Fickl'd Cravings

I have seen you in your divine graciousness

         & around darkly color'd spaces

I've tasted your exquisite nectar upon my tongue

          and felt the tang of your bitterness

Have craved your heat'd breath upon my skin

           felt your fickle chill'd shoulder upon my nape

We've aligned in perfect harmonious rhyme

             falter'd in our symmetry of authenticity

Been caught under your gray hurricane storm clouds 

              soaked in your light amber'd wash of rays

Dust particles 'tween our here and there

                 prance amidst our equilibrium, 

Knocking my heart off balance,

           tho' letting me land unto a soft haven

      Even when wildly sideways steps 

                         stomp me dead in my tracks

      Our tango'd dance of non-stop capricious whirling

                     still flips my world  upside down    

Author's Note

captcha~egomism

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

You certainly know how to bring a dance to life on paper Mrs.R, or the monitor if you will haha There is often a hint at danger too, a suggestion that there may be more to the partner in question...but when a man knows how to dance, that seems to make all the potential danger worthwhile ;) Lines eight and nine were swooners for sure. My name's going on your dance card for sure, and I'm bringing the grey hurricane with me ;) xo

[Frieda P]

You should see the smile on my face right now Benji. ;-D....love this review, you blew my skirt up. Dancing to your words and the thought of gray hurricanes. ;-) Grazie! xo

[kublakhan27]

Haha Well you should see mine ;D Glad I could get your feet moving Mrs.R, and your mind too ;)

[s y e]

Love the song, it's amazing.

As for your poem, it speaks volumes and honestly is my new favourite of yours.

// We've aligned in perfect harmonious rhyme
falter'd in our symmetry of authenticity
Been caught under your gray hurricane storm clouds
soaked in your light amber'd wash of rays //

I loved the imagery within these lines. I'm speechless. Great job once again.

[Frieda P]

Woo you know how I love it when you're speechless noodlebumble, thanks muchly sweet peanut.

[Claire in VA]

Thank you for sharing this lovely work!
You words are beautiful and are complimented well by the song.
~~~~~Claire

[Frieda P]

Thanks Claire, your kind words are muchly appreciated !

[Tina Louise UK]

Superbly done hunni..really enjoyed this one, love this song too :) x

[Frieda P]

Merci beaucoup Tia. ;-) x

[Mel Lisa]

wow this was beautifully written. wonderful tone and the music goes perfectly with the mood.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Melecia, glad you enjoyed.

[Brittany Zedalis]

This is so amazing. Grand job! Props for the song choice, as well xD

[Frieda P]

Jazz'd you enjoyed Brittany, thanks so much and love the new avatar. :-)

[Brittany Zedalis]

thank you :D

[@zeewhykay]

Oh god.. excuse me for not necessarily reviewing... I am just still hypnotized by the most beautiful ambiance song on your front page and this sensual dance of carefully chosen words.

" Even when wildly sideways steps "

Exquisite alliteration.. Seriously, being young and stupid, I barely have no choice of words that could bring this piece higher than it already is. I will definitely check out everything you have to offer. Thank you very much for this.
Cheers ~ !

[Frieda P]

Wooo doing the happy dance to your review, thanks so much Yann. Cheers!

[KAin]

Delightful wordplay, lyrical in its execution. Your masterful phrasing really makes this one shine. The rhythms of a heart in love makes for an interesting dance. Incredible work, Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Landred, appreciate your kind words.

[An owl on the moon]

An elegant fire of words and thoughts... how you weave this dance of heat and light, even on the fickle fields of love. And it is a dance, isn't it.. one we sometimes stumble over. Keep ever dancing. :)

[Frieda P]

Always dancing, it might not always be the right steps but you know? ;-) Grazie mille Craig.

[Jack...]

If I have never seen beauty, I have seen it now. This wonderful collection of words has danced its way right into my heart. This melodic piece is flowing with wondrous emotions and tempting thoughts that make my head swirl in a dizzying array of spectacular visions. My sweet friend, I know I can be a jerk at times...but when I find your words, your phrases, the amazing talent that is you, it is I who slaps myself in the back of the head and says...wake up, there's beauty to be seen.

My world would not be complete without your poetry...plain and simple. Truly amazing.

[Frieda P]

Such the flatterer poet Jack, thanks so much and your sweet words made me dance. Ha, I'm not touching the 'jerk' part. ;-)

[Lyn Anderson]

Yes, great job with the imagery and the word choice, now as to music, let's just say, you and I will agree to disagree, kind of like jumping out of airplanes -- I should start putting music on mine so you can see what I mean :)

[Frieda P]

You tawkin to Jack or me? ha...I like most music, probably country western won't float my boat that muchly, other than that it's a go...besides it always depends on what I hear in my head when I'm writing.

[ron]

Love the poem. Full of passion, romance, and love.

[Frieda P]

Thanks ron, you're hot when you're cold as Katy says. ;-)

[ron]

-blushing- Thank you Frieda ;)