_RELENTLESS_

Photography ~ Christian Martin Weiss

Landlocked seas deeper than you could ever envision

    in the garish light of day you still can't imagine

   how deep the waters go beneath your soul

  fathomed in technicolor'd foam dragging you rock bottom

  from the tip of your crown, til splay'd on your knees,

           power of persuasion will haunt your psyche

       an amused cat with a mouse, toying endlessly

          injected under the skin as a festering toxin

The spirit of sleep that never comes 

     in your hour of pain when you seek peace

   blink        in your head, it'll disperse your bones

     take you from the ones you love

twist your mindset til it's crippled

    no one can rescue your sanity

prick 'd  reminders of broken promises

     desolate within forsaken tidings

there'll be no garnered reprieves,

   wreaking havoc     forcing your hand,

you'll be stripped naked to the core

    altered thought patterns's, taunt's forte 

Vociferous in assaulting crazed delirium

  holding the power of your deliberation

    ever sagacious, it will never leave your mind

  Mistress of unscrupulous tenet

     no way to be saved from its clutches

    torturous grasp burrows in deep

       entangled guts tied up with heartstrings

                You can't escape, you are render'd,

Reviews

[Nusquam Esse]

I don't even know why I like this as much as I do... but this is my favorite of yours... and one of my favs off this site. I love the relentlessness which you depict here, such a deep pain which seeks to drag you down and consume you. Or perhaps it wishes only to drag your limp corpse across a razor sharp reef.

Favorite line was
Vociferous in assaulting crazed delirium
holding the power of your deliberation
ever sagacious, it will never leave your mind

I love how you used both vociferous and sagacious in the same sentence; two ideas which are rarely held together. Usually meditation doesn't consist of screaming, but this is something new... powerful... and deep. As if gone is the sage who seeks enlightenment through calming his soul, and here comes the sage who has found his own enlightenment through bounding with a primal energy which only he understands.... a feral fury. Thanks for the review... it prompted me to come here and look over this, and I must say, I think I got the better deal. ;)

[Frieda P]

I do believe you just made my day Nusquam. 'drag your limp corpse across a razor sharp reef', why didn't I think of that? You got it spot on, thanks so much for this glowing review, :-)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A chilling, relative and guided piece that tells a story to ponder, well done, good read.

[Frieda P]

You always did like chilling, thanks muchly luv.

[Tina Louise UK]

wow and double wow...I can really relate to this piece, so raw and powerful..brilliant hun xx

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Tia! x

[redflutterby]

This one floored me hun!! Youve written many poems about your personal pain but for me this one paints the most powerful picture. Every emotion...every thought...every minute detail of what a survivor suffers. The title suns it up in one word...relentless. No mercy...or let up. Just on and on and on....never ending. I'm in awe of the raw pouring out of your soul..x

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Red, it was just one of those no good, horrible, very bad days....x

[redflutterby]

Yes I know.... hugs!