Rhapsodic Poetic Pearls

~breathe me

There are times when poetry is just simply, poetry

    words coming together that sing a song or rhyme

  ideal ideas summoned within muse's rhapsodic thoughts 

   more often times about death or eternal life

Love's blindness or universal forgiveness

   pearls of wisdom don'd in a pen's signature 

Grand reasoning of exhilarating proportions

       script'd without fear or apprehension,

             or just fun to roll off the tongue

  Saucy soul sisters serendipitously saunter   

  Bodacious baubles bubble beautifully bound

It's remembrances, past, future and todays

   exalted lovers who cuddle and coo us  

    & those which are the bane of our existence  

Rainbows and stars leaping over cobalt'd blue moons,

       cherished reminiscent of bygone days

Gods, goddesses, fairies and berry, cherry dust

   

Kisses a bazillion miles deep, marmalade delusions,

       hugs that reach across skies, wrapp'd in tissue'd allusions

Dancing upon stratospheres of nectar'd light

 Joie de vivre of pickled posies

   held together with flecks of luminosity's glow 

Apricot and golden threads of an echoes' flow

    indistinguishable like two peas in a pod

  tantamount to polar opposite compulsions

     or scatter'd altered sentiments at random

      tango together to console inamorata's tiffs 

Flamboyant and flashy or restrained, no rules apply

    still playfully submerged on paper

Grandiose finale of rhythms imaginative encore

    a celebration in life's masterpiece of poetic license

Author's Note

Reviews

[Blue]

"Love's blindness or universal forgiveness
pearls of wisdom don'd in a pen's signature"

My favorite lines.

I love poems which deal with poetry and you nailed this one, Frieda. I love your alliteration in:
"Saucy soul sisters serendipitously saunter" and "Bodacious baubles bubble beautifully bound".

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille Arzel, jazz'd you enjoyed this one, just so happens I adore poems about poetry too.

[redzone]

And I would take these "Rapsodic Poetic Pearls", string them together in a necklace with marmalade and apricot spice, hang it around you neck and proclaim: "Sometimes it's just poetry"... but oh what poetry..
~~redzone

[Frieda P]

Awh you're too kind Curt, thanks muchly, so glad you found this one....x

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

One that can be worn around the neck of wrist, either way it's touching, well done.

[Frieda P]

I prefer the neck, thanks again Thomas.

[Michael G. Smith]

I couldn't have said it better myself, bravo!

[Frieda P]

Thanks Mike, jazz'd you enjoyed this one!

[Rita L. Sev]

Coleridge said that Poetry was "the best words in the best order." Your poem proves that, and then some, Frieda. Simply poetry... and so much more.

Joie de vivre of pickled posies - ;) Love this!

[Frieda P]

Woo doing the pickl'd posy dance ;-) Grazie mille!

[Chandradhish Ghosh]

Oh you have included almost all the subjects at a poet's disposal...one can understand how deeply you love poetry. I love this one Freida

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much, I think we all do....

[LadyAnn68]

Absolutely perfectly described...a tower of excellence...verbal skills...imagery exactness. AMAZING! I love this will save to my library!

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Lady Ann, muchly appreciated!

[LadyAnn68]

It almost makes me think of a strand of pearls each one a tower of accomplishment with very valuable writing we complete! Such a good job! WOW

[Tai Ryens]

A captivating poem about poetry itself, and the many faces of it. Well done!

[Frieda P]

Jazz'd you enjoyed my rhapsody, what's better than poetry, thanks so much!

[Thaddius]

This is essentially a grocery store list of poetry forms. I think you carry off some of it quite well:
'or just fun to roll off the tongue
Saucy soul sisters serendipitously saunter
Bodacious baubles bubble beautifully bound'
A 'daringly or admirably attractive showy trinket bubbling beautifully and encircled by metal bands' is inherently meaningless - it's logorrhea personified - but that's the point of your line, that it’s fun to roll off the tongue. There is a way to illustrate alliteration and assonance with some semblance of meaning, but you're just having fun, and I get that.

There is some further beautiful phrasing in this, in your rambling rhapsodic style:

'exalted lovers who cuddle and coo us’, 'Rainbows and stars leaping over cobalt'd blue moons', 'fairies and berry, cherry dust' are all vivid and fanciful. This is like an add for a radio station where they play 3 seconds of Skynyrd, 3 of Zeppelin, 3 of Blondie, etc. - a greatest hits karaoke sample of what you love about poetry. You could improve it by really embodying different styles, rather than cheerleading them all in the same breathless one.

There are a lot of clunky words that weigh this down, make it inaccessible. It's visually appealing, but you overload the imagery by marrying descriptive words with abstract concepts in a way that negates the visual impact. You describe something that itself needs describing, you personify an esoteric ideal. 'tissue'd allusions' and 'flecks of luminosity's glow' are perfect examples of this. On the surface, it's gorgeous rhetoric. But what does an allusion look like? Why can't you describe the tissue-paper on the mantle by the fire, or the crinkled tissue in the triage wastebasket? Why can't you allude to an allusion somehow, paint an elephant in the room through the negative space? Why are you hell-bent on defining how poetry moves you, and decorating the definition with rich language? Your language resource is rich enough, so tell a story with it, don't dress up your dictionary. I'm saying this because as good as you are, you can still improve.

And lastly - I invite you to my rhetorical breakfast buffet with open arms. You can have some nuance nutmeg, some liturgical locks, and even some symbolism-parfait. But can I have my 'marmalade hallucinations' back, please? Read my poem 'A Shameless Poem', published on the 14th, and you'll find the original version of 'marmalade delusions' in stanza 5, line 3. I don't for a second believe this was deliberate. But it's too uncanny for me to let it brew. After all, one of the many forms of the poetry that we all love is plagiarism, is it not? Plagiarism parfait. Sounds even better. Thanks for understanding,

Thaddius

[Frieda P]

Thank you kindly for your in-depth review Thaddius, you make a few valid points, I wanted this one overly embellished, I was caught up in the ecstasy of how poetry makes me feel and is amazingly affecting. There is always room for improvement, I strive for that every day. Your critique is taken under advisement. Lastly, I hardly think you own 'marmalade', Jack has used it in his poetry long before you, as I'm sure countless other's have too. I like the imagery it conjures in the mind's eye, it's a common enough treat for poets to delight in. Hold the parfait.

[Thaddius]

You are most welcome. I do not own any word. It just seemed to me, a logical person, that for you to write 'marmalade delusions' in a poem posted 2 days after my 'marmalade hallucination' out of pure coincidence is a bit of a stretch. No one owns any word, but combining that detail with that concept in such an original way really doesn't happen every day or two. It's not my property, but it would be nice for you to admit that you were inspired by reading my image in my poem.

[Frieda P]

Number one, when someone inspires me I always let them know it, two, the poem I read of yours said nothing about marmalade, it was about cigarette smoke or something of that nature, so you sir, are mistaken.

[Thaddius]

Perhaps we both tapped into the collective unconscious. Perhaps Cupid shot a marmalade hallucination into my poem, then marmalade delusions into yours. Perhaps. Don't be mad at me Frieda. I'm just sticking up for the little piece of me I recognized on foreign soil. Gotta look out for the kids, but maybe it's a parental ruse..

[Frieda P]

Oh you Cali boys are much too fragile, I'm not angry, just don't presume to know how my mind works, when I'm mad you'll surely know it, I'm Italiano and from joisey....

[Brittany Zedalis]

A truly beautiful take on poetry. Amazing, simply amazing!

[Frieda P]

Thanks Brittany, glad you enjoyed!