Swept away in a quiver ~

Swept away 'tween rapture's dance

     paused naked round fiery embers

our souls like whispers

    hush'd in the wind's howls

stars smiled gently upon lusty skies

   enchanted lunar moon

      twinkling in his eye

         lit upon desire

sipping streams of dahlia wine

   drink you in with each sinful spin

thrumming in this twirl of ecstasy 

  music pounding in the heart

bodies pulsating to a swaying tempo,

   thrashing rhythmically in this crush

   fading into each breathless tremor

       sounded a gentle quiver

  bodies bent in intoxicating unison's swagger

connected in a rhapsodic concerto

   intertwined in synchronized euphoria

           exhalations of frenzied elation 

                      blared a sultry night

Author's Note

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

mmmmmmmmmmmmmm .... crisp morning outside (-10 actual temp) low hanging crescent moon as a cradle ... morning star just off to the right at 2 o'clock ... so your poem has entwined me in a simmering heat making -10 meaningless ... delightful dance, mood enhancing, tasteful and lusty my dear ... you have a gift ...
E.
ps. did you know that making out for a half hour burns 238 calories?

[Cryingkate]

Morning Einstein ! I been up since 5 and have been watching that same crescent and nearby star.
read moreMorning Einstein ! I been up since 5 and have been watching that same crescent and nearby star.
Awesome view it was. It was of meaning but I don't know what it is.

Ok. I'm off to self burn 238 calories......................... HA just kidding...

[Frieda P]

Such a poetic review dear E...ha, imagine all night long, can one disappear into the ether? ;-) Grazie mille.

[Einstein Noodle]

to Kate; isnt it grand and so simple as a glance to the sky to find our connection ...and to Ms. Frieda ... alllllllllllllllllllllll nighttttttttt longgggggggggggggg ... what a blissful obliteration alliteration...into the ether we go ....a fading too sublime :))
E.

[Frieda P]

What a way to go eh? ..............wooooo

[Cryingkate]

Einstein and Ms Freida """"""""""surrendering to the sublime"""""""""":-)

[Frieda P]

Ha there's a poem in there somewhere ;-)

[Cryingkate]

those with the eye must dive... Go for it..... Grab it take it consume it and spit it out!

[Frieda P]

Swept up in a quiverous tumult
who better to take on this ride
crisp mornings with a star
entwined in simmering lust
a delightful prance of heat
just me and my brilliant pal Einstein
surrendering to the sublime

Sorry had to borrow yer luverly words mwah! ;-)

[Cryingkate]

Hey hey Hey don't forget to take me with YA's.. HA you thought I was sleeping and wouldn't know.. Ha fooled you I was waiting at the Milky way in case you tried this...... :-) Good Morning Cosmic Friends..

[Frieda P]

Ha you ready to surrender dear? ;-) Morning...meet me at the east end of the Milky Way...

[Cryingkate]

You have never seen surrender till you have bathed in my eyes and I yours
When You see the eternal sister/brother hood.
When You remember who we are and have traveled these stars over and over together as one.
When Your Soul remembers I am you and you are me
We shall travel heaven's shore to shore with no need of that silver cord.
Every star shall brighten as we pass by,
Every moon, Every Sun Shall rejoice of our return
Coming to and fro among the Cosmos
Till we find that Mother Light that cradles once again till the new re birth


Hmm I just had to let go and see what happens.. Your turn LOL

[Cryingkate]

LEe it Rip ! You guys.. Get your Soul Naked and show me the Cosmo's from your eyes.

[Cryingkate]

Let ..........

[Frieda P]

Wooo, that's divine my friend....you need to publish that one ;-)

[Frieda P]

I think you burnt more than 238 calories with that little ditty ha

[Cryingkate]

I'm Hoping it will warm the Starlight up in you and Einstein. Oh send me word to feed my hunger of Star Travel. I so want to fly........I'm counting on you to take me...............:-)

[Frieda P]

There's always room on the crazy train for one more ;-)

[Frieda P]

you are the creamy in my coffee
the sublime to my surrender
marmalade for my toasty heat
fluffy socks to my chill'd toes
you raise me up when I'm down
turn me round when gone astray
you are a friend of mine come what may

[Cryingkate]

Are You Deaf? I said make me fly Not Cry :-)

How many Heavens can a butterfly travel to?
Is that Stardust on your wings?
How many passengers can fit on one Butterfly?
Can a Butterfly land on the moon?

