Fractur'd Rhymes ~

Reclined into fond memories' better times

when words still surmised sunrise's gist

& life's illusions otherwise made sense

era before preservation's complications

misinterpreted silver linings

& forked tongued lies

simpler compulsion's conquering mind,

a place where rhythm still flowed

waters treading convolut'd at bay

swaying in serenity's beating meter'd restitution

before compensation's thunderbolt hit dust

in retribution's realization of your eyes

you did it to yourself, foreboding

nails in the coffin of misery's grasp

lost in absolution's frustrat'd institutions

lullabies' alibi singing songs

capturing sad violin's encore

of shadow'd landslides echoed clarity

fighting to break the habit's force

clock ticking quarter to cloud's resignation

driving blindly, two steps from hell's design

recreating tableaux peace of mind

alluding misrepresentation's past

relief in hurricane's blast patterns

can't own the rain without drowning first

if everything happens for a reason,

Why then, is the rhyme always fractured...

Author's Note

Reviews

[redzone]

Read this the day you posted Frieda. First much love and respect for this poem. It is one of your best, as not an ounce of whining as happens in a lot of poems written addressing the contradictions of suffering, abuse and the death these things cause as well as the heartache of those left hehind but trying to make sense of the reasons and whys.

You sharply identify many of these feelings in lines tense with the frustration of everything involved. I would have to quote your whole poem to express this, but you already know your poem. But I did appreciate the last few lines, not only for its conclusion but if read carefully for digging further into all you are presenting.

Yes, things do happen for a reason, BUT NOT FOR PREDETERMINED REASONS. We can know why something happens but it is not inevitable that they happen, or happen the way they do. Yes we do make choices, but the choices we make are determined by what we think is possible and are capable of doing and also that these choices are based in reality. Otherwise the choices will have very bad results... I realize I maybe walking heavily in your poem Frieda. Like a bull in the china shop. But it is because I appreciate this poem so much and how you are crafting it that I have attempted to express my thoughts.

And now I have written too much... it's so good to read what you write again Frieda even as your writing leaves my heart in many pieces...
~~redzone

[Rita L. Sev]

So many questions pain leaves in its wake... though really only that one question matters. For some maddening reason, we are not meant to know the whys. This is such a strong piece, Frieda; you have a gift for turning such difficult emotions into Art for all.

[Frieda P]

So sweet of you to say Rita, thanks muchly.

[Shirlena]

Yes, I can sense the underlying sadness in this piece. You should create a journal with the writes your sister inspires and then translate it into a book. It would be such a wonderful keepsake in her honor. Your touch garner's more appreciation that other's could benefit from on a broader scale and it could be therapeutic for you. An absolute lush vision of words with melancholy background.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Shirlena, a few other's have suggested that to me also, appreciate your thoughts.

[Porter]

Oh wow. Very relatable poem indeed, as I am sure any person that has experienced hurt or caused it can relate. I love the last little bit there, about not knowing rain without drowning first. Great connotations and poetry work there. ~Never Forget

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much, I kinda like that line too. :-)

[redflutterby]

Sigh....I do believe this is one of your best. The feelings and thoughts here are easily translated to any of our lives...the past pain and scars we wear. That last line sinks right into the heart....sad and poignant. So many why's in this world hun. Simply a fantastic write...a piece of you given for all to read. xo

[Frieda P]

Wow, thanks so much red...I thought some could relate, you know my situation, but you're right, it could pertain to so many. xo

[s y e]

A powerful read that really packs a punch. I can see from the comments already posted that you and your writing has been missed. At least you're back now and writing your words as well as sharing them.

Powerful, relatable and heart-touching.

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille noodlebumble...I won't refer to you as head, and what happened to my flip flops, did you grow up since I've been MIA? ;-)

[s y e]

I didn't want to overload with my intellect on your first day back. I can be quite overpowering. Wasn't sure if you had forgotten not. I'll change my name to what it's supposed to be. :-)

[Frieda P]

Ha thanks for looking out for my well being kiddo. ;-)

[s y e]

Yip, no worries.

[Roger Turgeon]

I thought I would stop by and challenge my mind melding capabilities again with one of your poems. My takeaway was that reality fractures dreams. How did I do? LOL

[Frieda P]

Ha if that's how you read it, it makes sense to me. ;-)

[Roger Turgeon]

Oh dear ( : O (

[Frieda P]

Poetry to me means different things to people, we read it through our own perspective's eye, truthfully this was about my son, but didn't expect most to get that....it's all good. :-)

[avant security guard]

sorry about your sister
there is sadness in the poem
I am not that religious, but I find peace, even the confidence to put one foot in front of the other, when I read the gospels--it's all about bad things happening, and why good people win in the end

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much for your kind words asg....muchly appreciated.

[David Scott]

I'm trying my best to stay lighter and avoid bring overly dramatic... ;)
I wonder how long I will last?
You know I saw more here.

[Frieda P]

Perhaps you should stay true to who you are luv, you already lost your way...haha

[David Scott]

I'm true dear. Just dialing it down a little.
My heart is as open to you as ever dear one.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

WOW Frieda, you may have been gone for a while but your skills have not rusted… damn that was snappy, witty, creative and feisty, awesome stuff.

[Frieda P]

You humble me Dale, thanks so much!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You are so very welcome.