Swept away in a quiver ~

Swept away 'tween rapture's dance

     paused naked round fiery embers

our souls like whispers

    hush'd in the wind's howls

stars smiled gently upon lusty skies

   enchanted lunar moon

      twinkling in his eye

         lit upon desire

sipping streams of dahlia wine

   drink you in with each sinful spin

thrumming in this twirl of ecstasy 

  music pounding in the heart

bodies pulsating to a swaying tempo,

   thrashing rhythmically in this crush

   fading into each breathless tremor

       sounded a gentle quiver

  bodies bent in intoxicating unison's swagger

connected in a rhapsodic concerto

   intertwined in synchronized euphoria

           exhalations of frenzied elation 

                      blared a sultry night

Author's Note

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

mmmmmmmmmmmmmm .... crisp morning outside (-10 actual temp) low hanging crescent moon as a cradle ... morning star just off to the right at 2 o'clock ... so your poem has entwined me in a simmering heat making -10 meaningless ... delightful dance, mood enhancing, tasteful and lusty my dear ... you have a gift ...
E.
ps. did you know that making out for a half hour burns 238 calories?

[Cryingkate]

Morning Einstein ! I been up since 5 and have been watching that same crescent and nearby star.
read moreMorning Einstein ! I been up since 5 and have been watching that same crescent and nearby star.
Awesome view it was. It was of meaning but I don't know what it is.

Ok. I'm off to self burn 238 calories......................... HA just kidding...

[Frieda P]

Such a poetic review dear E...ha, imagine all night long, can one disappear into the ether? ;-) Grazie mille.

[Einstein Noodle]

to Kate; isnt it grand and so simple as a glance to the sky to find our connection ...and to Ms. Frieda ... alllllllllllllllllllllll nighttttttttt longgggggggggggggg ... what a blissful obliteration alliteration...into the ether we go ....a fading too sublime :))
E.

[Frieda P]

What a way to go eh? ..............wooooo

[Cryingkate]

Einstein and Ms Freida """"""""""surrendering to the sublime"""""""""":-)

[Frieda P]

Ha there's a poem in there somewhere ;-)

[Cryingkate]

those with the eye must dive... Go for it..... Grab it take it consume it and spit it out!

[Frieda P]

Swept up in a quiverous tumult
who better to take on this ride
crisp mornings with a star
entwined in simmering lust
a delightful prance of heat
just me and my brilliant pal Einstein
surrendering to the sublime

Sorry had to borrow yer luverly words mwah! ;-)

[Cryingkate]

Hey hey Hey don't forget to take me with YA's.. HA you thought I was sleeping and wouldn't know.. Ha fooled you I was waiting at the Milky way in case you tried this...... :-) Good Morning Cosmic Friends..

[Frieda P]

Ha you ready to surrender dear? ;-) Morning...meet me at the east end of the Milky Way...

[Cryingkate]

You have never seen surrender till you have bathed in my eyes and I yours
When You see the eternal sister/brother hood.
When You remember who we are and have traveled these stars over and over together as one.
When Your Soul remembers I am you and you are me
We shall travel heaven's shore to shore with no need of that silver cord.
Every star shall brighten as we pass by,
Every moon, Every Sun Shall rejoice of our return
Coming to and fro among the Cosmos
Till we find that Mother Light that cradles once again till the new re birth


Hmm I just had to let go and see what happens.. Your turn LOL

[Cryingkate]

LEe it Rip ! You guys.. Get your Soul Naked and show me the Cosmo's from your eyes.

[Cryingkate]

Let ..........

[Frieda P]

Wooo, that's divine my friend....you need to publish that one ;-)

[Frieda P]

I think you burnt more than 238 calories with that little ditty ha

[Cryingkate]

I'm Hoping it will warm the Starlight up in you and Einstein. Oh send me word to feed my hunger of Star Travel. I so want to fly........I'm counting on you to take me...............:-)

[Frieda P]

There's always room on the crazy train for one more ;-)

[Frieda P]

you are the creamy in my coffee
the sublime to my surrender
marmalade for my toasty heat
fluffy socks to my chill'd toes
you raise me up when I'm down
turn me round when gone astray
you are a friend of mine come what may

[Cryingkate]

Are You Deaf? I said make me fly Not Cry :-)

How many Heavens can a butterfly travel to?
Is that Stardust on your wings?
How many passengers can fit on one Butterfly?
Can a Butterfly land on the moon?

