Ice'd Lullabye

Your untouchable promises

     chill'd in my veins

my fragile posies were left

           out in the frosted reign

swept me up in your darkly 

                 abstruse sweetness

etch'd love songs

          on my skin's tremblings

prayers that were answer'd

          with sad weakness

lullabies dull'd my sensibilities

        and dying fortitude

fell on my knees upon

         my own strangled heart

rescuing  me from myself,

          you brush'd lusty tendrils aside

in contemptible silent sighs,

               from the depths of apathy

i need your emptiness to 

      fill my void'd briny spirit

frosted over my convictions,

             i lie frozen in icy drifts of regret  

Author's Note

Seriously, captcha is hellhag!

Reviews

[Eric Pudalov]

This poem is so powerful I'm having a hard time finding the right words to express how I feel about it, Frieda! It's rare that I'm at a loss for words, but I think this is one of those cases.

Nonetheless, I still like it; if you moved me that much, I suppose you've done your job!!

[Frieda P]

So good to know Eric, thanks muchly, this one happens to be a favorite of mine, jazz'd you enjoyed.

[Eric Pudalov]

There's the featured review thing again...I still don't get it. How do you "feature" something?

[Heaven]

My gawd...this was powerful! It put chills in my spine with it's bluntness. Thank you for this. Your use of words are so amazing and raw.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Heaven, I'm jazzed you found this one, it's one of my favorites, your review is muchly appreciated...

[Kai Rollins]

i lie frozen in icy drifts of regret. Inspiring words in their own way. Moving. I'm glad I was able to find this. Lovely write

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Kai, appreciate your kind words.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Crafted and unblemished, a piece that sing at night.

[Frieda P]

As long as I'm not singing it, tone deaf here, thanks Thomas.

[Michael G. Smith]

One of my faves. You really touched upon the inner spirit with this supple write.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Michael.

[Blue]

You are fearless when it comes to playing with words, Frieda. I absolutely love this and the song is beautiful, too. This is my kind of music. Do you have more songs to recommend?

[Frieda P]

Almost missed this great review, thanks so much Arzel, if only poetry were real life, I'd have all those fears under control....I have a ton of songs, what kind of music do you prefer?

[Blue]

It's okay... I want something mellow... I don't exactly know but I know I like it when I hear one. :)

[Tai Ryens]

There's a certain aspect of love that entices me in the way it tempts us to betray our own rational thoughts, seducing us into squashing our hearts with our own knees as we bend to express our gratitude and undying love for another. Cynical perspectives of love aside, I do believe this tells the story of a toxic relationship carrying on despite one party already knowing that the love is toxic. I can relate. You've done well with this piece.

[Frieda P]

Unfortunately too many can, makes you wonder why, toxic being the key word, thanks Tai.

[Coyote Poetry]

"i need your emptiness to
fill my void'd briny spirit
frosted over my convictions,
i lie frozen in icy drifts of regret "
The above lines are powerful. We will fill emptiness with the wrong things when we can't control our need and want. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Frieda P]

Thanks Coyote, often we do yes indeed.

[Mark]

Hello Dearest.Been away from here for awhile. But I feel welcomed back by your beautifully crafted words.
Very nicely done.

[Frieda P]

What a pleasant surprise, nice to see you again Mark, thanks so much for your kind words.

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

I love it, it. Just flows together.

;-)

Kaze~

[Frieda P]

Doing the happy dance, thanks Kazie ;-)

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Hahaha! Your welcome Frieda. ;-)