Darkly hue'd requiem

requiem for darkly hue'd nothingness

faceless hauntings with no name

puzzled angst sent on ghastly devil's wings   

ghosts of where crimson songs had hung, 

to distort and betray mind's dimly lit sanity

ravaging each prudent thought in liber

ation's crush 

plunging ceremoniously into another dirge

sans Hallelujah's voracious point of view

covetous in its proclivity for

 gluttonous acquisitions 

sinful penance without due diligence 

unsigned contracts bled humanity's animosity

tempted within satan's lustful strife 

Author's Note

artwork~André Jacques Victor Orsel

captcha~befiled

Reviews

[Rita L. Sev]

I'm sure my mind is taking this so far off the path you intended (likely telling something about my current state of mind) but I am looking at this dark place of "sinful penance" as life itself, birth being its own death, pulling us away from that Halleluia... Whatever your intention, Frieda, you have painted a vivid dark scene, and made me think...

[Frieda P]

I really enjoyed your interpretation of this one Rita, it's based on a recurring nightmare, but I love where you took it, thanks so much.

[kublakhan27]

LOL I was wondering which one you were saving this song for...I haven't listened to that album in a while but I may have to now ;) I sure wish some ghastly devil's wings would come and swoop up my puzzled angst. Sinful penance could define poetry itself...yet I feel the need to keep that hallelujah in my back pocket, not so much for my writing but for yours, cuz it's what I feel like saying whenever I read a new work from you. Would I rather laugh with the sinners than cry with the saints? I'd be the first to admit that the sinners are much more fun, especially when the write stuff like this ;) xo

[Frieda P]

Haha it was perfect right? I was hearing it in my head whilst I was writing but couldn't put my finger on it, I knew you'd come up with the exact song....Ha sinners have more fun I'd say yep. We'll all end up in the same place anywho, might as well enjoy it. ;-) Thanks hon xo

[kublakhan27]

Haha Glad I could help in some small way Mrs.R ;) Always a pleasure love...xo

[Leslie Philibert]

Like the use of Angst,one of the best words the Germans ever exported, an undefined, vague feeling of neurotic not-feeling-good ( to badly express this)..fits well here !

[Frieda P]

Ha that's new to me, I never knew it was exported, thanks Leslie, learn something new every day...

[Brittany Zedalis]

I always enjoy your dark poetry. :]

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Brittany :-)

[icelandicblue]

A very dark...trust no one it seems. Dante would have liked this one.

[Frieda P]

Ha, probably so, he thinks he's a friend of mine. ;-) Thanks Anne

[Tina Louise UK]

wow, dark ...love it :) x

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille Tia ;-) x

[David Scott]

The last three lines Frieda... Wow. Love the music here!
This was hard hitting and felt like a rant at the very core of human spiritual essence.
Salty Dog poetry here fore sure and honestly goes great with you being a Wing Thang too. ;)

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Scott, I have to thank the great Kublakhan for making the suggestion in music for this one, so thrill'd you enjoy'd my salty pup. ;-)

[s y e]

// puzzled angst sent on ghastly devil's wings
ghosts of where crimson songs had hung,
to distort and betray mind's dimly lit sanity
ravaging each prudent thought in liberation's crush //

Woah, who peed in your frootloops, mama F? ;-) This is dark and deep and I loved it. You write to perfection each time and never fail to amaze me and blow me to NJ each time.

I loved the wording and imagery.... Sterling write as Steveroo says! xo

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille noodlebumble, you know how it goes, no frootloops in my bowl just in my head dear ;-) Thanks muchly....xo

[Ken Simm.]

There is a real, if dark flow to this. An almost Milton like quality.

[Frieda P]

Woo Milton, I don't really read him but sounds good to moi. Grazie mille Ken.

[sayed Mudasir Ali]

Sensational poem! Good form and great choice of words.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much sayed!

[Michael G. Smith]

I think Scott summed it up for me. I must be an oddity because I always find the accompanying music to be a distraction while trying to get a sense of the poem as read it. I've tried to do it with the music but to no avail.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Michael, there's a wee button, you can always turn it off. ;-)

[Michael G. Smith]

I don't know what I'd do without you?

[Frieda P]

Ha, smart arse ;-)