~ If ~

Tattooed in braille upon my heart

a soft quiver of your remembered touch

gently sigh'd shivers down my spine

convictions sketch'd in affectation's symphonies

moonlight sonatas blush'd of tangerine twilight    

shudders within caramel scented spirits' roar 

brought me dandelion's breaths savor'd heights

silver lining's fairy tale wafted to sky's disruptions

precluded of harmony's finale intentions

imperceptible etchings of a once upon my mind 

'if       you only knew, the only thing I still believe in

                                                                         ...is you'

  

Author's Note

Reviews

[MachinaWriter]

I was in love with this piece with that very first line. Tattooed in braille upon my heart. I had to read the poem a second time, because the first time through all I was thinking about was how wonderful that line is. But, once I did go through on my re-reading of this piece, I was quite happy to realize that there were many other wonderful lines with in it, as well. Caramel scented spirits' roar. You have a wonderful sense of imagery, and when you take them in as a whole (because it is so easy for me to get caught up in the beauty of an individual line with this piece lol) you're left with a strong impression of what is being conveyed and enough images to be the basis of personal experience and memories, shared in clever verse and painted words. AKA, loved it. For the individual beauty of each line and for the piece as a whole. Good work ^^

[Frieda P]

Ever since that movie Unfaithful, braille left an impression upon my heart, thanks so much for this glowing review, you blew me away MW! Grazie mille....

[MachinaWriter]

Oh, what a fantastic movie. And it was my pleasure, as always.

And Italian? You have many talents. All I know other than English is Swahili and some French. And only dirty pillow talk things in French lol

[Frieda P]

Ha I can barely speak Italiano, they spoke a dialect in my house and it hardly resembles the true language....everyone knows the dirty stuff it seems ;-) Yes, great movie, so do you think he turned himself in at the end or what?

[MachinaWriter]

I like to think they ran off to Mexico, because I'm a dreamer like that lol

[Frieda P]

Ditto that...her subway scenes made it seem all worthwhile though, not to mention in hi apartment...ooh lala haha

[MachinaWriter]

haha...for sure. I watched the movie because I heard about those scenes lol but then I appreciated the rest of the movie for what it offered even more.

[Frieda P]

She's really a great actor....I wish she'd work more. Or maybe she wasn't acting, one can only hope ha

[MachinaWriter]

Haha, either way is good enough for me lol

[MsJewel]

Tattooed in braille upon my heart - you had me with the first line. Such lovely images and beautiful memories you have shared in this beautifully romantic poem. Absolutely stunning in every way Frieda. One of my favs by you.

:) Julie

[Frieda P]

Thanks Julie, coming from the romance mistress herself, means a lot. :)

[Anand Sehgal]

so emotive, and so eloquent. I loved the metaphors a lot :)
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[Frieda P]

Grazie mille Anand :)

[Rita L. Sev]

imperceptible etchings of a once upon my mind ... Frieda, you have so much more than a "way with words" - you have a way with heartstrings...

[Frieda P]

Awh thanks so much Rita, means a lot.

[therisa]

Oh Frieda am wiping away the tears, as I reread this poem of yours. Thinking, how I long to say, the final two lines, to myself and really mean them. Sadly, I have too baggage to toss away, first. Thank you, for sharing this.

[Frieda P]

Who doesn't have baggage....thanks therisa.

[therisa]

Wish I knew, Frieda, and your welcome.

[RichGee]

Tattooed in Braille upon my heart...WOW!
This is amazing! Your words paint such vivid pictures.
Another master piece.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much for your kind review Rich, you truly humble me....

[RichGee]

My pleasure always

[s y e]

So, I've read this a few times and each time it has left me speechless. So I thought I'd read it allowed and the eemotion just about knocked me off my feet. It was then that I decided to read it to my Gran two times and let's just say you've left her completely and utterly speechless.
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I cannot put in words how utterly breathtaking and sad this is. It is such a poignant write... The emotion is so deep and imagery so vivid that it leaves me speechless. I have been staring into this little box for quite a few minutes...

I just adore every single line.

Flip flops & all that jazz! xo

[Frieda P]

Oh my you've touched my heart sweet noodlebumble, tell your Gran thanks too. You know I'm doing the happy dance in my flip flops now....grazie mille! xo

[s y e]

She's read about 5 + poems. :P Welcome as always. Xo

[Frieda P]

Mwah for Gran! :-) xo

[Avinash]

Melancholic, Poignant and beautiful. It has a tranquilizing affect I must confess.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Avinash, I'm glad to hear you felt it so...

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Outstanding write Frieda. :-)

Kaze~

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille Kazie! :)

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

My pleasure. :-)

[paddy d daly]

ah! the old dandelion parachutes, that's what I call them, beautiful piece frieda, so many great lines, really liked it.

[Frieda P]

Oh I love that Irish, 'dandelion parachutes' there's a poem in there somewhere ;-) thanks so much.

[Baby Ricochet]

Ya gotta believe. Ya know what I mean?

[Frieda P]

ha don't ask me why but I thought of the cowardly lion in Oz saying 'I do believe in spooks' when I read this ;-)