Tick, tock...

Tick, tock, tick, tock...

  hear the sounds of time

slipping away in vain

wasting precious moments

  living in the past

sand slipping through

 an opaque hourglass

of dim kaleidoscopic views,

  in mosaics innate hues

inlaid upon memory's frame of mind

   shattering pendulum's meter

hanging on a watch'd tread incentive

   as the metronome in the poetry

   & temporal spirit'd lofty goals

    loses rhythm in your head

tock, tick, tock, tick...

backwards in time

slowly hypnotized 

as half past life is running out

tick, tick, tick...

Author's Note

Reviews

[Nikolas]

I like the poem itself, the meaning and all. It has a unique structure to it. The thing that I don't like is the title. it's not so much it's a bad title, it's just... weak, and a bit vague. The text in the poem is very creative but the title is not. I understand, I have troubles with titles myself but it is the weakest aspect of this poem. As a whole it's a good poem, but the title is just too boring. I think you can do better. I would reference a clock or hourglass, or maybe the pendulum. Something more original than tick tock. But other than that good job.

[Frieda P]

Thanks for your visit & review Nikolas, I agree with you, it's not such an original title, but it fit in the moment.

[Troy Henson]

Ah time takes no prisoners. It just keeps ticking along so if time waits for no one then why do we wait for it? Life moves fast as this piece did. It has a flow to it that makes you realise that's life's too short to wonder what if. Nicely done Frieda:)

Regards
Troy

[Frieda P]

Thanks muchly Troy, nice to see you again. :-)

[Troy Henson]

Glad to be back :)

[KWP]

Lovin this one chick ....

I love the pace of this one ... just like a clock ... the theme, well it's an eternal thought really... it is a lovely kick up the bum reminder to let go and keep on keepin' on and moving forward ...

LIVE, LOVE & REJOICE ...

sending love chick chick x x

[Frieda P]

Awh thanks Betty! I was feeling a bit ragged around the edges when I wrote this one I guess. Much love xo

[David Scott]

Oh yes Frieda!
I've been thinking and writing a little about living in the now. It is all we will ever have for real...
The past is tricky. We need to know it. Yet we don't have to figure it out to live well today.

[Frieda P]

When you figure it out, let me in on it. It's grand in concept but in reality, it tends to come back to haunt us.

[David Scott]

I really have figured it out. For brief moments of clarity.
It is powerful Frieda!
Just really commit to the moment. Like your poem about skydiving in red stilettos.
You know how. If we can do it for a few moments then we can do it for hours, then days, the months, then years ...

[Frieda P]

I've got the moments under wraps, then something undeniably happens to fook it up....! I'm a survivor, I won't give up, let you know when I make a minute. ;-)

[David Scott]

You can only accept a minuet. Never "make" it.

[Frieda P]

Okay Yoda, thanks for that. ;-)

[David Scott]

I'm not being silly... It is true and it is a key point my dearest redhead.

[Rita L. Sev]

I think when we arrive at that "half past life" point, we realize how futile it is to live in the past. A brief visit in reminiscence is fine, but Life demands forward motion. Great piece, Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Rita, true that...but you know, we tend to go back again and again!

[redflutterby]

You already know how I relate to this one...we both do actually. Reading it again just brings the words deeper into my mind. Its true that the clock keeps ticking so we must live every day to best of our abilities.....one of my favorites hun. xo

[Frieda P]

Hmm indeed I do...seems that time goes faster as we get older, there's something quite wrong with this concept, I wonder who thought it up? ;-) xo

[s y e]

I think we all tend to live in the past sometimes, not wanting to move on at all... maybe we are worried about what will come 'round the corner next or what life has in store for us. I love the analogy and the 'tick tock, tick tock' lines, kind of gives off a vibe that life is going so slow or even time.

I really liked this one, it's really well written as always, well done as per usual.

[Frieda P]

You have all the time in the world hon, you're so young, I'm green with envy....ahh to start over again, and know what I do now...make the most of it Sye, but have fun in doing so.

[s y e]

Depends what happens in the life you have... Just because we are young doesn't mean something won't happen to take all that away. Don't be green with envy, you wouldn't want to be young in this day and age.