Whispered transparency...‏

I drank you in whilst

                      you exhaled

            untamed desire's 

                      exquisite kiss

       whisper'd on the whirlwinds

                    echo's of destiny  

     nestled upon lofty 

                 feather'd sentiments

    impassion'd thoughts 

                floated on a whim

  glimpsed a prism

             in the eye of devotion

  skies transparent 

               on emotion's horizon

   illusions of a time

                       before fated cloudbursts

Author's Note

captcha ~ whimling

Reviews

[redzone]

"glimspsed a prism/in the eye of devotion". Frieda this sent me on a multi-colored adventure, these words. Cause a prism separates light into all the colors and in the way you use, or as I see it, gives rise to many and perhaps all possibilities that a love could give or promise. All the feelings that allow us to appreciate and cherish each other.

And then you hit us with the last 2 lines, that it was lost in the reality of the way most loves are illusion. This cloudburst that floods our hearts with pain. I love your poem Frieda and I know that until I die I would always look for the cloud burst to nurish rather than destroy. Also partial to those untamed desire's exquisite kisses. Oh yes indeed.. ;0) or, in the words of bumbblenoodle, jazzed flip flops 10000/1000 prisms and twice as many snap, snap, twirls... phew now I'm dizzy... but Frieda it was worth it. ~~redzone

[Frieda P]

Love where this took you Curt...jazz'd you were dizzy, that made my day dear friend, you humble me always with your kind words.

[Patricia]

I remember reading this one before I joined here and fell in love with this piece. Just wanted to let you know. Very touching

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much for letting me know Patricia, I'm glad you enjoyed.

[Lyn Anderson]

Sexy, sensual, and romantic. A lovely poem.

[Frieda P]

Thanks KL.

[Sami Khalil]

" nestled upon lofty

feather'd sentiments




impassion'd thoughts

floated on a whim"

Beautiful lines through and through the prizm of feathered hope and zephyred joy. Passibilities are multi-colored as feelings are multi-layered. Excellent...:)..............

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille Sami, sorry for the late response, seems the cafe likes to mess with my alerts, jazz'd you enjoyed. :)

[Sami Khalil]

No problem. You are welcome muchly...:)................

[lee von cleef]

the old school trash can, tall thin paneled lines down and up again its sides,
Full of primitive, for my life is,
I am primitive
Primitive focus now white oak coiled pressed shavings , a bed sharing the sun with
Cashmere char grey cat,Silent sensitive asleep, Home.
Oh to sleep so, but it is cold.
I need
I need those shavings to start the fire in the wood stove.
Primitive Transparent Need.

[Frieda P]

An enchanting response lee.....thanks for always sharing your quirky thoughts.

[s y e]

Did you hear that, Yes? It was me sighing because of this magnificent poetry. I love reading your poetry, especially when all I can do is lie in bed because I'm ill, aha. I really loved this one, Frieda and the picture is stunning. xo

[Frieda P]

You know I always love a sigh from you sweet pea, thanks muchly. xo

[Vidya Bacchus]

Oooh chica this is splendid poetry you have penned makes a pazzo poetress sigh :)

[Frieda P]

A pazzo poetess sigh, now that made my morning. ;-)

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are too sweet chica.I fear I may get a sugar high from your sweet words :)

[Frieda P]

Sounds good to me, want some coffee with that suga? ;-)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Woman you know me so well.Hell yes coffee !!!

[Frieda P]

Ha I'll leave you with two cuppas, off to bloody work, oh boogah. ha....will be back soon!

[Vidya Bacchus]

Haha laters chica thanks for the coffee :)

[ron]

So beautiful Frieda.
I drank you in whilst
you exhaled

untamed desire's
exquisite kiss.

Very passionate and sexy.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much ron.

[ron]

You are most welcome Frieda. And thank you for your writings.

[Trace]

Very Whimling write. Sorry, had to do it.
Enjoy your style and presentation of your work.
Very nice.

Trace

[Frieda P]

Haha captcha scare me sometimes. Thanks so much Trace, jazz'd you enjoyed.

[redflutterby]

What can I say...sigh. This one has a bouyancy to it. It lifts you up as if youre in the basket of a hot air balloon...and you peer back down through clear skies to see the world below. Maybe its just my Monday mailase and your words make me want to float away. Lol... beautiful hun. ;-)

[Frieda P]

Oh I love the hot air balloon analogy...almost went there, great minds and all that jazz. ;-) Yeah Monday, nuff said haha Grazie mille Red.