stuck on a hook....................................................................

cobalt metal monkeys cling

in reeling creative circus chaos

like dripping molten ash

ache from the fallout

you exhale darkly riddled pain

i inhale smoky denial

lives lit on fire

spun in gray matter

disjointed cold sober allegories

falling from a desolate sky

craving kicks inclination

embers hitting pay dirt's

fix'd enslavement

stuck on a hook

self destruction’s behavior

bent on indifference’s 

obsessive sweet tooth

jonesing for a speeding bullet  

an injurious habit's alibi

shot through the eye

at the scene of the crime

more than one fatality suspect

poppy blooms wither'd

sacrificed in crimson's desire

whilst laid out in entomb'd 

conviction's escaped act of faith

Author's Note

Reviews

[paddy d daly]

The vicious circle twists and turns, denials and justifications become all the rage, then finally it all turns flat, well described missus...

[MsJewel]

Addiction is a scary thing...you have described it well
my favorite lines:
self destruction’s behavior
bent on indifference’s
obsessive sweet tooth
jonesing for a speeding bullet
You are an incredible poet Frieda
:) Julie

[Rita L. Sev]

That monkey is hell bent on taking everything good in a life, and making it feel so good until it doesn't feel any way at all...

[Scott Metro]

Now I'm addicted....to your charm.
Good descriptive write.
Excellent..!!
Scotty

[Ghost of Jupiter]

Ah, it seems like forever since i strolled through your word garden, Frieda... and this poem is such a thorny rose, yet still so beautiful... It seems like addictions, to all things in life, can resurface and cause destruction, at any time... poses many questions and provokes introspection on a deep relatable level. Well done, as always.

[s y e]

Wow, I couldn't even pick out any lines here, they were all so fabby. Addiction is a hard thing to overcome. We think to do it once but that's the never the case, we do it over and over again and then we can't seem to turn back.

A tough read.... xo

[Pryde Foltz]

stuck on a hook
self destruction’s behavior
bent on indifference’s
obsessive sweet tooth

We can be our own worst enemies sometimes. You think we would want better for ourselves. Word magic, as alway.

[Brittany Zedalis]

You described addiction perfectly...really wonderful job, Frieda!

[icelandicblue]

There are so many fabulous lines here. It rips at the fabric of existence and burns it up in smokey heap of emotion.

[Baby Ricochet]

I really like this one frieda. It reads addiction and sudden death. Someone can be dead in an eye blink. Bet on that