joy
echoes within pain's mentality sinking to the depths of
hostility chasms of voided punctuation coming down the
virtual abysmal pike looking glass questions broken
molds whoever made you who you are now a fragmented
sustenance skyward in atmospheric holds paid the
piper tenfold coming round hard again gorged on
fear's master plot engulfed in self defense
hereafter altered the phoenix Lazarus's plight of fancy raised
the bar of hourglass lessons in dusty rewritten history's
score spoken amen upon kingdom's door knocked at
opportunity's disavowing contempt spurned
rejection's commencing cold shoulder sanctioned on a new
horizon's embrace ascended an amber moon's rising sun upon
retribution of salvation's pardon sang hallelujah in lofty
acceptance's key a
banshee's sermon lulled to slumber on its theoretic pillow of
white noise snores of rapt anxiety infecting peace of mind with
shallow heaves of doomsday rasp the keenest clan cremated their
prescription pills and withdrew into time capsule
rehabilitation the paid piper left to pad his vices
unattended stole away with the morrow's box of odds leaving
nothing but a stack of purity's defunct receipts a redundancy
of dizzy hourglasses retching on the flawed economics of
last resorts under guise of final offers history became negotiable
when languages erupted the doorknob exploded giving birth
to rhetorical landmines apathy's implicit damning of
philanthropy grew dimensions and entombed the breath of blue
infinity debunking it to death
Out of the ash
I rise with my red hair
And I eat men like air.
I absolutely love this except I would love to know who wrote what. I think I can tell by each of your writing styles now but I'd like to be sure. It looks like you each might be using descriptions to sketch each other and the way one see's the other but whatenever it is (misspelled on purpose), it is alright with me :).
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So jazz'd Shirlena, and I know Steve will be too, he's a big fan of yours also, the great Kublakhan .. read moreSo jazz'd Shirlena, and I know Steve will be too, he's a big fan of yours also, the great Kublakhan doesn't like to divulge that secret, sometimes I even forget which lines are mine ;) I bet you wouldn't be able to guess though....
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Probably not but thanks for sharing the secret though ;).
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Don't breathe a word of this to Benji ;)
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Oh I won't :) but now he'll probably read this page you know.
Haha Thanks so much Shirlena...yes there are methods to our madness, but our ability to sound like o.. read moreHaha Thanks so much Shirlena...yes there are methods to our madness, but our ability to sound like one person seems to have become our trademark judging by what many have said ;) So glad you enjoyed it :)
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Well I guess you do because I've read it a couple of times and I can make the line of demarcation :).. read moreWell I guess you do because I've read it a couple of times and I can make the line of demarcation :). Pleasures mine Kubla but the strange thing is when you write apart you don't sound similar...very interesting.
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So true my friend, I don't know how we do it, but we do share the same kind sense of wry humour (or .. read moreSo true my friend, I don't know how we do it, but we do share the same kind sense of wry humour (or cynicism?) to some extent, maybe that's how it starts...whatever it is, it's always been there :)
I absolutely love this except I would love to know who wrote what. I think I can tell by each of your writing styles now but I'd like to be sure. It looks like you each might be using descriptions to sketch each other and the way one see's the other but whatenever it is (misspelled on purpose), it is alright with me :).
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
So jazz'd Shirlena, and I know Steve will be too, he's a big fan of yours also, the great Kublakhan .. read moreSo jazz'd Shirlena, and I know Steve will be too, he's a big fan of yours also, the great Kublakhan doesn't like to divulge that secret, sometimes I even forget which lines are mine ;) I bet you wouldn't be able to guess though....
10 Years Ago
Probably not but thanks for sharing the secret though ;).
10 Years Ago
Don't breathe a word of this to Benji ;)
10 Years Ago
Oh I won't :) but now he'll probably read this page you know.
Haha Thanks so much Shirlena...yes there are methods to our madness, but our ability to sound like o.. read moreHaha Thanks so much Shirlena...yes there are methods to our madness, but our ability to sound like one person seems to have become our trademark judging by what many have said ;) So glad you enjoyed it :)
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Well I guess you do because I've read it a couple of times and I can make the line of demarcation :).. read moreWell I guess you do because I've read it a couple of times and I can make the line of demarcation :). Pleasures mine Kubla but the strange thing is when you write apart you don't sound similar...very interesting.
