Cobalt Rattlings Duo

COLLABORATION ~ kublakhan & Frieda

Cobalt rattlings in gray matter
spun in Dali quintessence
ramblings encapsulated of time
palatalization of vapor'd history
Cobalt chord sequences infiltrate
the ears of the introspective poet   
powerless to blind the senses
in conscientious retroaction
Connection to the self a live wire
Loose sparks spraying danger in a dare
Ambition shivering in cold sweat
crumbles in the subconscious
like a flustered ball of ink-soiled paper
Mockingbird taunts thought gravity
monopolizing the burble's sting
birds blossomed into x-poetry  
in three dimensional inky hostility
Flying flesh singes on contact
with the unamused canvass of guide lines
and the aviary birthright is brainwashed
into a demotion of teardrop blobs
The ill-fated notion of an Operation Phoenix
strategy only drowns ideas in a lava shower
melting all the desperate hours
in a pot of calculated surreality
until the inspiration falls to evaporation
leaving the once-introspective poet
with sordid scraps of thematic ash

swooning to the end of time in rhyme

riddled in presumptuous analogy

 wringing withers amply fortified

caricatures dance on cue'd medleys 

escaping furnished reality's bind

 insomniacs sense of superiority 

stand in farce's quot'd alignment 

benign metaphorical travesty's fix

 winding down in a dish of foreplay

Hallelujah's moment in sunrise's praise

Author's Note

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Reviews

[s y e]

Holy crap, I had to read this a few times because when you two write together it is deep and my brain needs to like, think and think and think to completely understand it 100%... :-)

// Ambition shivering in cold sweat
crumbles in the subconscious
like a flustered ball of ink-soiled paper
Mockingbird taunts thought gravity //

I felt like I couldn't breathe while reading this... it was so powerful it took my breathe away. Well done guys, loved it.

Wellies & all that jazz! xo

[Frieda P]

Haha always appreciate a holy crap, when you figure it out let me know noodlebumble, thanks muchly for the wellies, it's raining it's pouring here ;-) Jazz'd you enjoyed peanut. xo

[s y e]

It's raining cats and dogs here, I just walked home from school, aha. I look like I just had a shower. ;-P Always a pleasure, Mama! xo

[kublakhan27]

OMG This is funny...everybody has pretty much said the exact same thing: that they had to hold their breath while reading. Not that that's a bad thing by any means, it's great ;P Thanks so much Noodlebop, glad we could entertain you, or perplex you, or both haha

[RichGee]

Wow...what can I say that I haven't already...The Dynamic Duo nail it once more and again.
I had to read this piece many many times just to take it all in.
Reading this is like watching a movie or a performance.....Awesome, awesome art.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Rich, Steve is really brilliant and so much fun to write with.

[RichGee]

My pleasure...you both are awesome.

[Blue]

Intense and powerful, your words leave great impact to those who understood. Hmm, you, two, did a good job, Frieda. I thought you only collaborate with Jack. :D

Two gifted poets in one poem. That shows. :)

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much, was my pleasure to work with the great Kublakhan, no I've done a few, my first with John Mc who's no longer here, I should republish that one, it was hot. ;-)

[Blue]

Ohh. Update me. ;)

[Frieda P]

I'm looking in this mess of a catalog, hold yer horses girl. ;-P

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

One that holds the reader close and breathes onto our necks, well done.

[Frieda P]

Jazz'd you enjoyed our collaboration, grazie mille.

[Tai Ryens]

Funny, I envisioned this to be speaking of a mockingbird in a cage before you mentioned the mockingbird itself, and I'm not even sure if this is of a bird at all. Well done, stunning imagery, Frieda

[Frieda P]

Ha great minds and all that jazz Tai, this was a collaboration with the great Kublakhan (Steve) you should check him out if you already haven't. Thanks so much.

[KeeD]

The great Kublakhan and the goddess of poetry never fail to deliver a masterpiece of sorts. You two creating poetry is like watching a live play, a performance in motion.. it's exquisite and the fusion of your writing styles, places together so well like gears giving mobility to the readers mind. I love it.

[Frieda P]

Woo you should see the huge smile on my face right now Kee, it was such a pleasure writing with 'the great kublakhan'...so jazz'd you enjoy'd our collaboration my sweet friend.

[Rita L. Sev]

Two of my favorite free versers, displaying some amazing poetic acrobatics - if "Word Dancing" was and Olympic event, you two would have just won gold!

[Frieda P]

WOOOO Steve is going to eat this review up, thanks so much Rita, you made my night! ;-)

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Rita :)

[Brittany Zedalis]

If I ever want to read something with complex allure, you're the poet to turn to. I loved this.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Brittany, but I have Steve( kublakhan ) to thank for the added complexity, this was a collaboration, so jazz'd you enjoyed this one.

[Devesh]

I experienced a sensory overload after reading this. Seriously. I've read it a few times now, still can't wrap my head around it completely. Nonplussed is how I feel, lol. Thank you for the wonderful read! :)

[Frieda P]

Wooo that's the first 'nonplussed' I ever received, not sure about Steve, but I'm sure he'll be as jazz'd as I am. Thanks so much Devesh! :-)

[Devesh]

You're welcome! =)

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Don't say this often, but Damn! Mind blowing! A fantastic and inspiring write... that was like listening to Stephen Hawking after he had taken an ecstasy pill! Brilliant work, both of you did an incredible job. It flows on one complete train of thought.

[Frieda P]

Haha that's pretty fook'd up, I guess we did our job, thanks Travis, your review brought a smile to my face, jazz'd you enjoyed my friend :-)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

WOW! Such a plethora of emotions...it rattles my mind, indeed!

An epic collaboration, Frieda and Steve!...
What an ending.... sheer brilliance!

I enjoyed this abstract art... your readers will certainly foray into deep waters...

Electrifying write!~xoxo~

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Robbie :) As Frieda has mentioned in some of the other comments, this piece was fueled by an unwitting attempt by each of us to channel the poetic voice of the other...in the process, we wound up producing something that truly took on a life of its own...and through all that, we still managed to produce something that unmistakably has a lot of each of us in it ;) It was an exhilarating experience working with her on this and I'm tickled pink that you enjoyed it :) xoxoxo

[Frieda P]

Jazzin to your review my sweet friend, thanks so much Robbie :-) xoxo