Colorless Indifference

COLLABORATION~ Jack & Frieda Lovely piano music compos'd by just Jack

bled out through your vain'd indifference

the taste of sulfurous poisons on my skin

glance'd a mocking blow in your inertia

lethargic in  sharing  gravy'd recompense

overcompensating in my own redemption

we all fall down in soil'd nonchalance  

toxic meanings frown on broken promises

puddles form at the feet of the weary

drinking in the essence of face forward moments

brandishing a sword of tolerant gilding

slicing downward at the head of the beast

missing the mark in blinded fury

dancing forlorn on an empty wire

wrapp'd around unwilling strides

vault'd stairway to Utopia's doors lock'd 

step into the lion's den unwithered

flowing out an execution's finish

flood of tainted claret cruor feel unto my toes

conviction bows to untrusting desires

never again to weep salt’d tears

stain’d glory amiss in hollow parched lips

and fire brand’d breaths aiming

armor plate and rusted dreams corrode

running from white light rabid stares…

Author's Note

Reviews

[s y e]

It's has gotten to the point where I just don't know who beings and who ends... You guys just fit together perfectly. Like a missing puzzle has been completed when you two collaborate together, it makes my night and leaves me sighing and smiling.

// toxic meanings frown on broken promises
puddles form at the feet of the weary
drinking in the essence of face forward moments //

This is beautiful. My two favourite people, please don't ever stop writing together. You will soon be able to make a book out of these beautiful writes and I'll be the first one to buy it! Haha. :-))

And Jack, like I told you just now, that recording is simply amazing! You blew me off my feet.

The imagery is so vivid and beautiful.

Flop flops & all that jazz!

[Frieda P]

Thrilled you enjoyed this one noodlebumble...I'm partial to it myself, didn't Jack do a wonderful job on the music, fits perfectly with the sentiment, thanks luv! xo

[s y e]

He is one special, talented man. :) It blew me away. x

[gabrielle]

aww, you two are like poetic soul mates. i was trying to guess who of you penned the first stanza and so on.. first stanza i think was done by F and the second was by J...but i could be wrong. lol. wonderful collaboration as always.

[Frieda P]

You got it gabrielle, thanks for this glowing review, muchly appreciated! :-)

[Jack...]

Actually, Frieda wrote the whole thing, I just came up with the ... at the end of the poem. :)

Just kidding, thanks so much Gabrielle for your kindness.

[Emerald Seas]

Two peas in a pod, you two! This is such a smooth collaboration I cannot separate your voices. Stunning, striking, and vivid the poem is so well crafted. I really think you two should put together a collection to publish. Your voices together, and/or separate, compliment each other. The book(s) would be superb. And then to offer perhaps recorded readings with Jack's talented music as the backdrop. Hmm... I do believe we have a hit!
Wonderful writing of two talented poets and friends. Well done, team! :)

[Frieda P]

Funny you should say, Jack did bring that up....I'm so jazz'd you enjoyed this one ES! :-)

[Jack...]

Working on as we speak my friend. Thanks so much for being a good friend ES and for the always kind words. I'm thinking I put Frieda's photo on the cover, sell a whole lot more copies that way. :)

[Frieda P]

Oh gawd Jack....I'll shoot you. ;-P

[Emerald Seas]

Heehee - with the content of the book... I do believe Frieda may be blushing!

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

This is amazing work...a poem about indifference would usually be expected to be sad and straightforward, but this one is exceptionally surreal and vivid. A wonderful gem to read.

[Frieda P]

Doing the happy dance to your review, thanks so much Cascara.

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goes Cascading!)]

my pleasure xx

[Dhaye]

How did you do that? You always have a good output together. Both great poets, plus Jack is the Jack of all trades - a fine musician.
The feeling of indifference... well, human nature which we cannot escape. It's up to us how to adjust when it strikes us.

Splendid in general. Bravo for both of you!

[Frieda P]

Thanks Dhaye, you're so generous with your words, muchly appreciated my friend!

[Jack...]

Welcome home Dhaye. :) Thank you for your kind words, but the talent here is with my lovely writing partner.

[Dhaye]

You're welcome, brilliant poets!

[Pryde Foltz]

armor plate and rusted dreams corrode
running from white light rabid stares…

Certainly, before there can be real enlightenment there must self-discovery and that can hurt. Great write, Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Thanks, it was great fun writing this one with Jack, glad you enjoyed our collaboration Pryde.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Pryde. I think the fun was all on my side...couldn't stop smiling while writing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"we all fall down in soil'd nonchalance"
i strongly believe that...we just don't seem to care that everything is falling apart...in the sixties, we would not have put up with this.

Utopia is just an idealistic vision that has been completely lost.

now is hell on earth...and we just throw some ice on ourselves and let it happen.

significant piece here..at least from my perspective and experience...

[Frieda P]

I'm so happy you got all that out of this read jacob, thanks so much...

[Jack...]

Jacob, you just got your little poetic shovel out and dug away on this one. Thanks so much my friend for the great review of our work.

[Brittany Zedalis]

Truly brilliant. Another wonderful job. :)

[Frieda P]

Thanks Brittany, so glad you enjoyed our collaboration :-)

[Jack...]

Thanks so very much Brittany

[kublakhan27]

Wow, now this is epic, poetically and musically...great work as always guys :)

[Frieda P]

A wow and an epic, doesn't get better than that, thanks so much my sweet friend! x

[kublakhan27]

Always a pleasure love :) x

[Jack...]

Thanks you so much Steve. It is always an honor to work with such a talented poet as Frieda.

[Raymond Federle]

This sparks my thinking process, which is a good thing. I need to read it some more and ponder on it. I like it very much but there is more going on here than at first read I think. Just FYI Frieda... when you get the HTML code from sound cloud there is a auto play box that you can check.. didn't know if you saw it. Again well done! :)

[Frieda P]

That's always a good thing Raymond, and no I wasn't aware, thanks for the heads up...Jack's piece is really brilliant and enhances our collaboration, thanks so much.... :-)

[Frieda P]

Thanks again Raymond, I got it to play auto, never realized that was available before...

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Raymond and thanks for the tip. I had no idea either.

[Raymond Federle]

Hey... no problem. That's what I'm here for... every day helpful for in and around your home and garden. :)

[Frieda P]

Ha stay away from my poppy plants ;-)

[Gleb Zavlanov]

Brilliant, as always. You never fail in delighting me.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Gleb, always appreciate your visits.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much my fellow piano man.