Poppycock'd

Pick'd a peck of poppycock

   pocketful of broken posies

petal by bloodless petal

     they read...

'he loves me not'

    secret rendezvous

        in each bloomin' lie

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Nusquam Esse]

As always, you have a natural talent with words here; and so much clever word-play. First of all, I love the pun here, Poppycock indeed. ;) Playing off the traditional rhyme (although I am pretty sure the original uses peck and not pack), to make a tonguetwister was a clever idea... but still not the masterstroke that your final line was. I adore the imagery of "blooming lie" and in its myriad of meanings (although hearing blooming in slang, I never hear the 'g'), so maybe go with bloomin' just for the sake of the pun?

[Frieda P]

Yes I think you're right, I saw the graphic and wrote it in about two minutes...forgot that it was peck, but I like the idea of bloomin'....thanks so much.

[s y e]

OMG, it's like a tongue twister at first. This really packs a punch, Mama F -- You just about kicked me out my window.

[Frieda P]

Ha hope it didn't hurt muchly gigglenoodles ;-) Grazie mille...

[s y e]

I'm alive as far as I know... pinch me? :-P

[Frieda P]

Don't tempt me, you know how much I want to pinch those cheeks. ;-P

[s y e]

Oh shush you, my cheeks are.... weird.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Not sure what hurts worse, the tongue twisting words or the emotion punch expressed in this poem.

[Frieda P]

I would say the bruised petals, thanks muchly Dale...

[Marie]

Very good. Thhose "bloomin'" petals better be lies.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Marie.

[redflutterby]

I smell some cheating in this flowery tale... ha!! Poppy c**k is right!! Lol..good one hun. Now where are those hedge clippers??

[Frieda P]

Ha hedge clippers, now there's a plan....that's like the ultimate Bobbitt haha........!

[redflutterby]

Yep....you know that bobbitt incident happened in my hometown. Lol...

[Frieda P]

Seriously? ha...did you go hunting for IT? I guess you're all wackadoodles eh? hahaha

[redflutterby]

Hell no....but a friend of mine knew the cop who saw the tiny shriveled remnant. Lol... him and the first two cops on the scene had quite a joke session over that crap.

[Frieda P]

Ouchie, I'm not even a guy and that hurt!

[ron]

OMG I feel this so much Frieda. Wow.

[Frieda P]

Sorry that you do Ron....I know what that feels like, thanks.

[ron]

You are most welcome Frieda. Your very sweet thank you.

[Rob Santana]

I like the tongue twista in the beginning. Secret rendezvous' can be fun. Because it's secret, ssshhh .....

[Frieda P]

I'll never tell........do you wanna know a secret whoa oh, oh....

[Rob Santana]

Hahahaha, I'm full of secrets. 98% percent of them are not even mine. They belong to others, haha. God. I can blackmail so many BUT I'm loyal to my friends. I have room for a couple of your secrets Frieda.

[Sami Khalil]

Beautiful and sad in its brilliance. You have a rendevous with love I hope. :)............

[Frieda P]

Yep me and love rendezvousing like crazy. ;-) Thanks muchly Sami.....................

[Sami Khalil]

Hahaha...You are welcome muchly...:)...................

[Ghost of Jupiter]

Ahhhh I knew there was going to be beautiful brilliance in this... I adore the word play here and had to read it aloud... This is a favorite, simply wonderful, Frieda!

[Frieda P]

You're too kind K...I told you there wasn't much more than the blurb. ;-) Grazie mille!

[Ghost of Jupiter]

Oh but it was just enough... Absolutely loved it!