~Darkly Dancin'

~Darkly Dancin'

A Poem by Frieda P

Fallen under a darkly cast spell
eerie spectral vibrations in my bones
music compos'd upon churchly organs
rushing shivers up my uncompromising spine,
demons playing charades on blacken'd keys
heart bleeds a dull beryl hue of expir'd crimson 
mind whirling in sickly remuneration tunes  
dance track takes flight without raven's hindsight
commission'd by devil's own apathetic self  

© 2014 Frieda P


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// music compos'd upon churchly organs
rushing shivers up my uncompromising spine,
demons playing charades on blacken'd keys
heart bleeds a dull beryl hue of expir'd crimson //

Wow chicka, I knew you could write but this takes it to a whole other level! This was so dark I could hardly see. And the music.... Sent shivers up my spine.

You've blown me away... Wow. Flip flops & all that jazz!!



Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Jazz'd it had the intended effect noodlebumble....wooo, more flip flops, it's gonna be a good day! ;.. read more



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Epic poem. Love the darkness in it.

Your's truly Kaze~

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Ahhh Epic, love that word, thanks muchly Kaze....
♔ CrownedDevil ☾

10 Years Ago

Your very welcome Frieda. :)
Wonderfully dark, gothic and beautiful! This is my fav kind of poem. Music is excellent! Well done indeed. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much Raymond, doing the happy dance!
You ALWAYS have the most epic music. That sounds just like Nox Arcana.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Michael Thrower

10 Years Ago

I hardly know the new crowd, but it seems to consist of a 12-15 year old audience. I miss the old wa.. read more
Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Awh, you really make it sound pathetic...there's kids here but there's also some excellent poets tha.. read more
Michael Thrower

10 Years Ago

I've seen a few. And I really do. 4/5 of them haven't been online in forever.
Well...anytime I see a piece from you with dancing in the title, a reading and review cannot be delayed haha My jaw weighs a ton in the aftermath of reading this...I'm still trying to lift it up. And I'm still vibrating from the reverberations of line two in my mind. I love this piece to death...dance on Mrs.R...to the end of love ;) xo

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Haha I'm sure I have a big goofy grin on right now Mrs.R...or my jaw is still sore...something is ma.. read more
Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Hahaha, you did the job, Leonard was just a bonus Benji ;-) xo
kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Haha Whew, I'm relieved ;) xo
DARK..is the word in this one. I got chills reading it and not the good kind. Id much rather tango under a summer moon then take a whirl to this music...sigh...

By the way is it supposed to be fight or flight? ;-)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Speaking of, when you writing that riding hood kraken? ;-P
redflutterby

10 Years Ago

Ha....dont rush my muse...shes a little kranky lately!! ;-pp
Frieda P

10 Years Ago

So write a kranky kraken............
Ooo, this is dark and I really like it. The video you have along with it scared the hell out of me when it started automatically playing, hahaha. Thank you for posting! :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Haha, sorry about that...I should post a warning eh? Thanks so much Brittany, glad you liked it ;-)
Brittany Zedalis

10 Years Ago

You're welcome :)
Yeah! This rocks. When I first went to look, I was, oh oh, music... so often when i hear music in the presentation, there are lyrics, and i wrestle with them to read, so ultimately turn off said music... But this was great. Reading was not only possible, but enhanced by the music. It feels as if the music wrote the poetry, and you gave it shape. I imagined the writer working over the craft to the hammering hollow tones of the bone machine. And as the organ played, the poem was hammered out like the player to the keys of the organ itself. Its lends this element of almost seeing the writer write. Fun work. Great capture of a mood. Ha, and then I gave it another listen, but from my real system, not the cpu, and... that's the way to go. I feel entertained. Thank you. Nice work.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Wow, I like your review better than my poem. I understand about the music, sometimes I feel that wa.. read more
Odysseus Wanders

10 Years Ago

I'm half shadow... all the time;)
Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Shady, hahaha ;-)
I knew my spell would work....lol

demons playing charades on blacken'd keys
That line is magnificent....well done.
A beautiful bite of brimstone....
Admiration
Scott

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Ha, was it the spell alas? Brimstone and fire, that's me my pretty...thanks Scott ;-)
Scott Metro

10 Years Ago

..always my dear..
Scott
commission'd by devil's own apathetic self

I often wonder if the true demon lies in apathy as it allows so much injustice.

A wonderfully chilling write, Frieda.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

I would say so Pryde....apathy and indifference mean that people just don't give a damn....they turn.. read more
dark vibrations here alright Frieda... gorgeously deep and haunting....

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Ahhh woman after my own heart...
Stella Armour

10 Years Ago

have a read of my latest poem Frieda....it's "Dark"
Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Will do...............

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Added on January 20, 2014
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If you want to know me, read my poetry, it's all in there. I am a mother of three sons (my finest moments) a sister, a survivor and a little bit crazy. I lost my beloved sister to suicide, so you'll.. more..

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