Poppycock'd

Pick'd a peck of poppycock

   pocketful of broken posies

petal by bloodless petal

     they read...

'he loves me not'

    secret rendezvous

        in each bloomin' lie

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Nusquam Esse]

As always, you have a natural talent with words here; and so much clever word-play. First of all, I love the pun here, Poppycock indeed. ;) Playing off the traditional rhyme (although I am pretty sure the original uses peck and not pack), to make a tonguetwister was a clever idea... but still not the masterstroke that your final line was. I adore the imagery of "blooming lie" and in its myriad of meanings (although hearing blooming in slang, I never hear the 'g'), so maybe go with bloomin' just for the sake of the pun?

[Frieda P]

Yes I think you're right, I saw the graphic and wrote it in about two minutes...forgot that it was peck, but I like the idea of bloomin'....thanks so much.

[Rita L. Sev]

This one explodes with the fire of your words, Frieda!

[Lyn Anderson]

This is clever, and bitter, and ouch! Such a purrfect sentiment in so little said.

[Madalyn Beck]

Frieda! This is short, delicate, with a touch of malice. The malice of course wins out. You have a way with words, my dear, and you continuously blow me away with each bloomin' write! xo :)

[KWP]

sounds like that broken hearted lover needs to get out and find herself a new and sexy and handsome and compassionate and preferably happy to use his tongue when called upon ..... x x hehehe love to you chickka xx

[Blue]

Got my tongue twisted (in my head, at least) in the first few lines but I sure adore "'he loves me not'/secret rendezvous/in each bloomin' lie". The words have a dreamlike, nostalgic effect on me. Reminds me of those days when me and my girl friends pluck out petals from summer flowers while chanting "He loves me. He loves me not." And when we didn't like the answer, we'd murder another random poor flower again. :)

[Einstein Noodle]

short and to the point ... the turn in your second line is dramatic for me ... first line i'm smiling and prepared for some Frieda humor but no ... second line i'm dashed to the rocks in sorrow and pain ... thats what lies do :(((
E.

[Frieda P]

Yep that and then some, thanks muchly E. x

[Pryde Foltz]

Wow … Frieda. This is one is bloomin' awesome. You prove here that short can be astounding.

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille Pryde, you know I'm not usually this brief, jazz'd you enjoyed.

[FlamingPhoenix]

Very nicely stated! I LOVE it--and so fitting for my mood at the moment--and my lesson of the day--(40 Lessons)--Thank you as always for sharing! Each time I read your work, I find myself delighted by the experience!

[Frieda P]

What a kind thing to say, thanks so much FP!

[VelvetRosetta]

I have to smile at this one...speaks volumnes!

[Frieda P]

Thanks muchly VR!

[Vidya Bacchus]

You had me at poppycock lol.Written in your unique style chica .Awesome :)

[Frieda P]

You just like to hear me babble on, admit it pazzo ;-)

[Vidya Bacchus]

I love,love love hearing you babble it is right up there with coffee so you know :)

[Frieda P]

Wooo doing the happy dance now.. ;-)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Hahaha funny chica :)