Choked on the antidote...

choked on the bite of your denial

         sipping darkness filled to the brim

throat closed in tasteless shadows

              drowned in contagion's overflow

flowery verbiage stabbing lured

              eyes pour'd of scar'd crimson blood

breath's rhythm, laboriously sobbing 

                of  darkly hue'd rose phrases

scorch'd of white lighting's glaring lies

                      written in your poetic stare

played the game within nightmare rules

            devil kept score in relentless paces

grim were reception'd badinage airs 

             torn into fleshy soul's creations

cut in line for a temper'd rhyme

           pretense for a formidable antidote

no cure for sopping contradictions

                  toying of cut throat's detest'd deceit  

Author's Note

captcha ~ passo

Reviews

[redflutterby]

You need to pour some sugar on that to make it go down easier!! Ha.. ;-p.

Seriously seems someone has swallowed a very bitter pill in the form of some dark realizations. Those thoughts were there all along but when placed in just the right light an epiphany was born. Now theres nothing left but choking down that nasty stuff.

On another note Def Leppard is the perfect way to start the day.... pour some sugar on me...sorry wrong song..xo

[Frieda P]

Love is like a bomb, baby, c'mon get it on...ooh sorry was carried away in your review...ha Thanks, got sugar I could borrow? ;) xo

[redflutterby]

Had...you know it!! I keep it in the pantry...lol!!

I'm hot sticky sweet...from my head down to my feet... do you want sugar... lmao!!! Now that sing is stuck in my head!!! ;-pp

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Such a dark poem, beautifully written.

Kaze~ ^_^

[Deron Alexis]

sounds like a painful game like 2 people just can't stop bleeding the other out like those who get caught up in acts of revenge and vindictiveness. way to capture it the devices used the symbol of the devil keeping score...genius oh and learned a word too "verbiage" ima use that one XD

[Saddam]

scorch'd of white lighting's glaring lies
written in your poetic stare
played the game within nightmare rules
devil kept score in relentless paces.

Great poetry. Well said and satuated poetry. Love the way of your description. Mighty feel.

[Brittany Zedalis]

Whew, wonderfully dark. Nicely penned! One of my favorites from you.

[Deuces]

My kind of piece. You know this. Devil kept score, huh? Must be some true deceitful words at hand.

Loved this for its raw, dark reality, with a taste of vengeance.

[LadySoDivine]

"played the game within nightmare rules
devil kept score in relentless paces"

Very dark poem, Frieda, just the way I like it! Excellently penned, your work always gives me new ideas. "Choked on the antidote..." How fitting for me, currently, considering I've been sick for a week, haha :D

[RichGee]

Dark beauty....
cut in line for a temper'd rhyme...
Very nice work my friend.

[Leslie Philibert]

a dark poem, the imagery finely put together..

[Tina Louise UK]

Loving this dark delight...good one hun! :) x

[Vidya Bacchus]

A very dark write there chica.It is like suddenly realizing things that you were trying to pretend didn't exist.