Just a silly rhyme....sort of

It's satire people, lighten up ;-)

My life was never meant to rhyme

nor a stitch in time

although i do have rhythmy blues

metaphorically speaking, i sure can tap those shoes

give me prose any day of the week,

and I can certainly turn it bleak

frays upside down and sideways

that's the house specialty craze

my maze'd poetic verse 

is strictly unrehearsed,

prancing delusions

of uttermost confusion

if you're discombobulated,  kerfuffl'd

or bewilder'd,  join the cafe's allusions

 I told you I couldn't rhyme!

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

your words have rhythm and beat, who needs rhyme...seldom use it myself unless it is natural...but then there are those purists who believe form has to be followed always..

oh well...can't please all the people all the time...

and my poetry reflects my life for sure...not much rhyme...and at times the rhythm goes off like a bad song.

[Frieda P]

Thanks jacob, yep some people have strict rules about this poetry stuff, can't please em all is right.

[icelandicblue]

There are times where rhyme just flows and other times it blows. This one I like. ; )

[Frieda P]

Ha well I happen to know mine blows if it happens it's purely by accident. ha you don't have to kiss my a*s Anne ;-P

[icelandicblue]

Ha ha...read my broken feet poem and ye shall know what my truth of rhyme and meter might be. ; )read moreHa ha...read my broken feet poem and ye shall know what my truth of rhyme and meter might be. ; )
And thanks for not making me kiss your a*s! I am honored to be rejected.

[Frieda P]

Did someone step on your toes too?

[Frieda P]

Send me a RR, I just checked first two pages of our catalog, no telling how far back is is...

[cycy]

well written Frieda, i loved this one loads its very creative and quirky, well done hey, love it :) :) :)

[Frieda P]

Ha I had to write this one, someone told me I couldn't rhyme, no kidding, kiss my a*s haha ;-)

[cycy]

hahahaha and the pic, what a classic finishing touch, what would the cafe be without you dear Frieda #killing me with humour, much love for your art

[Frieda P]

Haha you gotta larf or you go insane, oh well too late ;-)

[Cassie]

ahahaha!!!!! if you dont love my style just kiss my a*s........You know am a big fun of yours and i missed reading from you

[Frieda P]

Ha you don't have to kiss my a*s Cassie ;-) Lol

[stars are far]

That was good hehe.,.and not always rhymes what makes the poem good...
well done

[Frieda P]

Glad you got a giggle out of it star...

[stars are far]

welcome :)

[Eric Pudalov]

Loved this one, Frieda! Well, personally, I don't think poetry always has to rhyme, unless it's part of a specific form (like a sonnet or villanelle). But in this case, I enjoyed your parody/snarky attitude toward rhyming. So of course, rhyme if you want to, but don't feel obligated!

[Frieda P]

I concur Eric, I'm not good at it, so I leave it to the experts, thanks so much!

[Eric Pudalov]

Oh, and one more thing - some of those captchas have inspired poems, believe it or not!! They come up with the craziest words for those!

[Frieda P]

Ha I'm afraid of the captcha from OZ! haha

[Eric Pudalov]

Captcha from OZ? What did it say? "I'llgetyoumypretty???"

[Frieda P]

Oh I'm sure that's where they all come from....

[Eric Pudalov]

LOL! Oh, one other comment about the rhyming - I do tend to rhyme my spoken word/rap poetry, because that fits the genre. In that case, I may spend more time finding the appropriate rhyming words. Perhaps that's something you could experiment with? I've found some online rhyming dictionaries (like RhymeZone) that help with poems like that. Of course, it's not required, but personally, I have participated in slams, and that just seems to fit the style. Everyone has their own approach, though, and far be it from me to tell you how to write your work. I'm learning from you as well, believe it or not.

[Frieda P]

My thoughts never come out in rhyme, it always feels constrained to me, I have no clue how people that think that way do it....if it's done right, it's divine, but sometimes you can tell people just insert a word cause it rhymes but then it doesn't flow...

[Frieda P]

Oh and kiss my a*s Eric haha ;-P

[Eric Pudalov]

OK, maybe I will...you might like it. ;-P

[Frieda P]

Ha watch out, your wife might be reading this. ;-P

[Claire in VA]

I loved this!
Thanks !

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Claire!

[Pryde Foltz]

Haha … rhyming does, indeed, get a bad rap. (Pun, intended. LOL. I kill me.) Alas, it is so easy to do it predictably and fall into cliche, but when it is done well and with an original flair, it can lend your words a certain remembrance that only the very finest free verse can ever obtain. And rhyming does take added care to balance the needs of meaning and structure.

If you're discombobulated, kerfuffl'd
or bewilder'd, join the cafe's allusions
I told you I couldn't rhyme!

Dear Frieda, no need for feathers ruffled
your prose is driven by the finest pistons
taking to flight, reaching the sublime

[Frieda P]

I admire anyone who can rhyme and make it flow naturally, I can't....no feathers ruffled, just wanted to say 'kiss my a*s' haha ;-)

[Rob Santana]

I'm first in line, when does the a*s kissing begin.

[Frieda P]

Ha...you'll be the first to know hon. ;-)

[Rob Santana]

Hahahaha, right right

[redflutterby]

Lmao...are we selling tickets for this a*s kissing booth??

[Rob Santana]

Hell no. Friedas doing it for free!!! Right Frieda...

[Frieda P]

Only for you Rob, only for you. ;-)

[redflutterby]

Haha... wait whos kissing whos a*s?? ;-Pp

[Rob Santana]

I'm kissing Friedas, hahaha. Hey is biting allowed? I wanna leave my mark.

[redflutterby]

Snicker...too late I already did!! Bahaha...
I better go hide now before Frieda smacks me!! ;-D

[Rob Santana]

LMFAO!!!! Run red run!!!!

[redflutterby]

I feel like Forrest Gump now!! Haha....

[Rob Santana]

Exactly, hahahaha!!!

[Frieda P]

Geez can't leave you two alone for a minute!!

[Buddhistboy73]

ha ha...nice to read a light-hearted piece on the Cafe...:)
Thanks for sharing...:)

Love the word discombobulated too....:)
BB

[Frieda P]

Thanks, jazz'd you enjoyed, I love that word too, it rolls so nicely off the tongue :-)