Ps That Crazy Train leaft already and deposited me here on Writers Cafe.
How did you get here? LMBO

[Frieda P]

Oooh butterflies, now you're gonna make me cry! Ha muchly the same way as you...,HAha

[Cryingkate]

I'm Sorry, I didn't mean to make you cry. But You know though that Butterflies are free.:-)

[Frieda P]

Pssh and tush, you know nothing is free in this life ;-P

[Cryingkate]

I used to think that, But lately I'm starting to learn something different.
I'm learning about Freedom. I'm learning I can be free by my own will. It all is about chossing our thoughts.
I'm in Awe right now because it is so new to me. Like another world yet still here..
Strange new happenings...

[Frieda P]

Sounds blissful, perhaps you can teach me...

[Cryingkate]

NO Shitz ! I just got booted off writers cafe.. LOL
Too bad too! I
I hate having to rewrite something After I wrote it with teary heart.

Anyways I said I WOULD LOVE TO ! With All My Heart and Soul !
Write me when your ready :-)

[Einstein Noodle]

wait a minute .... i thought we were talking about all night blissful lusting calorie burning shenanigans ...??? don't leave me out!! :))
hugs and love girls! big big
E.

[Frieda P]

Ha funny, I love the word 'shenanigans'! Doh, who do you think my brilliant pal Einstein was?

[Einstein Noodle]

well yeh Freida! .... hopes it be me; but ... felt left out with you and cryin' babe carrying on ... i do love ya girl :)
E.
actually felt like fun writing "shenanigans" ..more room for expansive poetry there perhaps ... i think you are grand ...
E.

[Frieda P]

I think you were off sleeping, we had to keep ourselves entertained in the meantime with our own shenanigans ...I think you're grand too my friend, cheers. :-)

[Eric Pudalov]

Is it just "making out" that burns 238 calories, or actually having sex? I would imagine having intercourse burns more than that...hmm, good way to get in shape!

[Einstein Noodle]

to Eric .... nope.... 144+/- per half hour romp ... depending on ...well ???... .... so pucker up and help your mate loose weight ..
and excuse you ... this is a threesome going on here :)
ahahahahha weep on young man!
E.

[Eric Pudalov]

HAHAHA! Well, there's a first time for everything...

[ron]

My goodness Frieda. You have penned a most heart beating poem. I have come close to this but never as close as you have written here...:)

[Frieda P]

Wow thanks so much ron...muchly appreciated. :-)

[ron]

You are most welcome Frieda.

[lee von cleef]

“Love is what carries you, for it is always there, even in the dark, or most in the dark, but shining out at times like gold stitches in a piece of embroidery. ”
― Wendell Berry, Hannah Coulter

[Frieda P]

Oh I like that, thanks so much for sharing...

[lee von cleef]

Carving out a moment, to revisit, a mental hickey,That shows up when I take off a tee shirt, Oysters sea salt Flames drift wood dunes hot tin towels blankets coiled under the stars, no punctuation a thought smokey in my memory ,Led in my pencil.

[Frieda P]

ha a 'mental hickey' poor man...you're too much lee, grazie mille ;-)

[lee von cleef]

Refreshing to know you still have dimples !

[Frieda P]

Ha I'm still larfin' at lead in your pencil hon ;-)

[lee von cleef]

Ya , that's Casey he would always say "Eat those eggs , put lead in your pencil and you never know when you'll need to write a letter " I think I was 25 when I figured out what he was talking about.

[Frieda P]

Ha slow learner are ya?

[lee von cleef]

yep ,but I keep practicing.

[Frieda P]

Hahah I ain't touching that...

[lee von cleef]

me ether !!!!!!!!!! ( Had to count to Ten)

[lee von cleef]

( Did you count ?) Ok blonde ...