Ps That Crazy Train leaft already and deposited me here on Writers Cafe.
How did you get here? LMBO

[Frieda P]

Oooh butterflies, now you're gonna make me cry! Ha muchly the same way as you...,HAha

[Cryingkate]

I'm Sorry, I didn't mean to make you cry. But You know though that Butterflies are free.:-)

[Frieda P]

Pssh and tush, you know nothing is free in this life ;-P

[Cryingkate]

I used to think that, But lately I'm starting to learn something different.
I'm learning about Freedom. I'm learning I can be free by my own will. It all is about chossing our thoughts.
I'm in Awe right now because it is so new to me. Like another world yet still here..
Strange new happenings...

[Frieda P]

Sounds blissful, perhaps you can teach me...

[Cryingkate]

NO Shitz ! I just got booted off writers cafe.. LOL
Too bad too! I
I hate having to rewrite something After I wrote it with teary heart.

Anyways I said I WOULD LOVE TO ! With All My Heart and Soul !
Write me when your ready :-)

[Einstein Noodle]

wait a minute .... i thought we were talking about all night blissful lusting calorie burning shenanigans ...??? don't leave me out!! :))
hugs and love girls! big big
E.

[Frieda P]

Ha funny, I love the word 'shenanigans'! Doh, who do you think my brilliant pal Einstein was?

[Einstein Noodle]

well yeh Freida! .... hopes it be me; but ... felt left out with you and cryin' babe carrying on ... i do love ya girl :)
E.
actually felt like fun writing "shenanigans" ..more room for expansive poetry there perhaps ... i think you are grand ...
E.

[Frieda P]

I think you were off sleeping, we had to keep ourselves entertained in the meantime with our own shenanigans ...I think you're grand too my friend, cheers. :-)

[Eric Pudalov]

Is it just "making out" that burns 238 calories, or actually having sex? I would imagine having intercourse burns more than that...hmm, good way to get in shape!

[Einstein Noodle]

to Eric .... nope.... 144+/- per half hour romp ... depending on ...well ???... .... so pucker up and help your mate loose weight ..
and excuse you ... this is a threesome going on here :)
ahahahahha weep on young man!
E.

[Eric Pudalov]

HAHAHA! Well, there's a first time for everything...

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A steamy liasion of sultry heat in warm, flowing metaphors from the Queen of expression my Lady!

[Frieda P]

Glad you came upon this one John, grazie mille!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

FGS send RRs will you?...............................................................

[Frieda P]

Think you were on hiatus when I wrote this one...

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Yes, belive you are right and look what I missed!

[Lauriegirl]

This is awesome..the word choice..the length all plays into making a great piece. Bravo

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Laurie, jazz'd you enjoyed....

[Chandradhish Ghosh]

This sounds like a beautiful painting...you almost made me feel like being a part of your poem...this is wonderful and beautiful!

[Frieda P]

What more could a poet ask for, grazie mille, muchly appreciated.

[Saddam]

fading into each breathless tremor
sounded a gentle quiver
bodies bent in intoxicating unison's swagger.

Swepting and blowing me away from time land to your imaginative land.
Great write as well great read.

[Blue]

I want to be swept away in a quiver, too. Haha. Another good read, Frieda. I learn a lot from you. :)

[Simran Kewlani]

I love this. All your poems are filled with beauty.
The music.

[Frieda P]

Thanks muchly, glad you enjoyed :-)

[Aethereal]

This is a beautiful exposé

of that Drive
within the hive
where drones pirouette and dive
to makes their queen bee feel alive.

[Frieda P]

Bzzzzzzzzz, thanks so much for your words Aethereal. ;-)

[Tai Ryens]

A paradox: the more the duo indulge in each other, the lighter and the emptier they get in the love that allows them to be swept away in the breeze of day. What makes this poem glimmer even brighter is your choice in emphasized lettering, which could act as an entirely separate poem per se, or an extension of the poem, and either way it still reflects the poignancy of your emotions. The ecstasy you write of is something many of us have felt ourselves, and you express it longingly. Well done.

[Frieda P]

Always appreciate your take on my words Tai, thanks so much.

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Amazing poem Frieda, nicely written.

Kaze~ ;-D

[Frieda P]

Thanks again Kazie, jazz'd you enjoyed this one. :-)

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

All good Frieda. :-) :-D

[Rita L. Sev]

You amaze me with your ability to create such images with your words, Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Woo thanks for this stellar review Rita....