~Darkly Dancin'

Fallen under a darkly cast spell

eerie spectral vibrations in my bones

music compos'd upon churchly organs

rushing shivers up my uncompromising spine,

demons playing charades on blacken'd keys

heart bleeds a dull beryl hue of expir'd crimson 

mind whirling in sickly remuneration tunes  

dance track takes flight without raven's hindsight

commission'd by devil's own apathetic self  

Author's Note

Reviews

[s y e]

// music compos'd upon churchly organs
rushing shivers up my uncompromising spine,
demons playing charades on blacken'd keys
heart bleeds a dull beryl hue of expir'd crimson //

Wow chicka, I knew you could write but this takes it to a whole other level! This was so dark I could hardly see. And the music.... Sent shivers up my spine.

You've blown me away... Wow. Flip flops & all that jazz!!

[Frieda P]

Jazz'd it had the intended effect noodlebumble....wooo, more flip flops, it's gonna be a good day! ;-)

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful artwork, good music and amazing poetry. Some dark spells lead us to the unknown and dark places. No weakness in the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[R. L. Hill]

This is amazingly eerie....WowZers

[Blue Ivory]

Dark and chilly! This sent shivers up me spine ;) So did the music.

[Lyn Anderson]

I really like this. Simple and dark.

[Frieda P]

Like me..ha, thanks KL.

[Danny]

I love how you always put great music to mix perfectly with the poem.
This is powerful poem, very dark!
:) :)

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Danny, took me a while to find this one, but I think it enhances the read. :-)

[Bowers]

As dark and mournful as it may seem, it shone a beautiful piece indeed!

[Frieda P]

Thank you, jazz'd you enjoyed this one!

[Bowers]

haha! (I love that you just said jazz'd) and your welcome! it was great!

[Frieda P]

LOL, I'm from jazzy joisey, we tawk that way...hahah

[Bowers]

your from New Jersey! ... wow.. this isn't happening! how cool! I absolutely love the accents there! (and New York accents!)
Wow! so,
fancy meeting you ma'am!

[Frieda P]

Now I'm larfin', no one gets that excited about joiseyites! ;-) Nice to meet you too.....

[Bowers]

haha! they must! I've neighbors who came from Jersey, and all but one of them lost their accents, tis a sad thing to lose! :/

[Frieda P]

Oh we get pick'd on a lot for it, we tend to draw our vowels out, but I don't say daw-der or dawg...hahaha

[Bowers]

haha ah, I see! :D

[Frieda P]

Wanna cuppa cawfee? ;-)

[Bowers]

haha omg! yes! Im actually drinking some right now! (my favorite thing ever?!)

[Frieda P]

Ha, cheers! :-)

[Bowers]

lol! Are you doing well today?

[Frieda P]

I got cawfee, of course! ;-)

[Bowers]

I just finished mine ... lol, what kind do you drink?

[Frieda P]

Whatever keeps me sane...my favorite would be Trader Joe's Costa Rican Peaberry with hazelnut creamer...yum.

[Bowers]

wow.. complex! haha
I literally just drink instant coffee... no cream, but I use sugar and a tad of milk :P

[Frieda P]

NONONO, not instant, don't say it's so..........hahah

[Bowers]

haha you dont like instant? :P I like non instant as well.. but I drink mostly instant ;)

[Frieda P]

If I absolutely had to, but fresh brewed is so much better...........

[Bowers]

haha a lot of people tell me instant is gross, and ask why I drink it, but I guess... I dont know, maybe im just used to it.. .:)

[Frieda P]

You can't have a love affair with instant haha ;-)

[Bowers]

lol, true, ive never had a love affair with it... more of a tolerant relationship...

[Frieda P]

Exactly..................

[Bowers]

haha gotcha ;)

[Rita L. Sev]

demons playing charades on blacken'd keys... Foreboding in poetic form, a dark dance indeed. This is an impressive write, Frieda, to add a chill to my heart in the middle of a blizzard...

[Frieda P]

Oh sorry Rita, it's chilly enough out! Thank's so much...

[Emerald Seas]

Wonderful write, Frieda!
"dance track takes flight without raven's hindsight"
Oh, the devil and I dance (imagination again) quite a bit. Most times I am an all too willing participant in the dance. I figure if I don't go with the mind's dance the repercussions of suppressing it are far more dangerous! Lol
Dang, Girl... You can write!

[Frieda P]

Wooo I'm dancing to this review...I hear ya, just go with the flow lady...haha, thanks muchly!!

[redzone]

when i use my tablet I don't get to hear the music.. bummer.. Frieda, when your "heart bleeds a dull beryl hue of expir'd crimson", I wonder and worry.. wonder if there'll be a smile and worry that it would only be illusion.. you poem, far from dull, breaks one's heart.. only a true poet could write such.. ~~redzone

[Frieda P]

You're too kind my sweet friend, when you have a chance do listen to the music curt, it's striking, thanks so much, smiling now. :-)

[redzone]

a for real smile I hope.. I definitely will listen when able to use my puter... are you snowed in yet??

[Frieda P]

Not exactly snowed in but pretty messy out there right now...for real ;-D

[redzone]

I know sitting in an internet cafe (had to get out the apt) watching it come down and down and down.. wanna make some snow angels, become snowpeople. then drink some hot chocolate...

[Frieda P]

Make it a bourbon hot toddy and I"m so there.................

[Baby Ricochet]

Sounds like some killer tunes

[Frieda P]

Pretty much, thanks Baby...