Ice'd Lullabye

Your untouchable promises

     chill'd in my veins

my fragile posies were left

           out in the frosted reign

swept me up in your darkly 

                 abstruse sweetness

etch'd love songs

          on my skin's tremblings

prayers that were answer'd

          with sad weakness

lullabies dull'd my sensibilities

        and dying fortitude

fell on my knees upon

         my own strangled heart

rescuing  me from myself,

          you brush'd lusty tendrils aside

in contemptible silent sighs,

               from the depths of apathy

i need your emptiness to 

      fill my void'd briny spirit

frosted over my convictions,

             i lie frozen in icy drifts of regret  

Author's Note

Seriously, captcha is hellhag!

Reviews

[Eric Pudalov]

This poem is so powerful I'm having a hard time finding the right words to express how I feel about it, Frieda! It's rare that I'm at a loss for words, but I think this is one of those cases.

Nonetheless, I still like it; if you moved me that much, I suppose you've done your job!!

[Frieda P]

So good to know Eric, thanks muchly, this one happens to be a favorite of mine, jazz'd you enjoyed.

[Eric Pudalov]

There's the featured review thing again...I still don't get it. How do you "feature" something?

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

yesterday I smiled but today I cry and its not necessarily a bad thing....its a real thing. It is why I dont always swing in for a read. Here in your words and thoughts ...it is real....sometimes gentle but sometimes hard. I often leave feeling naked and raw...but I think that is what real poetry is about...truth..emotions..inspirations...hopes...and even doubts. Thanks Freida, maybe I just needed the pinch to remember I am the one still alive

[Frieda P]

Ahhh Queenie, your response gave me a shiver, I know it well, perhaps we need to pinch one another on occasion, I know exactly how that feels. Thanks so much for your kindness my friend.

[Avinash]

Love long lost leaving scars on soul which refuse to heal...Sometimes you can't help pondering over them.
As always a beauty from your stores.

[Frieda P]

Some scars never heal over, thanks so much Avinash.

[Cassie]

Just what i needed to end my afternoon.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Cassie, enjoy the rest of your day!

[AYVID N]

"Your untouchable promises

chill'd in my veins

my fragile posies were left

out in the frosted reign"




" i lie frozen in icy drifts of regret "
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This is what I call most perfect poetry!

[Frieda P]

Woo thanks so much Divya, you humble me my sweet friend!

[AYVID N]

You are the mostest welcome Frieda!

[Praveeta]

Beautifully written.

My favourite lines:

my own strangled heart
rescuing me from myself,


And

i need your emptiness to
fill my void'd briny spirit

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Praveeta, glad you enjoyed.

[Praveeta]

You are welcome dear friend.

[Pryde Foltz]

you brush'd lusty tendrils aside
in contemptible silent sighs,
from the depths of apathy
i need your emptiness to
fill my void'd briny spirit
frosted over my convictions,
i lie frozen in icy drifts of regret

Some powerful stuff, Frieda. Even captcha couldn't upstage it.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Pryde, captcha is getting fresh these days.

[Raymond Federle]

Very deep and emotional...luv'd it!

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Raymond!

[kublakhan27]

Part of me wants to say "Ice Ice Baby!" but it would probably undermine how knocked out I am by this piece...you've awoke a plethora of emotions in me here, but above all, I'm just amazed by how great a poet you are...I never thought I'd cross paths with anybody this good...yes, it's a great piece Mrs.R ;P xo

[Frieda P]

Ha Benji, you're a nutter, I'm going to have to double your check next month you keep this up my sweet friend, seriously I don't pay you enough. ;-) What can I say, you humble me, thanks from the bottom of my heart dear xxoo

[kublakhan27]

Haha you know I'd probably spend it on Smirnoff Mrs.R...but that's not a bad thing is it? ;) Really though, your talent is astounding...you were just meant to write...xo

[Shaquana Adams]

I really liked the smoothness of this poem with the music. They go together so well. Also, the line
"frosted over my convictions,
i lie frozen in icy drifts of regret"
Really resonated with me. Very good work! :)

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much, it's about Darien ;-P haha

[Shaquana Adams]

Hahahaha! I guess I deserve that ;)

[Frieda P]

LOL ;-P

[Ai Lun]

I know that it's such a silly reason for liking this poem, but I liked it because of the contrast between your superfluous use of words and the purposefully incorrect use of 'd on loads of words. It was liking a painting with words. Like a contrast of colours, but in grammatical form. Loved it!

[Frieda P]

I'm not particular as long as you liked it...ha, thanks so much! ;-)