I dreamt...

I dreamt you

        were crying

    upon my face,

                    tears slid gingerly

         down my cheeks

      streaked in poppy's 

                 scarlet blood

                  etch'd a trail 

            borne of thunderous fire

            in defiled lies 

                      mine own eyes

            recognized cause-effect

                        thirst'd in the

 name of the father

                          of holy ghost's 

     spiritless guise  

                               took its toll 

upon

 your gypsy soul 

                                  as  you leapt to 

              darkly unfathomable heights

                

Reviews

[Shirlena]

I don't know why this poem seems to take me somewhere dark and then I looked down and saw the image which made me feel like I was going in the right direction. (This is what I mean Frieda about the images surrounding your poetry. Is this also photo bucket?). This sounds like to me someone bearing the guilt of something. Enjoyed the shadowy depictions this piece creates.

[Frieda P]

Major guilt, I think it goes with the territory when you lose someone to suicide, thanks for your thoughts Shirlena...I don't recall where that graphic came from, sorry.

[Shirlena]

I have heard that is one of the emotions that one deals with Frieda (I'm sorry).

[Michael Stevens]

An excellent, dark, brooding poem Frieda!

[Vidya Bacchus]

This is so sad chica, It breaks a pazzo's heart.The reality of life wears us down sometimes :)

[Lyn Anderson]

A great sense of loss and melancholy in this piece. A flawlessly beautiful write.

[Marie]

This is dark. It makes me think of a ghost crying...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this is so good, and i like how you intertwined the religious imagery into the piece...really worked...and the idea having someone else's tears slide down our cheek...to be that close in heart and soul with another...

magical poetry here. may be my all-time favorite from you, Frieda.

jacob

[Chris Micha]

Simply beautiful ma'am! "borne of thunderous fire in defiled lies"....brilliant :)

[Bowers]

very emotional, and deep, beautiful though sad....

[Simran Kewlani]

A dark and amazing poem indeed. (:

[Sami Khalil]

Whoa. I hope you can sleep after this dream. Those defiled lies are having a lot of cause and effect in the dark corners of recognition. His tears are probably what they call crocodile tears. A splendid poem as usual...:)....

[Madalyn Beck]

This is a dark and emotional write. Phenomenal. I am literally rendered speechless. You have said exactly how it can feel at times. Blown away. xo :)