~ If ~

Tattooed in braille upon my heart

a soft quiver of your remembered touch

gently sigh'd shivers down my spine

convictions sketch'd in affectation's symphonies

moonlight sonatas blush'd of tangerine twilight    

shudders within caramel scented spirits' roar 

brought me dandelion's breaths savor'd heights

silver lining's fairy tale wafted to sky's disruptions

precluded of harmony's finale intentions

imperceptible etchings of a once upon my mind 

'if       you only knew, the only thing I still believe in

                                                                         ...is you'

  

Author's Note

Reviews

[MachinaWriter]

I was in love with this piece with that very first line. Tattooed in braille upon my heart. I had to read the poem a second time, because the first time through all I was thinking about was how wonderful that line is. But, once I did go through on my re-reading of this piece, I was quite happy to realize that there were many other wonderful lines with in it, as well. Caramel scented spirits' roar. You have a wonderful sense of imagery, and when you take them in as a whole (because it is so easy for me to get caught up in the beauty of an individual line with this piece lol) you're left with a strong impression of what is being conveyed and enough images to be the basis of personal experience and memories, shared in clever verse and painted words. AKA, loved it. For the individual beauty of each line and for the piece as a whole. Good work ^^

[Frieda P]

Ever since that movie Unfaithful, braille left an impression upon my heart, thanks so much for this glowing review, you blew me away MW! Grazie mille....

[MachinaWriter]

Oh, what a fantastic movie. And it was my pleasure, as always.

And Italian? You have many talents. All I know other than English is Swahili and some French. And only dirty pillow talk things in French lol

[Frieda P]

Ha I can barely speak Italiano, they spoke a dialect in my house and it hardly resembles the true language....everyone knows the dirty stuff it seems ;-) Yes, great movie, so do you think he turned himself in at the end or what?

[MachinaWriter]

I like to think they ran off to Mexico, because I'm a dreamer like that lol

[Frieda P]

Ditto that...her subway scenes made it seem all worthwhile though, not to mention in hi apartment...ooh lala haha

[MachinaWriter]

haha...for sure. I watched the movie because I heard about those scenes lol but then I appreciated the rest of the movie for what it offered even more.

[Frieda P]

She's really a great actor....I wish she'd work more. Or maybe she wasn't acting, one can only hope ha

[MachinaWriter]

Haha, either way is good enough for me lol

[Cassie]

Hey My sweet friend, Hope sye gave you my greetings...Anyway I love this. I enjoyed enjoyed. Good way to get back

[Shubhangi]

you got me at the first line itself...'tattooed in braille upon my heart'....touched my heart.
beautiful piece...thank you for writing this poem.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Shubhangi...I like that line too, reminds me of a movie I once saw...

[LadySoDivine]

FRIEDA! You have included my favorite song ever in your author's note! And I am completely and utterly in love with your poem!

"moonlight sonatas blush'd of tangerine twilight"

Sometimes you really make me wonder - where do you come up with these incredible lines? And the first line just took my breath away, oh what wonderful poems you write! I cannot get the imagery of this poem out of my mind, I have to read it again. Wonderful piece of art!

[Frieda P]

You're much too kind, thanks so much LSD, love this song too!

[SAYED THANGAL]

very nice lines I like its simplicity , well done

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Sayed.

[B.J]

Beautiful I can say I've been there and know what it feels like

[Frieda P]

Thanks Barb, glad you enjoyed.

[B.J]

Yes I did enjoy the read

[Chris Micha]

Brilliant piece! Your words are like a feathers touch on the skin.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Christian, jazz'd you enjoyed!

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful and kind words led the reader to nice and cozy places. I like to fall into your sweet and tempting words. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Frieda P]

Thanks for this glowing review Coyote, much appreciate your kind words.

[Tai Ryens]

Braille tattoos that were imprinted years before and could only be deciphered by one specific person, and having that person return, but expecting you to be the same . . . I like how this opens up the prospect
of a future without particularly foreshadowing anything, whether or not the new you will work out with an old dog from the past . . . Well done.l

[Frieda P]

I always love your interpretations of my poetry, thanks so much Tai.

[CountNicholasAlti]

This was lovely. Beautiful imagery and advanced diction, it's exactly what I look for in poetry. There is always a threat in a poem like this, that one line may not be as complex and meaningful as the last, but there is no hesitation or lack of impression here. Well done.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much, glad you enjoyed.

[youvepassed]

your imagery is really enjoyable, but you need to consciously avoid cliche's. that said it creates a very beautiful and vivid moment that i in no way regret experiencing

[Frieda P]

Thanks for your critique, muchly appreciate the visit.