metaphorical cadence ~

immersed myself aside your metaphorical cadence,

traced your words upon mine own breathless lips 

thoughts of cherished clarity spoke to me 

creating powerful momentum's rush

grasping at anomaly's embrace

poetic destiny's allure upon my skin

danced upon the cobweb's tangle,

sadness left the whirlwind walls

written in translation of braille sighs,

whispered within my spirit's destiny

 earnestly sang the song in my soul

when harmony ceased reverence 

calling  out my name to surrender,

hypnotically entranced

 as your words

 hypothetically

 disappear

yet,

 the

 sentiments

 clung 

within

 my

 heart 

Author's Note

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

Poetic destiny's allure upon my skin...they say that good cooking is the way to a man's heart...yeah right, if you want my heart, sit me down (or lay me down preferably) and read poetry to me...muses are commonly addressed in writing, but rarely do the words themselves get acknowledged in this way...of course, leave it to you to break the ground Mrs.R...you always make me think outside the box on every level I can think of...you have equated me with male artists in the past...have you ever noticed that I'm yet to draw any connections for you? It's because you're so unique...you are truly in a league of your own my dear friend :) xo

[Frieda P]

Whoa, you have Mrs R up dancing on the table with that one Benji!! Speechless my dear friend, all I can say is thanks from the bottom of my humble heart. :) xo

[Vidya Bacchus]

Oh how I have missed your awesome lines chica.This is so beautiful my dear :)

[Frieda P]

Thanks pazzo, so jazz'd you enjoyed. Feeling better? :-)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Yes almost all better.Thank you for asking you sweet chica.You are welcome :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really like how the last words just hang on...and i like the funnel type form you used to talk about how the words hypothetically disappear...i was entranced by this poem.

[Frieda P]

Thanks jacob, high praise coming from you.

[MsJewel]

You have created a masterpiece my friend. This one just curls right up in my heart!
poetic destiny's allure upon my skin
danced upon the cobweb's tangle
You are amazing!

:) Julie

[Frieda P]

Doing the happy dance, thanks so much Julie! :-)

[Cory Barrett]

This writing feels like satin. The fluidity of the words can be felt on the skin of the reader. Such a wonderful piece.

written in translation of braille sighs,

And that.... that was sheer brilliance.

[Frieda P]

You should see the smile on my face, thanks so much, you humble me Streamline.

[Lyn Anderson]

Aww, Sami stole my favourite lines. Anyway, brilliant, as always, so glad to have your banter back.:)

[Frieda P]

Well, I'm jazz'd you like them too...glad to be back, now just keep your fingers crossed my son keeps his head afloat....

[Poetry Road]

Oh, I like this! It felt like a sweet kiss to read it. Wispy and subtle and sexy.

[Frieda P]

Love that you felt that way, thanks for your visit and review Poetry Road.

[Shirlena]

MAN! I loved this poem so and the line to end all lines "danced upon the cobwebs tangle", Whut tha whut that was cold (same as hot). The entire poem is dazzling though...but for some reason that one line moved me a lot to the point I'm inspired to write from it or write around the inspiration of it...seriously Frieda. Yummy stuff.

[Frieda P]

Learn me, is cold, the new cool or hot? ha....thanks Shirlena, muchly appreciated!

[Shirlena]

It's all old...just comes back around and reinvents itself each time :).

[Frieda P]

Same thing I do from time to time. ;-)

[sharonlee]

Bravo! Soul-stirring poetry Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Grazie sharonlee, nice to see you again...

[Sami Khalil]

"as your words
hypothetically
disappear
yet,
the
sentiments
clung
within
my
heart"
First, the form is unique for it looks like a tornado of sorts. What I have quoted is what you leave your readers and fans with after immersing in your poetry. A splendid soulful write...Thank you for sharing with us...:)..................

[Frieda P]

Thanks muchly Sami, jazz'd you enjoyed. :-)

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure. Any time...:)......................