Choked on the antidote...

choked on the bite of your denial

         sipping darkness filled to the brim

throat closed in tasteless shadows

              drowned in contagion's overflow

flowery verbiage stabbing lured

              eyes pour'd of scar'd crimson blood

breath's rhythm, laboriously sobbing 

                of  darkly hue'd rose phrases

scorch'd of white lighting's glaring lies

                      written in your poetic stare

played the game within nightmare rules

            devil kept score in relentless paces

grim were reception'd badinage airs 

             torn into fleshy soul's creations

cut in line for a temper'd rhyme

           pretense for a formidable antidote

no cure for sopping contradictions

                  toying of cut throat's detest'd deceit  

Author's Note

captcha ~ passo

Reviews

[redflutterby]

You need to pour some sugar on that to make it go down easier!! Ha.. ;-p.

Seriously seems someone has swallowed a very bitter pill in the form of some dark realizations. Those thoughts were there all along but when placed in just the right light an epiphany was born. Now theres nothing left but choking down that nasty stuff.

On another note Def Leppard is the perfect way to start the day.... pour some sugar on me...sorry wrong song..xo

[Frieda P]

Love is like a bomb, baby, c'mon get it on...ooh sorry was carried away in your review...ha Thanks, got sugar I could borrow? ;) xo

[redflutterby]

Had...you know it!! I keep it in the pantry...lol!!

I'm hot sticky sweet...from my head down to my feet... do you want sugar... lmao!!! Now that sing is stuck in my head!!! ;-pp

[Einstein Noodle]

pounding and relentless lines Frieda! all wrapped in uncontrolled sobbing .. helpless under the spell of a torn and battered heart ... been there ... it ain't easy is it!? only the passing of time (as it where) only the passing of time .. demands retribution doesn't it!? alas ... they just skip on down the road unscathed ..
E.

[Anand Sehgal]

throat closed in tasteless shadows-my favourite line.
Marvelous play of words :)
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[Lyn Anderson]

Of course I love this, although I wonder if there is a need for an apostrophe in hue'd. As always, you trip well on the dark side.

[Scott Metro]

A dark one today Miss Frieda..
Enjoyed it though....well done..!!!

Scotty

[stars are far]

That is really very amazing..
I loved this one

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That is really very amazing..
I loved this one

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That is really very amazing..
I loved this one

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That is really very amazing..
I loved this one

[Madalyn Beck]

Oh my lanta! You have dug right into it and left no room for recourse. Fantastic job with this, Frieda. What a bitter pill to swallow and you have shoved it down my throat! In a good way of course! ;)

Love your work! Outstanding! xo :)

[Michael Stevens]

How bitterly descriptive, Frieda!