~ If ~

Tattooed in braille upon my heart

a soft quiver of your remembered touch

gently sigh'd shivers down my spine

convictions sketch'd in affectation's symphonies

moonlight sonatas blush'd of tangerine twilight    

shudders within caramel scented spirits' roar 

brought me dandelion's breaths savor'd heights

silver lining's fairy tale wafted to sky's disruptions

precluded of harmony's finale intentions

imperceptible etchings of a once upon my mind 

'if       you only knew, the only thing I still believe in

                                                                         ...is you'

  

Author's Note

Reviews

[MachinaWriter]

I was in love with this piece with that very first line. Tattooed in braille upon my heart. I had to read the poem a second time, because the first time through all I was thinking about was how wonderful that line is. But, once I did go through on my re-reading of this piece, I was quite happy to realize that there were many other wonderful lines with in it, as well. Caramel scented spirits' roar. You have a wonderful sense of imagery, and when you take them in as a whole (because it is so easy for me to get caught up in the beauty of an individual line with this piece lol) you're left with a strong impression of what is being conveyed and enough images to be the basis of personal experience and memories, shared in clever verse and painted words. AKA, loved it. For the individual beauty of each line and for the piece as a whole. Good work ^^

[Frieda P]

Ever since that movie Unfaithful, braille left an impression upon my heart, thanks so much for this glowing review, you blew me away MW! Grazie mille....

[MachinaWriter]

Oh, what a fantastic movie. And it was my pleasure, as always.

And Italian? You have many talents. All I know other than English is Swahili and some French. And only dirty pillow talk things in French lol

[Frieda P]

Ha I can barely speak Italiano, they spoke a dialect in my house and it hardly resembles the true language....everyone knows the dirty stuff it seems ;-) Yes, great movie, so do you think he turned himself in at the end or what?

[MachinaWriter]

I like to think they ran off to Mexico, because I'm a dreamer like that lol

[Frieda P]

Ditto that...her subway scenes made it seem all worthwhile though, not to mention in hi apartment...ooh lala haha

[MachinaWriter]

haha...for sure. I watched the movie because I heard about those scenes lol but then I appreciated the rest of the movie for what it offered even more.

[Frieda P]

She's really a great actor....I wish she'd work more. Or maybe she wasn't acting, one can only hope ha

[MachinaWriter]

Haha, either way is good enough for me lol

[Angie G]

Just a beautiful piece as usual.. one of my favorites hun!!!

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Angie!

[Lyn Anderson]

I love Shinedown, first off, and second, this is a strong piece. I realize finale may be totally poetically licensed intentionally, but to me, I like final. But hey, that is just me.

[Frieda P]

As long as I don't get my license revoked, it stands. ;) Grazie KL.

[Michael Stevens]

A quite excellent poem, Frieda!

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille MS!

[Michael Stevens]

"You're qvite velcome;" that's German for "sure!"

[kublakhan27]

You know what these pieces do to me love...they just stop me in my tracks and pull a sigh of sadness out of me. As brilliant as your poetry is, poem for poem, you seem to save your most poignant and powerful imagery for these pieces. Silver lining's fairy tale wafted to sky's disruptions...I've never come across a more eloquent articulation of a half-empty glass in my life, cuz that's what that line is. The final line is devastatingly beautiful, and tear-worthy. This, my sweetest friend, is a masterpiece...xo

[Frieda P]

Wow Benji, you just brought a huge, and I mean HUGE smile to this grumpy face this morning, thanks so muchly my sweet friend. :) xo

[kublakhan27]

So glad that I could lighten up your morning Mrs.R...I'm happy when I can make you smile :) xo

[redzone]

Hi Frieda... and all I can think to say is wow.. and repeat over and over and over, "if" and "is you"...

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much curt..over and over. ;-)

[m.s.early]

How touching and remarkably penned. What a lucky guy ;)

[Frieda P]

Thanks xavier :-)

[Vidya Bacchus]

OOOH hunny this is lovely .I know I say that a lot but your poetry is always very prettily amazing chica :)

[Frieda P]

Awh thanks pazzo....no worries, I never get tired of hearing it ;-)

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome:)

[Saddam]

You play like a magic. It is soooo nice that I read it read. Love the way you express. Thanks for sharing.

[Frieda P]

Thank you for reading Ssadd, glad you enjoyed...

[Saddam]

Thank you dear.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love the ending, and as for the rest, Eat your heart out, Beethoven!

[Frieda P]

Woo now this just blew my skirt up jacob! Thanks muchly my friend.

[AYVID N]

The first line has such a powerful effect. 'Tattooed in Braille upon my heart' When a memory is etched so deeply, what better way could there be of expressing it! All the lines that follow reinforce this belief beautifully.

There is always someone who has that powerful effect on us and we never stop believing in them. And the poem is a work of art.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Divya, coming from you means a lot...so jazz''d you enjoyed this one.

[AYVID N]

Goodmorning Frieda! You are most welcome! Have a lovely day :)

[Frieda P]

Morning to you too Divya...hope your day is as luverly as you. :-) What time is it there now?