Ice'd Lullabye

Your untouchable promises

     chill'd in my veins

my fragile posies were left

           out in the frosted reign

swept me up in your darkly 

                 abstruse sweetness

etch'd love songs

          on my skin's tremblings

prayers that were answer'd

          with sad weakness

lullabies dull'd my sensibilities

        and dying fortitude

fell on my knees upon

         my own strangled heart

rescuing  me from myself,

          you brush'd lusty tendrils aside

in contemptible silent sighs,

               from the depths of apathy

i need your emptiness to 

      fill my void'd briny spirit

frosted over my convictions,

             i lie frozen in icy drifts of regret  

Author's Note

Seriously, captcha is hellhag!

Reviews

[Eric Pudalov]

This poem is so powerful I'm having a hard time finding the right words to express how I feel about it, Frieda! It's rare that I'm at a loss for words, but I think this is one of those cases.

Nonetheless, I still like it; if you moved me that much, I suppose you've done your job!!

[Frieda P]

So good to know Eric, thanks muchly, this one happens to be a favorite of mine, jazz'd you enjoyed.

[Eric Pudalov]

There's the featured review thing again...I still don't get it. How do you "feature" something?

[NeiL ArandA]

This is a well balance piece. Perfect choice of music to prep the mood and sets the tone ....Its very soothing indeed to read and reflection..:)

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much for your kind words Neil ;-)

[Rita L. Sev]

Those icy drifts of regret... This is beautiful poetry, with a desolate chill, Frieda...

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille Rita...

[Brittany Zedalis]

etch'd love songs
on my skin's tremblings

such a good poem!

[Frieda P]

Thanks Brittany, glad you enjoyed~!

[wrote.here]

▔□▔)/▔□▔)/▔□▔)/ fangirling over this!

[Frieda P]

Thanks, muchly appreciated!

[Stella Armour]

i always know that i will not be disappointed when i come to your page Frieda.. you are one hell of a poetess:
"i need your emptiness to
fill my void'd briny spirit
frosted over my convictions,
i lie frozen in icy drifts of regret "

fantastic..

[Frieda P]

You're so sweet Stella, thanks so much for your kind words.

[Gazza]

This poem is absolutely beautiful, short and very powerful. I also like the unique arrangement, looks different from the usual. I'm not sure if it was deliberate and was supposed to bring out an effect

[Frieda P]

Thanks for your visit and generous review, glad you enjoyed Gazza.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow, i feel chilly after reading this...and i am never cold as i am so warm blooded...

"i need your emptiness to fill my void"

damn good line there.

whole poem is exquisite in wording and tone...

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much for your kind words jacob, means a lot coming from you...

[SAYED THANGAL]

the opening line itself renders the essence of the poem, very nice

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Sayed, glad it had that impact.

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You always wow me here Frieda! Its a shocker in an array:) all I can say lol:) You leave a person breathless beyond words:)

[Frieda P]

Breathless, thanks so much Jonathan, I'll take that my friend, muchly appreciated. :-)

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Smilesssssssssssssssssssssssss:)

[Vidya Bacchus]

This is awesome Freida.Sometimes love fooks us up royally lol Borrowing your word there :)

[Frieda P]

Ha, be my guest, and yep... thanks muchly, jazz'd you enjoyed Vidya ;-)

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome :)