Crush'd

Crippled teardrops ache

relief drips crimson pools

fragile heartfelt moments

buried deep within damage

misery rages in aged flames

afraid to breathe in fire,

scars affect hourglass time

dying in the anesthesia

cuts deep to the bone

annihilating freedom's tomb

killer instincts in sorted rush

bitter taste upon the soul

cold truths' pithless shivers 

strangers bared in rhyme

blood cours'd through cursed veins

crushed 'tween hung tooth'd denial

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

I enjoyed this play of words because it speaks of the way unfortunate memories seem to alter our perceptions in life while hardly bringing up an example. Just an outright expression for the way it grows within us, and how the emotions amplify with time. Your reference to strangers in the end intrigues me, though. Is it so that the strangers are actual strangers who indulge each other's memory, or is it that they are two strangers on opposite sides of the spectrum crooning the same tune? Nonetheless, well done, friend. Keep it up

[Frieda P]

I had the thought that sometimes strangers see our pain before those close to us do Tai, thanks for picking up on that one....always enjoy reading your thoughts.

[Brittany Zedalis]

Beautiful and dark imagery. True sorrow speaks through these words. Great job.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Brittany.

[Antoñyo]

Wow! If hearts had tempers and sharp teeth...
The one's a ripper! Love it!

Thanks!

[Frieda P]

Ouch yes...thanks so much for your thoughts Antonyo.

[Aethereal]

I feel the “cold truths” here:

Tears

It’s much more than wise
that all the world cries
over broken ties
through our liquid eyes.

[Frieda P]

Thanks for sharing Aethereal.

[Tam Warink]

Frieda, sometimes you write things that make me want to try and swoop you up and take you some where sunny. This is surely one of those things.

100 heartfelt moments

[Frieda P]

Sounds perfect to me Tam, thanks so much my friend.

[paddy d daly]

So deep, words want you to break out, no longer be ''Crush'd''....

[Frieda P]

Thankfully there's poetry, thanks paddy.

[Jack...]

The pain you must endure just destroys me inside. Your poem today is filled with this sorrow...each line cries to me in winter chill tear drops and the cold weakens me and brings me to my knees. My sweet Frieda you are an amazing poet and a dear friend. Always I look forward to a new work from you I just wish this theme did not have to be written.

100 frozen tear drops.

[Frieda P]

I wish the same, thanks so much for your kindness Jack, always appreciated.

[B-poet]

This is incredible Frieda. Loved the dark & deep imagery backed by your striking diction. Great work as always. An intriguing read. :)

[Frieda P]

Muchly appreciated Bpoet. :-)

[Rob Santana]

I'm still feeling a little crush'd, but each day that ends I feel a little better. Unfortunately there are scars left behind. Strong write Frieda.

[Frieda P]

I hear you Rob....thanks for sharing your thoughts my friend. x

[Vidya Bacchus]

You have on your dark lady pants today I see.

[Frieda P]

Indeed, some days they just fit best, thanks Vidya.

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are so right .You are welcome chica :)

[Frieda P]

Grazie pazzo! ;-)

[Scott Metro]

As dark as the demons eyes...
Good write Frieda...many dark writes out today..is there a disease going 'round.
Nice rendering...enchanting...
Don't start cutting yourself or anything...LOL
Scott

[Frieda P]

Nope, not a cutter, the music just worked, thanks so much Scott.

[Scott Metro]

My pleasure.....
Scotty

[Frieda P]

I know a few from the survivor site I'm on, I don't' really understand how cutting yourself in someone else's name helps, just adds to the angst I would think, but it seems to help them.

[Scott Metro]

Well..if you ever need someone to cut you...let me know...LOL

[Frieda P]

HA you're a beast!

[Scott Metro]

Hard on the outside..soft and chewy on the inside..like a good candy bar..wanna bite..??

[Frieda P]

Truthfully, I don't have a sweet tooth much, especially when they're covered in fur!!

[Scott Metro]

From the OSH candy company..it's the HIT bar...put that together..make you smile..LOL