Twist'd fate....

sell thy soul for white lightning's glare

   falling into your darkly crown'd rapture

reigned down in torrents of scorch'd feathers 

    deviltry in disguise of absolution's grace

masquerading in snake charmer's illusions

    twisted fate knelt in quagmire's demise

flipped a notion under its sinking breath

   one hundred proof red wine's squeeze 

confessional's lie in rewards to sin again 

   blessed are the cracked for they do not see

pretty scarlet orbs fell from pardon

    in painfully peering testy skies

temptress captivated by mirth in kingdom's girth

    ecstasy of agony 'tween the gray spatters 

sold down the shiny river's holy water

     offerings & trinkets of delicate lace

bent knee fireplace amenities excluded

   prisoners held hostage in cobalt'd clouds

promises of poppy's alluring sting

     in the name of who's gospel'd hallelujah 

cloak'd in haunted ever afters 

   wrapped in warped delusional remorse

tinged of crimson's secret scent'd lure

   took a dive where angel's tremble

rushing hangnail moon's salacious rancor 

   ascended in sanctity's virginal volition 

surrender'd in a dwelling of salvation's embrace

Author's Note

Reviews

[redzone]

After reading your poem (several times now), I stood took inventory on all my moveable parts (and grey matter) and let out a big hallelujah, I'm still alive and not in some delusional, hypocritical dream looking for redemption. Of course now Bob Marley's " Redemption Songs" is playing in my head, but I'm getting ahead of myself. Frieda, WTF (not allowed to curse)!! This is some trip you are taking us on.. delusional remorse, virginal volition, and more.. but with all you metaphorically and imaginative images can there be a salvational embrace, surrendered or not.. I think not..

Of course another explanation for my review is too much of that 100 proof wine... hic. But high or not..er..I mean lover

[redzone]

Loverly poem Frieda

[Frieda P]

Ha Bob is always welcome, caught this on live feed and I was laughing already, you always blow me away with your reviews Curt....follow along with my twisted mind, and help yourself to the wine, yes. Chin chin. ;-) Grazie mille sweetie. x

[redzone]

I'm more than willing to follow along Frieda, but I may need you to hold my hand at times. My mind is cobwebbedcovered, yours twisted, I see scorched feathers and customer's demise ahead.. xxoo ;0)

[Frieda P]

Sound pretty perfect to me. ;-)

[redzone]

Would you believe I typed quagmire and not customer.. amazing

[Frieda P]

Ha I was wondering ftw you were tawkin bout. ;-)

[redzone]

TFW not sure either but then..

[FlamingPhoenix]

LOVE this piece! Kublakhan27 was right about you! You are a truly gifted and amazing writer!

[Frieda P]

I don't pay him hardly enough...ha, thanks so much FP!

[Rose of Gondor]

there's a little bit of everything in this poem. I love the imagery going on and the words feel sophisticated and yet sarcastic, like they're taking their jab at the world and its going-ons. I like the bitterness of this poem, and count myself blessed for being young enough to not understand them all quite yet.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Rose, I enjoyed your review....

[Rose of Gondor]

you're SO welcome :D It was my pleasure entirely.

[Simran Kewlani]

Really good. It is amazing. (:

[Frieda P]

Thanks Simran, glad you enjoyed. :-)

[Deuces]

I felt a lot of "selling your soul" and religious hypocrisy within the context of this poem.

Lines like:
confessional's lie in rewards to sin again
blessed are the cracked for they do not see

Reminded me of how confessions/pardons make way to repeat offenders and that there is no true penance. And then I found your favorite... "volition." Your poetry makes me now use that word in my daily conversation. References to white lightning and 100 proof red wine had me wanting to get a drink, but again, I believe these were analogies to sin.

An interesting piece. A lot going on. Sin, remorse all in some cyclical whirlpool.

Different, but I enjoyed. Nice work, Frieda.

[Frieda P]

This is what happens when you go to Catholic school for five years, confession was always perplexing to me, as if telling a man of the cloth was the go ahead to do it again....organized religion just boggles the mind, they keep changing the rules and making up new ones as they go along....thanks for your insightful review G.

[Deuces]

Anytime, dear. You know we think alike! I agree wholeheartedly.

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

And this is why you sit so highly amongst us... Just incredible magic going on in this piece. You truly display that writing is a gifted passion. I loved every line here... Dense complexities, but so very reachable. Brilliant!

[Frieda P]

Ahh you humble me Travis, thanks so much neighbor!

[Rita L. Sev]

blessed are the cracked for they do not see...

Then blessed are we, Frieda; blessed are we...

Seeking grace in graceless times... love your word choices here.

[Frieda P]

Ha true that Rita, we're all cracked, thanks for your insightful review....

[Tina Louise UK]

I would love to take a peek inside your mind, fabulous read hunni :) x

[Frieda P]

Enter at your own risk Tia, bloody scary in there. ;-) x

[Baby Ricochet]

"100 proof red wine." Gotta be made by the Russians. Some interesting if not slightly surreal imagery in this one. Great Job.

[Frieda P]

Hmm don't think I ever had Russian wine....thanks Baby.

[s y e]

Wow, I cannot even begin to express how powerful this one is... it seems you are dying to get me flying out the window however, the outcome wouldn't be so nice. ;-) Just think, I will be so much closer to you by Friday. ;-P

I adored this one, this has to be my new favourite of yours! Flip flops & all that jazz! xo

[Frieda P]

Promises, promises sweet pea, you shoulda been here by now! Thanks noodlebumble. xo

[s y e]

I'll be like so many miles from you by Friday! Don't get your knickers in a twist ;-) xo