Epic Blunder

   

 ...and birds sang in their melodious harmony

  unaware the city lights were dimming,

    as thunderous clouds echo'd the starry skies

  heaven's floodgates open'd with a roaring plea

   what happened to our proud ancestor's 

        who believed us to be true?

 a wise old owl glare'd as he interrupted

        whilst sitting in

 a tree

             

grown of concrete rooted intentions

  'it

 isn't in the blood but the heart'

    love for the land and respect 

         for spirits and creatures

        still abounds, yet mankind has lost it's mind,

          pollution's flagrant dark noise surrounds

    culture and civilization made room for modernization

       looming on magenta's majestic horizons lies a smog,

         footprints of soot'd snow and darkly hue'd ponds,

           where white dove feathers can no longer fly~

Quiet overcame the earthly night, without uttering a sound

just wicked torrents of tears that never ended in another sunrise

     ...and the humming of birds ceased in enraged teeming rains

Author's Note

Reviews

[redzone]

Frieda, I am so glad you have written this poem, a poem like this, it reminds me that we poets have more to say than just the jazziness of our own lives, loves, sensualities. That we have a responsibilities to each other, and all life on this fragile planet. And you have also done this in a metaphorically rich and beautiful way,with words dripping in the colors of our world. I couldn't hear the music but I appreciated the butterfly.. and the owl.. to me, this poem shows the depth of your artistry... really nice Frieda.. (I got out my nano and danced while listening to Michael Jackson's 'Earth Song' also a cool video if you wanna watch on youtube)... can I hug you Frieda.. er.. I mean I love your poem.. ;0)

[Frieda P]

We have a helluva lot to say don't we curt, this one is close to the heart and everyone should be concerned about our situation in the sun. Ahh, nice good choice of music for this one, dance curt, dance! Thanks so much, and a squishy hug comin' atcha! x ;-)

[Priscilla Sayers]

Gorgeous, strong, purposeful and YES! Thought provoking for those who care. I care! I love your voice sweet Sister! This is a breath of fresh air as we all ponder the atrocities of corporate mankind, the delusions of those mice and rats caught up in the materialism, the rat race redefined into the death of our humanity.
This piece is but a spark, a spark to ignite a fire that I hope will spread into a wild fire of knowledge as we all pause and truly realize what you are screaming here in such poetic fluidity...
I Love this Wifey!

[Frieda P]

Ah, sounds as though you're passionate about this subject too! Thanks so much Priscilla, glad you enjoyed my emotional spiel of a plea here, this littered rat race might just be the death of us all. Grazie mille sweet sis!

[Priscilla Sayers]

No Love, never the death of us all, only those who are too blind to realize what is happening around them as the forests recede and the wild life with it. It is a disgusting display of "Society" that has cause this atrocity as those of us who are aware start the building blocks to not only stand against it and speak out but those of us who are DOING something about it in even the smallest actions.
Love you Sis!

[Frieda P]

Perhaps not us, but I worry our children, and their children, how much and how long can the planet survive under this kind of duress I wonder. We're already feeling adverse effects in weather patterns, etc. from holes in the ozone layer....Sending love right back at you! x

[Priscilla Sayers]

We are the Teachers, as well as the Doers, that can lead the World into balance...

[David Scott]

The funny thing is... again not so much funny as "funny" like "funny smelling"... human kind is supposedly created to be the caretaker of this Earth and all of nature.
The true epic blunder was to think anything in the universe could work outside the laws it was created within. Humanity just got caught up following the father of all blunders... Even those who claim to desire to take care of nature don't even understand how to do it. Anything short of total balance will fail. Do you know anyone who is totally balanced? Hmmm?

I like the gentle desperation your penned this with. Also this picture of cleansing water. I think we will see plenty of it. :)

I like the philosophical leanings even if I do personally go back to a different origin than you might intend.

[Frieda P]

Can there truly be balance in a modern society I wonder Scott....

[Bluefire]

This piece is amazing. It was different than what I thought it would be. It spelled out mankind's biggest possible blunder in a very artistic way.
Well done!

[Frieda P]

Not sure what you were expecting but I'm glad you enjoyed this piece, thanks so much Bluefire!

[Bluefire]

Well, the only time I've ever heard the word "Blunder" was on TruTV's Worlds Dumbest, where they record stupid but funny blunders and put them n TV, so I think I was expecting something comical but instead got something amazing an true. ^^ No problem.

[Frieda P]

Ahhh have never seen the show, jazz'd you were pleasantly surprised... :-)

[BlackRose]

Love it. A strong wonderful write speaking on what matters and is important. Sometimes rallying for that cause in hopes of getting their attention and changes made. It's a shame what goes no matter where, but inevitably do what we can and hope for those changes to come.

[Frieda P]

Thanks BlackRose, it's a universal dilemma, we can only do our best I suppose.

[BlackRose]

Yes, every little bit from each of us count in bigs ways.

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem had the feel of a Native American tale. The good description led the reader into thoughts and beautiful place to be.
'it isn't in the blood but the heart'
love for the land and respect
for spirits and creatures"
The lines seem so simple. The gifts of the earth are not appreciated till they are gone. No weakness in the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Coyote, exactly what I was hoping for, have friends of Lakota heritage, and they're always sending me inspiring music in praises of mother earth.

[Coyote Poetry]

You did. I enjoyed the journey.

[Lyn Anderson]

I like this a lot -- I have one very similar to this, it is way, way back, I will send you a read request. I feel this way too, I am sure a lot of us do, and it is expressed beautifully here.

[Frieda P]

Read it, excellent, yours has more of a power punch to it....

[Lyn Anderson]

I think yours is more eloquent - so if we go out for martinis, you are the graceful swan and I am the one with the edge?

[Frieda P]

Rolling my eyes here, I ain't no graceful swam, I'm from joisey hahaha

[Einstein Noodle]

i needed this reminder this morning; my thoughts have been self focused lately as i anticipate my going half time at work ... woot woot!
i love the owl .. such a big ol' bird and mighty hunter ... its a difficult world for the heart you describe ... it does seem sometimes, the only solution is cleansing annihilating rain .. great last verse says i
E.

[Frieda P]

Good on you E...enjoy your extra leisure time! Thanks so much, glad you approve of the storm. ;-)

[Giggling Star]

Portraying a sad end to this amazingly wonderful world in which we live. Good job here. Worthy of publication everywhere and anywhere. Thanks for saying it and sharing it.

[Frieda P]

Wow stargazer, thanks so much for this glowing review, you've humbled me my friend.

[Giggling Star]

Is your middle name "speedy" by any chance? :)

[Frieda P]

I saw it pop up on the live feed, hardly, it's still morning right? ;-)

[Ahena MK]

really good !! and nice moving picture !! the music went wonderfully with the letters... real good image you created in my head !! had fun ..
some of your best
ahena :)

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Ahena, glad you enjoyed. :-)

[m.s.early]

great job frieda.

love for the land and respect
for spirits and creatures
still abounds, yet mankind has lost it's mind

boom. point on. utter insanity isn't it?

[Frieda P]

Indeed, I wish I knew what the solution was, thanks so much xavier.