Sea E'scape

I lie still in the midnight surf

crashing waves rushing over me

pummeling an already broken soul

ravaging my cold chamber'd heart

torn apart by thunderous clouds,

that day you sail'd for better horizons

Sinking breathlessly onto the edge,

hoping for ocean's depth to unfurl

this magnitude of boundless space

left behind in your parting tides,

sand engulfs my weeping eyes

etching how blind'd love can be

Hauntingly sad violin cries in the distance, 

strumming the siren call on wing'd strings

whilst ebb'd flow of tears immerse,

drowning ceaselessly in streams...

Author's Note

Reviews

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

I like where this is coming from right from the first line. I am a water baby, so midnight surf is my kind of place to be...The term "cold-chambered heart" is great! This reminds me of a time when I tossed off my clothes in the winter on Ocean Beach in San Francisco in front of all my friends who I used to go to the beach and play guitar with and I ran out into the water in the middle of the night because I felt, like you are describing, I was broken and lonely!! I had had a terrible break up. "This magnitude of boundless space" really gets to the heart of it! I like that this is not an overtly negative piece. The title "E'scape" says that there is a "seascape of hope" here. It is less "sad" than melancholy. It is less "tragic" than mournful. I always love that you have an overall conception that works! I am always saddened when people write one dimensional poetry. This clearly has a number of levels of interpretation and plot. That is always a pleasure in your writing!! There is the superficial but also the profound, and everything in-between.

[Frieda P]

Wow Robby, you've left me speechless, I'm so thrilled you felt this one...I'm truly humbled by your kind words...and giggling at the imagery of Ocean Beach a little... ;-)

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

Well, clearly I get where you are coming from...It was an interesting night at the beach. When I came up naked and asking if anyone wanted to bring me my clothes everyone thought I was completely insane. I am pretty sure no one expected me to really go into the black water and stay out for nearly half an hour. It was surprisingly warm and I guess thinking back it makes sense because in winter here in California we get the Mexican warm waters up here in Northern California. It is only in Summer that we get the Alaska Current freezing us out of the water, ironically. The water is 47 or so in winter and 42 or so in summer. In any event, it was cold, but I had a great time. It was part of me coming back from a few years feeling all of my insides had died following my first real love leaving me in Europe, stealing all my money, and deliberately pestering me with stories of her new relationships after we were split...brutal. Anyway, so this poem brought that home for me, but had I never had that experience it would still be a powerful poem!

[Frieda P]

That is a brutal story, so the sea was cleansing to your spirit, I get that...and I'm sure they thought you were off your rocker, sometimes you just gotta do what's needed....thanks again and for sharing Robby!

[luviva]

you are an artist my dear. having said that, i dont even know the real meaning of an artist LOL. but i also know that artists tend to play with whatever they have to convey the best of their feelings or lessons or whatever. and that, is you my dear the way you toss the words round is amazing and they certainly do adore you. i loved evry inch of this poem the imagery and the no so obvious language and personification you used.... u know them "Hauntingly sad violin cries "
welldone FRIEDA

[Frieda P]

Oh you humble me my friend, nice to see you again by the way....thanks so much for your kind word, muchly appreciated.

[luviva]

welcome my dear.. and you deserve all the credits

[Mark]

The ocean can be a great healer. Did you read my poem Broken Sail by any chance?

[Frieda P]

I so agree, it definitely has a soothing effect...not sure Mark, send me the link....& thanks.

[Mark]

Never figured out how to copy and paste on my phone. I'll feature it.

[Ahena MK]

really really good !!!
ahena :)

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Ahena!! :-)

[Frieda P]

I think you're a water sign too my big Sis, this was utterly beautiful, deep, touching heartfelt, and brought me honestly back to the shores of my north coast here.... beautiful music...how could it otherwise, related to Brunuh VIlle and Andrian Von Zigler, those are masters... here I see a connection, and love it... composers of fantasy genre are rarly noticed, glad you find them too, they need more respect these days.

Your write is stunning. It says all, in such a beauty of short lined verse.
I felt home here Sis, I do always when I read you, I wished I had more time,
to delve in every single write, but I will in vacations, promise.... fan of you love xx

- Elisa

[Frieda P]

Ahh my sweet sister, I'm actually a fire sign who adores the water and feels most comfortable there. Yes, this music moves my soul too, I'm so happy you appreciate my choice, it's such a moving piece. You touched my heart Eli, your kind words mean a lot, you know I adore your poetry, always such depth and insight, so coming from you, this praise means so much. I have a lot of catching up to do too, so no worries cara. Love you so xo

Yes, I know you're fire lol he he.... and I'm water, that's why we match so so well. :) I love the fire as well as you love the wather.... it is, it's full of pathos, (leaded from empathy) (greek) ofc.
You are brilliant, I so enjoyed this. :) You have such a loving heat, soul, and poetic aura, I did felt ever single heart beat of this one. And then I come by and say you so... :D Love you muchly! I hope to come by for more as soon as I can........ Ti amo xx

*water... sorry I always put instinctively an "H" in that word... maybe cause of the H2o factor lol ha! xxxx I'm more technical sometimes...

[Frieda P]

Woo, now you made my day, doing the happy dance...you're the best sorella, ti voglio molto bene, be technical all you want...haha MWAH xo ;-)

Anche io ti voglio molto bene mia sorella più cara.... haha so sorry, I am sometimes... lol geek allert haha xxx love ya!

[Frieda P]

Haha, I love when you get your geek on sweet pea! ;-) ♥

Haha and I love you for accepting me how I am.... ♥♥♥ :) love you Sis.

[Frieda P]

...........Always ;-) MWAH!

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Another outstanding poem. Can't wait to read more of your poems! :) :D

Yours truly Kaze~

[Frieda P]

Thanks muchly Kaze, jazz'd you enjoyed this one. :-)

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

I certainly did. :) and your welcome. :) :D

[Brittany Zedalis]

I think that using the ocean/sea in poetry is a beautiful thing. I went through a phase where that's all I wrote about for a while. This is wonderful.

[Frieda P]

It does have it's allure, thanks Brittany.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

couldn't exhibit loss any stronger than with these words...

beautifully expressed, Frieda...

[Frieda P]

Thanks jacob, always appreciate your kind words, means a lot.

[Gleb Zavlanov]

As usual, the imagery is stunning, vivid and pure genius! Enchanting and gorgeous!

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Gleb!

[kublakhan27]

I don't think I can articulate how moved I am by this piece love. You've channeled many of the things that run through my mind when I look out at the shore from my kitchen window. You've given an unspeakably vivid voice to those thoughts here...I'm speechless...what can I say, you've struck a chord in me with this one Mrs.R...xo

[Frieda P]

Now I'm speechless, you've touched my heart yet again with your kind words Steve, you humble me Benji, thanks from the bottom of my heart my friend. xo

[kublakhan27]

Always a pleasure Mrs.R :) xo

[Lyn Anderson]

This is a beautiful verse, but "better horizons?" surely this is not the case if the author is speaking of someone leaving her.

[Frieda P]

C'mon KL you know all that jazz about the grass being blonder, greener I meant.............

[Lyn Anderson]

ha ha, but everyone knows brunettes are hotter.

[Frieda P]

Tell men that one!

[redflutterby]

Lol.... uhhmmm...red heads are hotter then anyone!! ;-D

[s y e]

I agree with Red!