metaphorical cadence ~

immersed myself aside your metaphorical cadence,

traced your words upon mine own breathless lips 

thoughts of cherished clarity spoke to me 

creating powerful momentum's rush

grasping at anomaly's embrace

poetic destiny's allure upon my skin

danced upon the cobweb's tangle,

sadness left the whirlwind walls

written in translation of braille sighs,

whispered within my spirit's destiny

 earnestly sang the song in my soul

when harmony ceased reverence 

calling  out my name to surrender,

hypnotically entranced

 as your words

 hypothetically

 disappear

yet,

 the

 sentiments

 clung 

within

 my

 heart 

Author's Note

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

Poetic destiny's allure upon my skin...they say that good cooking is the way to a man's heart...yeah right, if you want my heart, sit me down (or lay me down preferably) and read poetry to me...muses are commonly addressed in writing, but rarely do the words themselves get acknowledged in this way...of course, leave it to you to break the ground Mrs.R...you always make me think outside the box on every level I can think of...you have equated me with male artists in the past...have you ever noticed that I'm yet to draw any connections for you? It's because you're so unique...you are truly in a league of your own my dear friend :) xo

[Frieda P]

Whoa, you have Mrs R up dancing on the table with that one Benji!! Speechless my dear friend, all I can say is thanks from the bottom of my humble heart. :) xo

[Ken Simm.]

Waves of words. Excellent Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille Ken.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

There's a lot of ownership in the lines of this --- Frieda:

momentum's rush
anomaly's embrace
destiny's allure
cobweb's tangle,
spirit's destiny

Did I miss one...let me know...
I do like the work...yet again the font is quite tiny...

[Frieda P]

For me or you dear? Ha, I knew you couldn't get out without saying something about the font, you're obsessed my friend. ;-)

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Either way --- I just have to magnify my page a bit...to read...LOL...good day...

[Madalyn Beck]

Wow, Frieda! You have a way with words! This is crafted in a way that is all YOU. Stunning and the ending really did me in. Outstanding write! xo :)

[Frieda P]

Wow Mads, thanks so much for this glowing review, muchly appreciated! xo :-)

[Simran Kewlani]

Finally, you're back. Reading your poems has become a habit. Please, don't go off writerscafe again.
Is everything fine now?

[Frieda P]

Define 'fine'..........thanks, glad I'm back, we'll see what happens in Candyland.

[Simran Kewlani]

Haha! Yeah.
In a lady's point of view, fine means not alright. Depends on what you say now. :)

[Tate Morgan]

Nice to see you back again

[Frieda P]

Good to be back, thanks cowboy Tate. ;-)

[Avinash]

Your poems can heal any soul deprived of love or intimacy.

[Frieda P]

What a sweet thing to say Avinash, you're too kind, thanks so much.

[Mark]

immersed myself aside.... immersed..... myself..... ... ...

aside?

[Frieda P]

next to....short distance apart..............

[Mark]

Seems pretty far away to me but watta I know right?

[Frieda P]

It's fine Mark, I know if we were in grade school, you'd be the one pulling my pigtails haha

[Mark]

Only if it made you chase me :P

[Rita L. Sev]

A stunning form, the words became a whisper as I read. Love the concept of being "immersed in metaphorical cadence". Frieda, you just breathe poetry...

[Frieda P]

Ah you humble me Rita, thanks muchly....

[Patricia]

Loved the opening, so powerful and then it just kept getting better and better! I do lovingly envy your pen...you are a profound writer!

[Frieda P]

You're too kind Pat, thanks so much!

[Patricia]

You are very welcome :)

[redzone]

You know Frieda, I love that song from Berlin, "Take My Breath Away" and it's perfect for this poem. As I read, I kept coming to this thought: we speak metaphorically, but in doing so we often speak truth and also, as we hypnotize and entice it isn't always to be hypothetical, but to actually seek to have words spoken as Braille across the heart, or to have poetics tickle across the skin and most definitely, to have sentiments cling and to take your breath away... what a fantastic write Frieda, I know that some of my cobwebs were very happy to be untangled... ;0)

1000/1000 cobwebsuntangled
~~redzone

[redzone]

A ps, as I was rereading and listening to the song somemore of these cobwebs started to demonstrate with signs held high "Me too Freida, Untangle me" I told them you were busy but you would be how demanding they are.. and then they started to sing... "take my breath away" ... ohmy

[Frieda P]

Poetic tickles across the skin, now there's a poem in there Curt, always love your reviews, they're like a smile on my page, always. You sing, I'll dance...since I'm tone deaf, thanks muchly sweetie. ;-)

[redzone]

hmmm... can i say (without getting into trouble.. at least not too much ) if you dance with me I will definitely sing to you... er.. I mean sign... ;-p

[Frieda P]

Sing, sign, sigh, whatever floats your boat hon ;-)