Hallow'd Breathing

Haunted in my flagrant dreams,
    awake on hallow'd ground
you watch me breathe
        as I seek you out
cold spirits taunted past
           spasmodic verses chant
hollow insides afraid to sleep
  your sanctification renders me
                  uncomfortably conscious
numb within breath's shallow inhale
       undone in the nothingness of rhyme
   fearing truth's brutal reality
     bewailing in grief's heartfelt desire
pull me up to new sight'd heights
   in your wayward plight's surrender
       save me from this cruel humanness

Author's Note

Reviews

[Blue]

Very well worded, Frieda. Sorry, I always repeat my compliments to you. :P Anyway, I think in "you watch me breath", it's supposed to be "breathe"?

"save me from this cruel humanness" In my dark days, I would've nodded to this but I'm happy being human and being alive right now. ;) Don't stop dancing, Frieda. :P

[Frieda P]

I can't believe I missed that, thanks so much, you're on the ball you nutter. ;-) Will never stop dancing, it's like breathing...did I get that right? ;-P Grazie.

[Blue]

Breathing is easier, though. Haha.

[Frieda P]

Not for me..... ;-P

[beautiful dreamer]

Oh the pain that is expressed here is just so heartbreaking. its crazy good though.

[MomzillaNC]

Simultaneously evocative and libidinous…

[Frieda P]

Libidinous really? Wasn't meant to be...thanks for sharing your POV. Interesting....

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome. And, it was definitely very sexy, bordering on orgasmic.

[Frieda P]

Wow really, that's the beauty of poetry, we all see it through different eyes....thanks again.

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome.

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Another outstanding poem, and its so relate-able. :-D

Kaze~

[Frieda P]

Thanks muchly Kazie. :-)

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

All good. :-D

[Shaquana Adams]

in your wayward plight's surrender
save me from this cruel humanness

Love this poems meaning and this song. Good work :)

[Frieda P]

Thanks Shaquana, jazz'd you enjoyed.

[Pryde Foltz]

pull me up to new sight'd heights
in your wayward plight's surrender
save me from this cruel humanness

We are all so afraid there won't be enough. Felt this one, Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Pryde.

[icelandicblue]

Cruel humaness that just speaks absolute volumes does it not. We are damaged and bruised and some of us damage and bruise even those that we love.

[Frieda P]

So so true, thanks Anne.

[Spacecadet]

I've read a few of your poems and they all seem a tad abstract to me, with meaning that is deeper than you let on. Dark and intricate. They're all very fascinating :)

[Frieda P]

Not such a space cadet now are you? Thanks muchly ;-)

[Spacecadet]

Its writes like yours that bring me back to reality :)

[Frieda P]

Kind of you to say, thanks again!

[Leslie Philibert]

If I understand the review below, this is an elegy...and a fine one too, written with all the quality of classical poetry. Excellent.

[Frieda P]

Yes Leslie, it was written with my beloved sister in mind, thanks so much.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

One often finds oneself thinking on times and feeling that can not be changed, moved or forgotten, your words break those rules, well done, good read.

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille Thomas.