Haunted in my flagrant dreams, awake on hallow'd ground you watch me breathe as I seek you out cold spirits taunted past spasmodic verses chant hollow insides afraid to sleep your sanctification renders me uncomfortably conscious numb within breath's shallow inhale undone in the nothingness of rhyme fearing truth's brutal reality bewailing in grief's heartfelt desire pull me up to new sight'd heights in your wayward plight's surrender save me from this cruel humanness
Very well worded, Frieda. Sorry, I always repeat my compliments to you. :P Anyway, I think in "you watch me breath", it's supposed to be "breathe"?
"save me from this cruel humanness" In my dark days, I would've nodded to this but I'm happy being human and being alive right now. ;) Don't stop dancing, Frieda. :P
I can't believe I missed that, thanks so much, you're on the ball you nutter. ;-) Will never stop d.. read moreI can't believe I missed that, thanks so much, you're on the ball you nutter. ;-) Will never stop dancing, it's like breathing...did I get that right? ;-P Grazie.
The line that hit me was the one about being afraid to sleep. I've been there, not a very nice place to be. Beautifully written, Frieda, thanks for sharing! :) Extra marks to you because I love Amy Lee's voice( listen to 'My Immortal') :)
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Thanks so much for sharing your thoughts here Devesh, yes, another great song, I think I know all of.. read moreThanks so much for sharing your thoughts here Devesh, yes, another great song, I think I know all of her work, she's amazing, I do agree. ;-)
Mediocrity and pretension is the middle name of average human life and also the cause of strife to its eternal soul which resides inside it. It is up to you to decide whether you want to live like a soul or a slave.
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Choice really isn't an option after your sister hangs herself Avinash, it''s never ending angst to d.. read moreChoice really isn't an option after your sister hangs herself Avinash, it''s never ending angst to deal with the suicide of someone so beloved. Thanks for your thoughts.
I m sorry...but she is with you all the time as I have reasons to believe she truly loved you. Will .. read moreI m sorry...but she is with you all the time as I have reasons to believe she truly loved you. Will you be the one to make her smile wherever she is , like a small payback to her unconditional love. Be everything she would have thought of you which would have made her happy ...In my opinion that is the best way to love back someone who we can no longer see but always feel.
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Makes perfect sense in my logical head but my heart's emotions can't always go there....
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Give them form of another beautiful tribute to her through your magical words.........to bring smil.. read moreGive them form of another beautiful tribute to her through your magical words.........to bring smiles :)...we are all here to claim back what life has stolen from us .
I see so much in this poem...the things you have shared in your struggle to find some peace. That last line is so significant. Being human is cruel...our grief can be unbearable...our anger and guilt eats at us. We feel out of control as our minds and hearts wrestle with our demons. We long to leave this world...to escape all these things but we also want to stay here. With our loved ones and friends. And for you that is the greatest pain of all...why Lee couldnt. You know how I feel about that..weve talked a number of times. Your strength always moves me beyond words. You see yourself as a screwed up mess...but I see a survivor who uses her words to touch us all...to say aloud what she can't whisper in the ear of her beloved sister. xo
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Your words actually brought tears to my eyes Andrea, you've touched my heart in a special way, thank.. read moreYour words actually brought tears to my eyes Andrea, you've touched my heart in a special way, thanks so much for your continued support my dear friend. xo
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Thanks for yours as well...it goes both ways. Hugs...smile!! xo
"Cruel humaness" we have to deal with that every day in some form, don't we? It's a shame. Sometimes sleep is an escape and sometimes that cruel humaness comes to life in our nightmares. Which is better....sleeping or wakefulness? There is a thin line for sure. Frieda, this is powerfully haunting poetry. Lydi**
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Seems that way Lydi. I can't answer that, seems half of one and all that jazz, it's always haunting.. read moreSeems that way Lydi. I can't answer that, seems half of one and all that jazz, it's always haunting no matter what, thanks so much for your kind thoughts my friend.
// hollow insides afraid to sleep
Your sanctification renders
me conscious
numb within breath's shallow inhale //
Firstly, that song just fits right in to this poem and takea my breath away.
Secondly, your poem made my heart stop and I felt like I couldn't breathe. The amount of power and emotion in your poems about sister are definitely strong. Those lines I copied nearly blew me away.
I know how much you love sister and how losing her has taken a piece of your heart thar no one can replace and quite rightly so. Your sister is going to be so, so proud of the beautiful, talented woman you are and you keep her memory alive by writing about her.
Heart wrenching poem. I'm sending huggles across the pond.
100 huggles & all that jazz xoxo ♥
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Holy noodles, thanks so much for your in-depth review, it's longer than my poem ;-) Muchly apprecia.. read moreHoly noodles, thanks so much for your in-depth review, it's longer than my poem ;-) Muchly appreciate your kind words and support always. xox
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I doubt it's longer and it definitely is not nearly as good as the poem. You're a survivor, Mama F .. read moreI doubt it's longer and it definitely is not nearly as good as the poem. You're a survivor, Mama F and our write poetry about your gorgeous sister telling her things you can't in reality. You're talking to her through your words..... you touch my heart as always. ♥
If you want to know me, read my poetry, it's all in there. I am a mother of three sons (my finest moments) a sister, a survivor and a little bit crazy. I lost my beloved sister to suicide, so you'll.. more..