~Darkly Dancin'

Fallen under a darkly cast spell

eerie spectral vibrations in my bones

music compos'd upon churchly organs

rushing shivers up my uncompromising spine,

demons playing charades on blacken'd keys

heart bleeds a dull beryl hue of expir'd crimson 

mind whirling in sickly remuneration tunes  

dance track takes flight without raven's hindsight

commission'd by devil's own apathetic self  

Author's Note

Reviews

[s y e]

// music compos'd upon churchly organs
rushing shivers up my uncompromising spine,
demons playing charades on blacken'd keys
heart bleeds a dull beryl hue of expir'd crimson //

Wow chicka, I knew you could write but this takes it to a whole other level! This was so dark I could hardly see. And the music.... Sent shivers up my spine.

You've blown me away... Wow. Flip flops & all that jazz!!

[Frieda P]

Jazz'd it had the intended effect noodlebumble....wooo, more flip flops, it's gonna be a good day! ;-)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

not the dancing to the tune of the lord here...not dancing with hope, but with foreboding...

this piece rings of the darkness of poe...and that slow rhythm evident in his work.

[Frieda P]

Oooh, you mention Poe in my review, thank you muchly jacob!

[SAYED THANGAL]

both of them are so attracting, enjoyed

[Frieda P]

Thanks sayed....

[SAYED THANGAL]

with pleasure

[ron]

Love the music and the poem. Dark dancing indeed. Have faith the light will rise through the ashes of dark's playful night.

[Frieda P]

Such the optimist ron!

[ron]

Sometimes I can be Frieda :)

[Frieda P]

I'm a realist, makes for crankpants sometimes... ;-)

[ron]

Oh hush you are not a cranky pants Frieda. Now go sit down and behave...lol

[Frieda P]

Hahaha never!!!

[ron]

Oh your a difficult one aren't you, um I'll leave it at that least I put my big foot in my mouth. lol

[Frieda P]

Good idea, you're a wise man ;)

[ron]

It's not nice to throw insults around, someone might get the wrong idea. ;)

[Frieda P]

Ha you were insulted by wise? ;-)

[ron]

I'm trying to humble...guess it didn't work lol.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Oh Frieda, it is like we write with the same poison dipped pen, fabulous!

[Frieda P]

High praise from you my dark friend!! x

[Leslie Philibert]

Read both the poems, enjoyed them.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Leslie.

[Ahena MK]

real good !!!
nicely crafted ..
ahena :)

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Ahena, glad you enjoyed!! :-)

[Tai Ryens]

Eerie . . . You've managed to portray the tune of a song that sends shivers up the spines of men with a conscience . . . I can't help but wonder what it could be used for.

[Frieda P]

Men with a conscience, come again...haha, thanks Tai. ;-)

[Tai Ryens]

I say that because I can imagine some supposedly "apathetic villain with no conscience" as I've seen them described often hunched over an experiment playing this song you describe . . . aha

[Mark]

An apathetic devil composer. Demons playing charades. Interesting imagws.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Mark, glad you enjoyed my demonic imagery.....

[Mark]

Actually, I have to be honest. I am not really sure I enjoyed it. It is different though. Do you polish your work or just write it and that's it?

[Dhaye]

Full of darkness! You can really write any genre, Frieda. And you always have the best choice of music. You're great!

[Frieda P]

You humble me with your kind praise Dhaye, thanks so much!

[Dhaye]

My pleasure. =)