyes @ you....ha what would EVER give her that idea? hahaha

[Scott Metro]

Silly ain't she....Hah....LOL...naw...she'll get back on when she's ready...she does peek in on me once in a while to see what kind of nonsense I'm up to....lol

[Frieda P]

Ha is there a wolf house out back?................

[Scott Metro]

I just tell the dog to move over....!!!!
Hah

[Frieda P]

I bet you spend more time in there than him! ;)

[Scott Metro]

HAH...just like home....lol....brings back memories....Haha...

[Frieda P]

Tell Nancy I said ciao, and she's a smart woman for keeping you on a short leash haha ;)

[Scott Metro]

I shall...and she shall appreciate that...lol
My battery is dieing...gotta plug in...catch you later sugar....
xo

[Chris Micha]

The beautiful butterflies lost to the darkness. So beautifully written, Frieda. Bravo. :)

[Frieda P]

Thanks Christian.

[Mark]

Okay, I have to admit I read the title and thought you wrote this just for me. (ya right).. but I love this one. It makes sense to my head!! :)

[Frieda P]

Whoa be still my heart, you said something nice. :) MWAH!!

[Baby Ricochet]

I like this one. I read it three times and everything.

[Frieda P]

Thanks muchly 3x's Baby....

[MsJewel]

Wow Frieda...this is heart wrenching...such sad words ...and the last line is so powerful. Your creativity shines in these short little gems.

:) Julie

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much for your kind words Julie, muchly appreciated. :-)

[Deuces]

I like... deep, dark and cynical. My favorite combo :) Missed your writing. Glad to have you back.

[Frieda P]

Haha don't I know it, thanks so much G.... :-)