[Frieda P]

Frisky today arentcha? ;-)

[lee von cleef]

Duty calls, gotta go ...... no really its Ok if shes got ,got dimples on her ... but I love her just the same ! Maybe tomorrow, have to shovel...

[Frieda P]

Snow on it's way right now....where's spring?

[Coyote Poetry]

I need a week in the emotion of the poem.
"sipping streams of dahlia wine
drink you in with each sinful spin
thrumming in this twirl of ecstasy
music pounding in the heart
bodies pulsating to a swaying tempo,"
I like the lines above a lot. Good to know ecstasy and a heart running freely. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

thrashing rhythmically in this crush

[Frieda P]

Wow thanks for your kind words Coyote, means a lot.

[Brittany Zedalis]

This is a great poem for me to start my day off with. Great job! :]

[Frieda P]

Jazz'd you enjoyed Brittany. :-)

[Tina Louise UK]

Sexy, sensual read...enjoyed Miss Pickle :) x

[Frieda P]

Ha thanks Tia. ;-) x

[Cryingkate]

Know What ? You got me in the same place as the guys LOL You write from the passion itself. I never thought of that.I write from the female POV

Geez Freida , is this the ultimate when you suduce both ying and yang LOL
Ok I'm getting even.. I'm gonna nic name you Ying Yang Yanker :-)

[Frieda P]

Ha, what a name!! YYY? haha Thanks so much Connie, and hmmm, I never thought of it that way. ;-)

[Jack...]

Sounds to me like the perfect secluded evening beach, cool sea breezes upon passion heated skin, the sound of the surf gently lulling all thoughts to only this moment, two silhouettes outlined by moonlit pure white sand, palm leaves swaying in the sky above and love…wonderful, blissful love with nary a care in the world.

Frieda, this is definitely a wake up call this morning. Your words produce hypnotic feelings that carry me softly to this exotic destination. No disenchanted sandcastles on this beach. Amazing my friend.

[Frieda P]

You made it sound even better Jack, jazz'd it took you there, thanks muchly.

[Scott Metro]

Boy..you just gotta bring out the horns on the wolf at this hour..
Stimulating.
Seductive write.

Scotty

[Frieda P]

So what, you don't like it hot in the morning? Coffee I meant, just drink your coffee wolfie ;-) Grazie mille.

[Scott Metro]

Tease..!!!!!

[Frieda P]

As if you're not!!

[Scott Metro]

Me..?...of course not...!!

[Frieda P]

Ha are you a Leo by any chance?

[Scott Metro]

Gemini....and you..?

[Frieda P]

ROAR!!!!!! gah a gemini it figures Impulsive, restless, devious, indecisive....

[Scott Metro]

nobody's perfect..lol..and..I suppose you're a Libra....?

[Frieda P]

OMG I'm a Leo....sheesh...gemini's aren't too smart either I take it lol A libra no way~!

[Scott Metro]

you kill me...lol...Gemini's are strong..independent...and oooozing with sex appeal...hah..lol
Leo....boy...I'm sorry..I didn't know..and I've been picking on you...I'm so sorry..didn't know you were a Leo...gosh..did you go to special school..?

[Frieda P]

Very funny, and hey, by the way I got that stuff from YOUR horoscope, I didn't make it up...ha

[Scott Metro]

I got your horoscope right here sweet heart....lol

[Frieda P]

FRESH!

[Scott Metro]

sort of....lol....teasing you...the cafe' seems empty tonight...did you drive them all away..?lol

[Frieda P]

Probably, my big mouth will do that....

[Scott Metro]

LOL..do you have snow and cold tonight..?

[Frieda P]

Snow earlier, but yes, it's in the teens, frigid out there...

[Scott Metro]

had 78 here today...a cold snap...lol...Going to be a very hot summer in the desert this year I think..not suppose to be this warm...been this way for weeks..

[Frieda P]

I'll trade ya some heat for some cold...gladly.

[Scott Metro]

I know..wish I could help...got to go make a phone call....catcha later..thanks for the chat..!!

[Frieda P]

Ciao, have a good night....