Haunted in my flagrant dreams, awake on hallow'd ground you watch me breathe as I seek you out cold spirits taunted past spasmodic verses chant hollow insides afraid to sleep your sanctification renders me uncomfortably conscious numb within breath's shallow inhale undone in the nothingness of rhyme fearing truth's brutal reality bewailing in grief's heartfelt desire pull me up to new sight'd heights in your wayward plight's surrender save me from this cruel humanness
Very well worded, Frieda. Sorry, I always repeat my compliments to you. :P Anyway, I think in "you watch me breath", it's supposed to be "breathe"?
"save me from this cruel humanness" In my dark days, I would've nodded to this but I'm happy being human and being alive right now. ;) Don't stop dancing, Frieda. :P
I can't believe I missed that, thanks so much, you're on the ball you nutter. ;-) Will never stop d.. read moreI can't believe I missed that, thanks so much, you're on the ball you nutter. ;-) Will never stop dancing, it's like breathing...did I get that right? ;-P Grazie.
one of my favorite music vids .... my face is pressed to the poets mirror
" your sanctification renders me
uncomfortably conscious" gorgeous lines Frieda ... marvelous expressions
E.
on the wings of an angel, I want to escape this life..
sick of all humanities lies I want you to bring me to life
with your words of angelic salvation
I can't wait for the next destination.. a safer place with friends like you is where I want to be for eternity.
Great poem < 3 Bless you and may you always have the strength to move on for you'll be reunited one day and it'll be a big party and I hope I'm invited!
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Thanks for your poetic response Kee, and of course!
I would swear you were totally in love with someone new by the last two poems of yours I read. What else could inspire such soul touching writes? This took my breath away.
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I'm not sure which other two you meant but this one was written for my sister, thanks for your thoug.. read moreI'm not sure which other two you meant but this one was written for my sister, thanks for your thoughts here.
sidenote- i love that song- main note- Making a poem flow without rhyming a single word is something you make seem so easy and is a talent I still have yet to master.
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Thanks Annabelle, much appreciate your thoughts here.
"Wake me up inside
Save me from the nothingness I've become.." from the song into your poem, from the poem reflecting the song, you express what is real about love and loss, the hollowness inside of the pain... Frieda except to acknowledge your loss, your love, your artistry, your humanEness, I cannot add to what others have already said to you... I wish I could... I love your poem though you have once again broken my heart... be well my sweet friend.. ~~redzone
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Thanks for you kind words curt, didn't mean to....it's a neverending pain.
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I know, I wouldn't be human or worthy of your friendship if I didn't feel it .. your pain and sadne.. read moreI know, I wouldn't be human or worthy of your friendship if I didn't feel it .. your pain and sadness ..
If you want to know me, read my poetry, it's all in there. I am a mother of three sons (my finest moments) a sister, a survivor and a little bit crazy. I lost my beloved sister to suicide, so you'll.. more..