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So true my friend, I don't know how we do it, but we do share the same kind sense of wry humour (or .. read moreSo true my friend, I don't know how we do it, but we do share the same kind sense of wry humour (or cynicism?) to some extent, maybe that's how it starts...whatever it is, it's always been there :)
Two brilliant minds combined create a masterpiece. You took me on a roller coaster of life's ups, downs, sarcasm, wit, humor and morbidness. Loved it. Encore!
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Grazie mille my sweet friend, so jazz'd you enjoyed!
Nothing subtle here! This is powerful and thought provoking like buttery popcorn in my head and it is just busting the lid off! I love that! Not many poems get me worked up but this is beyond great poetry this is timeless. Brava my new friend! HUGS!
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Thanks so much Patricia, you've made my evening with your review and kind words...I know Frieda will.. read moreThanks so much Patricia, you've made my evening with your review and kind words...I know Frieda will love to hear it as well :)
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Ha, we don't do subtle ;) Thanks so much Patricia, jazz'd you enjoyed! xo
Once again you are able to sing with one voice. It flows perfectly but its notes hit upon discordant images that are powerful and thought provoking. And I agree that apathy has destroyed philanthropy and that line made me so sad. I did love this:
ascended an amber moon's rising sun
upon retribution of salvation's pardon
sang hallelujah in lofty acceptance's key
a banshee's sermon lulled to slumber
on its theoretic pillow of white noise
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Thanks so much my friend, it means the world to us knowing that our works are able to resonate on a .. read moreThanks so much my friend, it means the world to us knowing that our works are able to resonate on a deep level.
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Ahh so sweet you picked out both our lines, thanks so much Anne.
WOW...this one just knocks the reader over. They say white noise is supposed to help you sleep but theres nothing to yawn about in this poem. Its another wild ride that blasts you from side to side. Lol... oh and I love the Sylvia Plath quote. Wonder why?? Ha... bravo you two. Well done...another amazing collab..;-D
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Haha Thanks so much Red, your support means the world to both of us as you know...you can thank Mrs... read moreHaha Thanks so much Red, your support means the world to both of us as you know...you can thank Mrs.R for the Plath quote, which probably goes without saying ;) I'm sure Frieda will be around soon, and will also offer her thanks :D
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Ha I figured you would Red, how apropos eh? ;) Thanks so much x
Leonard Cohen, Sharon Robinson and this line:
"upon retribution of salvation's pardon
sang hallelujah in lofty acceptance's key
a banshee's sermon lulled to slumber
on its theoretic pillow of white noise".... never knew you could get salvation from a banshee's sermon, and flowing as it does between you two, I think perhaps the hallelujah is also off key... but the line that threw me most was the first 2 lines:
"joy echoes within pain's mentality
sinking to the depths of hostility"... suffering is indeed joy within pain's hostility...
if reading your wonderful collab is stepping on landmines then I am writing this disembodied in rhetoric and happy for reading... Thanks Steve, Thanks Frieda I am off to find some glue and put myself back together... ;0) ~~redzone
Thanks so much my friend, we're always happy to hear to hear that someone enjoys reading them as muc.. read moreThanks so much my friend, we're always happy to hear to hear that someone enjoys reading them as much as we do writing them :)
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I know this is true cause I can see two smiles even from NYC
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Ha hope you got yourself back in one piece, love your reviews, always hon xo :)
Everything in this write was smooth and effortless. You both make a great due contructing a fantastic write. I love the title and coincidentally, my favorite line was this.
"on its theoretic pillow of white noise"
Amazing piece of work between the both of you! Fantastic! xo (:
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Thanks so much Madalyn :) We do spend a good bit of time on making sure they flow well, though this .. read moreThanks so much Madalyn :) We do spend a good bit of time on making sure they flow well, though this one came together quicker than usual :)
If you want to know me, read my poetry, it's all in there. I am a mother of three sons (my finest moments) a sister, a survivor and a little bit crazy. I lost my beloved sister to suicide, so you'll.. more..