Kraken's Exhale

Rather imperative, man's peace & kindness should be foremost on the agenda ~ I'm sure this will be ill-receive'd by some but there are always two sides to a coin.

Halted in religious rhetoric

reap'd deeply in dragon's breath

slay'd in kraken's exhaled disavowed beliefs 

saintly passages hand'd down as gospel

mind control with no concrete sustenance

man's kindness rather'd of utmost accountable relevance

bloody sin at the hands of church goers' merciless chants

after hours en masse when they slaughter one another

Author's Note

Reviews

[redzone]

You know that I would love this Frieda... I will only add there is no scientific proof of a superstitious god or gods or "Universe"; but there is plenty of proof that man invented such stupidity.. and this has done great harm in the world for way too long a time... a courageous "Kraken" write Frieda.
~~redzone

[Frieda P]

Indeed, I concur, blind stupidity. Thanks so much Curt.

[00000000000000000000000..]

Its true ya know? I seen it before my own eyes. I never could quite figure it out so I stop trying too.

[Frieda P]

I've stopped trying to figure people out Jon, thanks so much for reading.

[0000000000000000000000000000]

Your quite welcome friend:)

[Chris]

coming up for air is a fair excuse...

[Frieda P]

Not sure I"m following you Chris...excuse for which?

[Chris]

not having the apostrophe at the end of "goers" - of course.

[Lyn Anderson]

Frieda doesn't need excuses, she likes to play with me ...:)

[Frieda P]

Oh, ha...I never came up for air whilst I was writing this one. ;-)

[Frieda P]

Ha yes, she gets inspired when I toy with her. ;-)

[Lyn Anderson]

I totally dig this snarky clever little commentary. Umm, should I tell you now that since the chants are those of the church goers, you maybe should have it as goers' ? -- yeah, shoot me now, I know.:)

[Frieda P]

Ermahgerd, how much do I want to slap you, you're always right~! ;-P Never even crossed my mind, how did I even breathe before you? ;-)

[Lyn Anderson]

I feel like I should duck sometimes, I am like damn, did I catch that? I think everyone is just so awed by you they miss it. I would truthf:)ully correct the queen's grammar and not think a thing about it -- and the thing is, I happen to think a perfect piece should be perfect, you know?

[Frieda P]

Haha do you wanna another slap woman? ;-P I think you're smarter than the average p***y ;-)

[0000000000000000000000000000]

Lol:))))))))))))))))))))))))))

[Lyn Anderson]

Yes, please ma'am!:)

[Frieda P]

And yes I do so agree, you know I'm just yanking your chain....

[Devesh]

Everyday in the name of religion, mankind kills humanity. You continue to outdo yourself, William. Beautifully exprressed!

[Frieda P]

Exactly, glad you understood where I was going with this one Devesh, and then they 'preach'......thanks so much.

[Devesh]

FYI, that line is not mine, just read it somewhere a few years ago ,it stuck....you're most welcome! :)

[Frieda P]

It stuck because 'tis true.... :-)

[Devesh]

it most certainly is :)

[Brook]

Such a lovely lovely piece. :)

[Frieda P]

Thanks for reading.

[Pryde Foltz]

Rather imperative, man's peace & kindness should be foremost on the agenda ~

I know not part of the poem but at its heart. How could one argue any different, and yet they do.

bloody sin at the hands of church goers merciless chants
after hours en mass when they slaughter one another

Never trust those who say they have all the answers and no doubt … for any reason. Great one, Frieda.

Typo? en masse, I think. It's French;)

[Frieda P]

Yes that's what I was going for Pryde, and yet they do indeed. Thanks for the heads up, I guess my head was affixed in 'mass', will fix it toot sweet. ;-)

[Scott Metro]

Ah yes...the Kraken ...
This is a bit short for you..but enjoyable...
Nice word weave Frieda..

Scott

[Frieda P]

Ha, the first draft was a mile long. ;-) Thanks Scott.

[Scott Metro]

:)
Scott.......

[A. Amos]

This work took me to Clash of Titans..Kragan:) love the concept and the verses and perfect.
As always good job my dear

[Frieda P]

Thanks for reading Amos, always appreciate your thoughts.

[Brittany Zedalis]

Heh, I love the Boromir meme picture you used with this xD You've amazed me yet again with your fantastic writing. :]

[Frieda P]

Thanks Brittany, was tough to find a pic for this one, most were really blasphemous.

[s y e]

Woohoo, you know how much I love this piece Frieda.

// slay'd in kraken's exhaled disavowed beliefs
saintly passages hand'd down as gospel //

I love a good 'kraken' poem from you. You write the best, alot of power and meaning in your words as always!

Wellies & all that jazz! xo

[Frieda P]

Thanks noodlebumble, had to written or it was going to implode my brain ;-)