Epic Blunder

   

 ...and birds sang in their melodious harmony

  unaware the city lights were dimming,

    as thunderous clouds echo'd the starry skies

  heaven's floodgates open'd with a roaring plea

   what happened to our proud ancestor's 

        who believed us to be true?

 a wise old owl glare'd as he interrupted

        whilst sitting in

 a tree

             

grown of concrete rooted intentions

  'it

 isn't in the blood but the heart'

    love for the land and respect 

         for spirits and creatures

        still abounds, yet mankind has lost it's mind,

          pollution's flagrant dark noise surrounds

    culture and civilization made room for modernization

       looming on magenta's majestic horizons lies a smog,

         footprints of soot'd snow and darkly hue'd ponds,

           where white dove feathers can no longer fly~

Quiet overcame the earthly night, without uttering a sound

just wicked torrents of tears that never ended in another sunrise

     ...and the humming of birds ceased in enraged teeming rains

Author's Note

Reviews

[redzone]

Frieda, I am so glad you have written this poem, a poem like this, it reminds me that we poets have more to say than just the jazziness of our own lives, loves, sensualities. That we have a responsibilities to each other, and all life on this fragile planet. And you have also done this in a metaphorically rich and beautiful way,with words dripping in the colors of our world. I couldn't hear the music but I appreciated the butterfly.. and the owl.. to me, this poem shows the depth of your artistry... really nice Frieda.. (I got out my nano and danced while listening to Michael Jackson's 'Earth Song' also a cool video if you wanna watch on youtube)... can I hug you Frieda.. er.. I mean I love your poem.. ;0)

[Frieda P]

We have a helluva lot to say don't we curt, this one is close to the heart and everyone should be concerned about our situation in the sun. Ahh, nice good choice of music for this one, dance curt, dance! Thanks so much, and a squishy hug comin' atcha! x ;-)

[Angel]

Oh, WOW!!
Magnifico, my Italian beauty.
A subject very dear to the heart of God...
and the angels all weep.

[Frieda P]

It's a subject that should be close to everyone's heart, thanks Angel!

[Angel]

You are so right, my friend.
Keep spreading the word...

[Mark]

Not sure humanity has lost it's mind .. maybe there are just too damn many minds. A poem as abundant in life as the planet is. Nice music.

[Frieda P]

Oh I'm pretty sure, thanks so much, I like the music too Mark.

[Brittany Zedalis]

You really give your all every time you write. I love it. :]

[Frieda P]

i'm an all or nothing kind of gal, that's how we do things in joisey haha ;-) Thanks Brittany...

[ashesonfire]

Aw, this is very nice! You can definitely tell you pour your heart into your writing. Very beautiful. I love the videos you pair with your writing.

"pollution's flagrant dark noise surrounds" how sad and powerful of a line!

[Frieda P]

Thanks again for this glowing review, muchly appreciated!

[ashesonfire]

Of course :D

[Pryde Foltz]

Quiet overcame the earthly night, without uttering a sound
just wicked torrents of tears that never ended in another sunrise
...and the humming of birds ceased in enraged teeming rains

Wow … I LIKE THIS WRITE.

[Frieda P]

THANK YOU muchly Pryde...........

[Pryde Foltz]

YOU ARE WELCOME;)

[Frieda P]

;-)

[Chandradhish Ghosh]

For the first time I have read a poem of your which does not delve in human emotions...the first stanza is brilliant...I really like "
a wise old owl glare'd as he interrupted
whilst sitting in a tree
grown of concrete rooted intentions"
I will be honest, I didn't quite like the second part much...but I guess it's not your fault as a poet...there's too much of "human cruelty" there...

[Frieda P]

I respectfully disagree, this is as brutally close as you can get to human emotions, it includes all mankind. We're killing ourselves slowly and the planet along with us. ...sorry you didn't like the second half, thanks for your response.

[Chandradhish Ghosh]

Yes yes...I agree with you...I meant that I hate this human cruelty...my words came out differently... :)

[Frieda P]

I understood what you meant on the second half. ;-)

[Rita L. Sev]

Our proud ancestors... what would they say if they could see us now? A thoughtful poem on an important topic, Frieda.

[Frieda P]

I'm pretty sure they couldn't fathom half of what goes on, if they just saw the waste alone, it would do them in...thanks Rita.

[Baby Ricochet]

" The creature in the sky
got sucked in a hole
now there's a hole in the sky
and the ground's not cold
and if the ground's not cold
everything is gonna burn
we'll all take turns
I'll get mine too."
This Monkey's gone to Heaven: The Pixies

That's the song this poem brought to mind. Great work Frieda

[Frieda P]

Interesting lyrics, not familiar with that one, I'll have to hit youtube, thanks Baby.

[NeiL ArandA]

Wow this is some awesome writing here Ms Frieda I felt the beatings of the wings like a drum. Stunning and morphing ...

[Frieda P]

Woo love your response Neil, so jazz'd you reacted that way, thanks muchly...

[NeiL ArandA]

Yes ..Its like watching and viewing Steven Spielberg movie ..director's cut ...

[Frieda P]

Wow now you just blew me away.......