Hushaby whispers ~

Hushaby whispers,

 shadowy moonlit sighs

     hasten'd steps

 

abided

 to that gated expanse above 

  fantasy's chain'd melodic bond

you left without singing

    a farewell lullaby in kind remorse

even in death you speak softly, 

          glint my mind's eye

spirit's dancing beyond

        ether's cobalt'd skies

hearts on anguish'd fire within 

        crimson's soaked blood curse 

release me from this enduring pain,

    contrition'd regrets prevail in your name

Author's Note

captcah~unnaked

Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

I believe this speaks of a dear life lost before they are given the chance to truly deal what they are capable of, but instead making a move that has the same affects and intensity, but affects the lives of everyone differently: no longer accomplishing, but sorrowing, no longer full of joy and pride but regret. This actually brings back a quote I've written in my journals just a few days ago: "Love is eternal, but not the profound and extravagant feelings that it is often associated with. Love is a storm that leaves its scars on the body of the world, or at least mine, eternally, never to dissipate, and to forever serve as evidence of the pain once felt by a lover."
Well written piece, Frieda. Well done.

[Frieda P]

Wow, I love that quote Tai, I just might have to steal it. I wrote this about my sister Lee actually, she committed suicide and the pain lingers indefinitely. Thanks so much for your thoughts.

[Tai Ryens]

I actually thought it would be, although I'm rather shy and get flustered when mentioning personal details of other's lives. I commend you for having lived through that pain, though. It's truly tragic that people would take their own lives, due to any circumstances that may happen to arise. Well done, I must mention again, well done and poignant piece indeed.

[Sami Khalil]

Regrets prevail and linger in our hearts for the lost ones that brought us streams of tears without any resolution in sight. Souls long to freedom from pain and suffering...A great sad poem...:)............

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille Sami.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome muchly...:)....................

[Jack...]

I too know the heavy breath you breathe as you pen these poems my sweet friend. The sadness reaches a trembling hand to my heart...and the tears I cry are only for you. This sorrow like a never ending silent lullaby fills the breeze with darkness and shutters your smile. However your talent shines as a bright beacon in these shadows and I am honored to read you.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Jack, means a lot to me my friend.

[redflutterby]

Sigh...I know where this poem comes from. Im always amazed at the different ways you have for describing Lee's loss from your life. There is always a poignant bitter sweet beauty to the words you use. The reader is saddened but also left with a sense of awe...

Your love for her and the strength you exhibit (though you may not see it) always touches my heart...xo

[Frieda P]

Thanks Red, you know how I get on this day, truly appreciate your support and care my friend. xo

[redflutterby]

Yes I do.... and I'm so sorry you have to relive this pain every month. Though theres never a day where it isnt in your mind hun! Hugs...xo

[Frieda P]

No there's not, but against my will I'm dragged to these images every month, I wonder if it ever ends...Amy she sings it perfectly, There's just too much that time cannot erase. xo

[Praveeta]

Another heartfelt piece from a talented poet.

"release me from this enduring pain,
contrition'd regrets prevail in your name"

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Praveeta.

[Praveeta]

My pleasure.

[TL Boehm]

release me from this enduring pain. sometimes peace is so far away.

[Frieda P]

Very, very far, thanks Tam.

[Scott Metro]

Is there a cure..?...let me know.
Tasted your anguish...
Well done my dear.

Scott

[Frieda P]

Apparently not, thanks Scott...

[Scott Metro]

I KNOW I KNOW... :)
S.

[MsJewel]

Even when you write of sadness and longing, I see the beauty in your words Frieda..
You have an incredible talent.

:) Julie

[Frieda P]

You humble me Julie, thanks so much for your kind words. :-)

[ron]

Lost love? The longing to be with the one we miss most. Lovely poem as always Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Something like that ron, thanks so much.

[ron]

You are most welcome Frieda.

[Frieda P]

It's really about my sister Lee.

[ron]

I understand Frieda, gives you a Big hug. I know you love her with all your heart.

[Mark]

Sad and regretful. Remorse isn't a verb. Regret might work better there.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Mark, at the last minute I switched up remorse and regret, that last line gave me a problem, hardy says what I need it to say.

[Mark]

If not regret maybe just contrition by itself. That gives the same image to me.

[Frieda P]

What do you think now, and don't remark on the apostrophe ;-)

[Mark]

It's the same to me but if it work's for you keep it.