Hallelujah, you bore me...‏

you bore me,

stop shuffling that stuff

exhaling smoky vapors

steamy delicacies bite

moonlit zephyrs are a farce

butterflies altogether expired

envy and loathing are blank

posies wilted, lovers jilted

monkey's stuck in the eye

same old darkly sing along

poppies & Cohen over & over

*play it again Sam*

cotton candy castles take a dive

laughing in thine own face

lunatics missed the boat

in apostrophe'd apocalypse 

this is what they call  fantasmic idioms

repeating the same old tired phrases

air your dirty laundry closer to the disposal

Hallelujah!...there you go again...

Author's Note

captcha~overgoad

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

Haha Kind of ironic that I would take on this one today in light of line two and that other poem ;) I knew by the title that this would be something different, and you never disappoint. I love how you've turned many of your poetic trademarks on their ear here. So these are what fantasmic idioms are...I'm assuming that's your own creation for I've never heard the term before. Even in your humourous pieces I come away feeling as though I've learned something, usually how to write insanely brilliant poetry...kudos as always Mrs.R :) xo

[Frieda P]

Ha I had to check, that's too funny, I never even thought of that! I guess 'fantasmic' (oops I guess not, it's now underlined in red) is a word...if not, it should be ;-) Grazie mille Benji, always love to read your responses... xo

[kublakhan27]

Haha That's what Benji is for Mrs.R ;) I'm pretty sure it's a word, I stopped trusting the so-called spell check on this site aeons ago...they give me red lines for words that I know damn well exist, and see in a number of other places, so it isn't just me and my so-called big words haha The spelling would be phantasmic though ;) Glad you love my responses as much as I love reading your stuff Mrs.R :) xo

[Cryingkate]

What did you say? :-) ....

[Frieda P]

Some very clever, albeit crazy woman taught me how to deal expertly with such said situations...That's nice. ;-)

[Cryingkate]

Why I never ! How dare you talk that way to me.....:-)

[Frieda P]

I learnt from the bestest. ;-P haha

[Cryingkate]

hA you oughta pass that on to that red flutterfly..after reading last nights conversation with you two I bet that'll be a roar ... Oh my I loved being the house mouse on that one.

[Frieda P]

You know that's funny you should mention it, I had that in mind, but empty head that I am, forgot which poem you wrote it on.....help a gal out will ya? My CRS is bad these day. ;-)

[Cryingkate]

Blind leading the blind day hugh.... ? OK give me a minute to a decade I'll find it LOL

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, self pity does get awfully boring after awhile...so much we can take, but too too much...and

we want to stop reading.

love the sarcasm in this.

[Frieda P]

Grazie jacob...sarcasm is my second language. ;-)

[redzone]

2 quick comments... I'm gonna have to get that music on my nano... and Frieda, while I did read, understand and love your poem, a little "sing songy" but NOT boring.. er.. I mean, thank goodness for a "hallelujah" ending.. wait, I mean... actually, I also enjoyed the back and forth in some of the comments you got, they also were not boring... thought this line was particularly good: "steamy delicacies bite
moonlit zephyrs are a farce"...
and also (ok make that 3 things and not so quick) perhaps a trip to some tropical place (no not NJ) oh say in the area of Belize, might help with "boring" poetry... unless of course all there is to see is posies, butterflies and monkeys... LOL... er.. uhoh looking over my shoulder for that Zio guy you always use to do your dirty work... ok Frieda, here's "boring you" from NYC ;-p

[Frieda P]

Ha it's got attitude curt...I think Jack's idea was better....joisey is hardly tropical, I'm down with Belize, do they have posies, butterflies and monkeys though, just saying/ ;-) Ha Zio is out being Irish tonight..... ;-P

[redflutterby]

Hey thats what we need... a cruise to Belize...whoot whoo..lol

[redzone]

Phew .. wait NJ not tropical??? Hmmmm well NYC is freezingly hot!!! But no butterflies posies or monkeys here .. oh well I'm going to Fla soon I'll send you some boring post cards ..:-p

[Frieda P]

Sanibel Island or Naples and I'm so there.... ;-)

[redzone]

How about both?? Folks live in Naples but Sanibel is not far away ..

