joy
echoes within pain's mentality sinking to the depths of
hostility chasms of voided punctuation coming down the
virtual abysmal pike looking glass questions broken
molds whoever made you who you are now a fragmented
sustenance skyward in atmospheric holds paid the
piper tenfold coming round hard again gorged on
fear's master plot engulfed in self defense
hereafter altered the phoenix Lazarus's plight of fancy raised
the bar of hourglass lessons in dusty rewritten history's
score spoken amen upon kingdom's door knocked at
opportunity's disavowing contempt spurned
rejection's commencing cold shoulder sanctioned on a new
horizon's embrace ascended an amber moon's rising sun upon
retribution of salvation's pardon sang hallelujah in lofty
acceptance's key a
banshee's sermon lulled to slumber on its theoretic pillow of
white noise snores of rapt anxiety infecting peace of mind with
shallow heaves of doomsday rasp the keenest clan cremated their
prescription pills and withdrew into time capsule
rehabilitation the paid piper left to pad his vices
unattended stole away with the morrow's box of odds leaving
nothing but a stack of purity's defunct receipts a redundancy
of dizzy hourglasses retching on the flawed economics of
last resorts under guise of final offers history became negotiable
when languages erupted the doorknob exploded giving birth
to rhetorical landmines apathy's implicit damning of
philanthropy grew dimensions and entombed the breath of blue
infinity debunking it to death
Out of the ash
I rise with my red hair
And I eat men like air.
I absolutely love this except I would love to know who wrote what. I think I can tell by each of your writing styles now but I'd like to be sure. It looks like you each might be using descriptions to sketch each other and the way one see's the other but whatenever it is (misspelled on purpose), it is alright with me :).
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So jazz'd Shirlena, and I know Steve will be too, he's a big fan of yours also, the great Kublakhan .. read moreSo jazz'd Shirlena, and I know Steve will be too, he's a big fan of yours also, the great Kublakhan doesn't like to divulge that secret, sometimes I even forget which lines are mine ;) I bet you wouldn't be able to guess though....
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Probably not but thanks for sharing the secret though ;).
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Don't breathe a word of this to Benji ;)
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Oh I won't :) but now he'll probably read this page you know.
Haha Thanks so much Shirlena...yes there are methods to our madness, but our ability to sound like o.. read moreHaha Thanks so much Shirlena...yes there are methods to our madness, but our ability to sound like one person seems to have become our trademark judging by what many have said ;) So glad you enjoyed it :)
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Well I guess you do because I've read it a couple of times and I can make the line of demarcation :).. read moreWell I guess you do because I've read it a couple of times and I can make the line of demarcation :). Pleasures mine Kubla but the strange thing is when you write apart you don't sound similar...very interesting.
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So true my friend, I don't know how we do it, but we do share the same kind sense of wry humour (or .. read moreSo true my friend, I don't know how we do it, but we do share the same kind sense of wry humour (or cynicism?) to some extent, maybe that's how it starts...whatever it is, it's always been there :)
// knocked at opportunity's disavowing contempt
spurned rejection's commencing cold shoulder
sanctioned on a new horizon's embrace
ascended an amber moon's rising sun //
You guys are on a roll and did very well.. I loved this one. I think this might just be my favourite from you two. :-) My two most favourite people here on WC and you come as one to write always makes me the happiest person in the world. Great job!!
xoxo
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10 Years Ago
Your review has made me the happiest person in the world Noodlebop...this words mean more than I can.. read moreYour review has made me the happiest person in the world Noodlebop...this words mean more than I can say :) These were actually the first lines I've written since the last one we did and that was a couple of weeks ago...Frieda has a way of willing words out of me when I'm in a dry spell...I think she is a muse to both of us ;) Thanks again bud, so much. xo
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Woo, thanks so much noodlebumble, and silly Benji is so self deprecating, it took him under an hour .. read moreWoo, thanks so much noodlebumble, and silly Benji is so self deprecating, it took him under an hour to add to this collaboration, thanks muchly for this glowing review! xo
If you want to know me, read my poetry, it's all in there. I am a mother of three sons (my finest moments) a sister, a survivor and a little bit crazy. I lost my beloved sister to suicide, so you'll.. more..