[Heavy]

Floating

        face down

 in a vast sea

 of darkly

 tinged water, 

lungs filling

 with

 unfathomable

 guilt 

and pain,

 raging rolls

 of thunderous 

waves 

overwhelm

 and permeate

 the senses

 to the core 

dragging 

steadily,

descending

turbulently 

to the depths

 of death's 

haunting 

siren call

Author's Note

Reviews

[Jack...]

Frieda, once more you grace my eyes with amazing poetry, but perhaps for the first time I might have to disagree...guilt, I know, I truly know it is felt, but I am not so sure it is warranted. Your sadness pains me, your broken heart hurts me, and you have every right to feel all that you do, but guilt...maybe not so much.

Still you are an amazing poet and your words always strike a chord with me. This one in particular takes me down with you, down deep into those dark waters where it's hard to breathe, but not to keep me there, to allow me to lift you above the water line. Breathe my friend...breathe.

[Frieda P]

Your words always touch my heart and bring a smile to my face Jack. Sigh, I think there's always guilt when someone commits suicide, no matter if you could have done something, said a comforting word, it comes with the pain left behind. I've spoken to quite a few people about it, and it seems universal. Thanks for life line, I know I can always depend on you my dear friend. xo

[s y e]

Frieda, you're owning my tears with this heartfelt poems to your sister.... Never in a million years would she want you to feel guilty for what happened. I can't tell you how this poem affects me..... I'm utterly speechless and sending hugs and love to you from across the pond..........x

[Frieda P]

Felt as though I was being swallowed whole yesterday, it just hit out of nowhere, this one sort of pen'd itself really, felt good to get it out of my system, thanks noodles hon. xo

[emmajoy]

I've read and want to applaud the sad beauty of your writing, BUT hope youll forgive me for saying yet again, that your guilt is the last thing, THE VERY LAST THING, Lee would want for you. She'd be shocked, hurt that you could deny a sweet life to the person she probably loved best in the world. YOU.

Dear, dear Frieda, find light in your beautiful heart.. smile for her, dance for her, live for Lee.

Your presumptuous Brit friend who truly cares.

[Frieda P]

Sweet petulia, was just one of those horrible, no good, terrible days that creeps up on one out of the blue, had to vent it....thanks so much for your luverly words and caring so much my dear friend. xo

[emmajoy]

(Frieda) as always.

[Pryde Foltz]

Loved the musical coupling you achieved with this piece. A dark mood can be like a siren's call. Yep.

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille Pryde, took me a while to find the right music, jazz'd you enjoyed.

[Tom C]

Oh Frieda you lovely woman. It is so sad when someone goes and you do not know why. It was in their mind but you would have never guessed it for you love life and share the beauty of it with is. This is tragic. I am sorry.
I am here for you if you need someone to talk to.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much again Tom, i feel a bit of relief after purging it all, I'll be back to my sarcastic self in no time....I do appreciate your kind thoughts my friend.

[Scott Metro]

A bit of the dark tonight....
Did somebody pee in your corn flakes..?..LOL
Chin up!!!!!

Scott

[Frieda P]

Worse, my coffee!

[Scott Metro]

Poor dear...cheer up..I like to read you..but I feel bad when you feel bad....why?..who knows..but I do.

[Frieda P]

Awh, that's what friends are for.....thanks hon.

[Scott Metro]

OK..but now you force me to do this...KISS..complete with wolf drool and slobber...ichhh !

[Frieda P]

Oh gawd, I should have quit while I was ahead!

[Scott Metro]

sorry.........

[Frieda P]

As if I'd believe a wolf......

[Scott Metro]

believe this....don't be sad..OK????

[Frieda P]

Deal, I'm doing better now, promise. x

[Scott Metro]

:) :) :) :) :) :)
S.

[Frieda P]

Sometimes you just need to unload all this stuff, ya know? :-)

[Scott Metro]

Good night sugar..I know.

[Frieda P]

Night Scott....

[Sami Khalil]

I felt the form and the powerful sinking feelings in this siren song of the deep calling us into the abyss. The mermaid of the sea can take the dive and still come up victorious. You are the one...:)...............

[Frieda P]

Awh Sami, what a sweet thing to say....thanks muchly :-)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome muchly...:)...........................