[Jack...]

Well, if this kind of stuff gets boring to you and you chose to go in a different direction, then I think the song that should be playing is, "We've gotta get out of this place" by The Animals, because when this stops so does poetry and the it will be time to go. You'll never find me bored with your poetry.

This is such a nice collection of words, phrasing and metaphors here, I think I'll keep this one around just for reference sake and because I love it.

[Frieda P]

Oh I used to love that song....great one, ain't no use in trying....thanks for the memories Jack and this great review.

[Jack...]

Always my pleasure to read your wonderful poetry

[Baby Ricochet]

"monkeys stuck in the eye" Man that is one messed up day at the zoo

[Frieda P]

By zoo you mean the cafe Baby ha ;-) Grazie

[Baby Ricochet]

Well a monkey is writing about half of my poetry

[Frieda P]

Smart monkey...

[Lyn Anderson]

Hope yer not bored with me apostrophe girl -- nary a review on my new stuff sniff sniff lol. and umm, I must question yer apostrophe'd strategy would it be apostroph'd or NO? Hugs and kisses in advance.

[Frieda P]

Read the following word, thought you'd get it if anyone! Sorry, been a hectic day, leaving soon, I'll have more time to dive into you. ;-)

[Lyn Anderson]

I love the captcha. Can't make that up overgoad. Awesome.

[Frieda P]

Ha I know, I'm not that clever...if I had written 'catastrophe' would you have gotten it...

[Lyn Anderson]

yes smarty pants, me thinks you are a brat.:) But I love you anyway.

[Frieda P]

Ha once I finally did it on purpose and I get call'd a brat! ;-P Love you too.....mwah!

[Lyn Anderson]

Well, yeah, and if I didn't notice, you woulda known I wasn't actually reading.

[beautiful dreamer]

lol have you noticed that you are very mature in writing but turn into a youngling in comments. i dont think ive ever seen anyone under the age of 30 use the spelling "gurl" lmao. anywho great poem and for the love of god message me back woman i have much to tell you!

[Frieda P]

A youngling haha don't I wish....thanks, sorry not getting my alerts...

[beautiful dreamer]

lol then dont mind the screaming comment bar lol.

[Vidya Bacchus]

"monkey's stuck in the eye" Really huh, very funny lady F :)

[Frieda P]

Ha I guess you missed that one. ;-)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Which one did I miss ?

[Frieda P]

Was referring to a couple of older ones about addiction....

[Vidya Bacchus]

Oh must be before my time lol

[Zahra]

Hahah nice one, thanks for sharing . Wonderful

[Frieda P]

Glad you got a laugh, thanks muchly.... ;-)

[Kristina Moulaison]

I was already laughing at the title. This is all clever, the biting sarcasm so witty and wonderful. Loved "air your dirty laundry closer to the disposal". I should try to write something like this...it felt way too good just to read it. Thanks!

[Frieda P]

Jazz'd you enjoyed my angst. ha, did you ever feel as though you keep saying the same thing over and over again....can't wait to read yours now! Grazie mille....

[Kristina Moulaison]

Don't we get sicker of ourselves than anyone else! Yes! :) Are you throwing out Italian? :)

[Frieda P]

No when I think out loud, it hardly works though, my Italiano is way off..........

[Kristina Moulaison]

You mean when we're writing, feeling like we're saying the same thing over and over? I do feel that way. maybe that's why I get sick of myself. :/

[Frieda P]

Yes exactly, I sometimes if I'll ever have another original thought...I guess it's a poet's plight.

[Frieda P]

That was 'wonder'...I have to stop tying so fast.........

[Kristina Moulaison]

I guess I'm reading just as fast cause I threw the wonder in there for you. :) Yes, I feel the same way, like I have nothing new to say. Oh well. What are ya gonna do, there's nothing new under the sun. Amazing that there are so many infinite ways to say the same thing though and that perhaps it can be seen or felt in a new way. The wonder of words.