Echoes of your stare...

I drank from your cup of darkness

     my lips turned cobalt blue

the shadows whirl'd engulfing,

   your piercing eyes pour'd into me

there was no taste left for breath

i lie gasping, waiting for a miracle

   only thing i could hear,

      was the echo of your stare.......

Author's Note

Reviews

[redzone]

"the echo of your stare", great line to end this poem Frieda.. I would say back away from that"cup of darkness", but probably too late for that huh.. I don't think there are miracles for these shadows, just our own resilience and the help of friends who would shout Breathe Frieda, Breathe.. one of those wonderful poems you write that tears at our hearts... ~~redzone

[Frieda P]

No hope for the darkness, now you tell me, I'm fook'd. Thanks curt, always appreciate your thoughts. Are you ready yet sir? ;-)

[redzone]

remember that song "Anticipation"?? well that me.. all nerves and silliness.. the real question is and will always be.. "ARE YOU READY FOR ME!!!! this is way too much fun Frieda...

[Baby Ricochet]

MOM!! FRIEDA KEEPS STARING AT ME!! Made me think of a vampire eyeing the kill. Good one.

[redflutterby]

Omg...saw this review on my feed and spit tea all over my screen laughing. Haha... good one BR!!

[Frieda P]

LOL Baby....mine was coffee Red. ;-)

[Shaun Payton]

Waiting For The Miracle-a thousand kisses deep while wearing a famous blue raincoat:)

[Frieda P]

Ha sounds stirringly creepy when you put it that way Shaun, I see you know my man. ;-)

[Shaun Payton]

Yes, Leonard Cohen is phenominal, brilliant, awesome, so many adjectives lol :)

[Frieda P]

So so many...................... :-)

[Shaun Payton]

His ode to Sounds Of Silence ah And his voice ah meant to be heard

[Frieda P]

OOOOH I know, love hearing him recite those lyrics, pure poetry..........

[Shaun Payton]

I love the song, a friend told me about that video on youtube, I.use youtube when im too lazy to.read lol

[Frieda P]

Me too, I had his reading on my profile for a while....

[Shaun Payton]

Ive been on a Cohen and Bukowski kick lately

[Frieda P]

Always on a Cohen kick...can't pick a favorite, they all are....

[Shaun Payton]

yeah, he's still going too, touring

[Frieda P]

I know, the man is incredible, I like his voice better, the older he gets...

[Shaun Payton]

Yes, well he can only get older like us all haha

[Frieda P]

He definitely gets better though...

[Shaun Payton]

Id agree with you there Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Good, I wouldn't want to have to hurt you hahaha

[Shaun Payton]

lol I might not mind lol

[Sami Khalil]

Short , to the point , leaves powerful echoes of you words. Leonard Cohen was marvelous as your write...Bravo.........

[Frieda P]

Can you tell I"m in love with Mr Cohen, ha....grazie mille Sami. ;-)

[Sami Khalil]

He is wonderful indeed. A great one...:)...................

[Scott Metro]

Echo of your stare..what a nice, poetic grasp.....very nice indeed.
You write so well..I'm always impressed.

Admiration dear Frieda..
Scott

[Frieda P]

Poetic grasp, I like that Scott, so jazz'd you enjoyed this one, thanks always for your sweet words.

[Scott Metro]

My pleasure my dear....
S.

[:o]

I don't know of anyone else that can write a poem every day and have them all be so good. I admire you Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Well thanks so much for your kind review Lacey, you humble me my friend.

[s y e]

You write magnificently well Frieda. I've been told to make sure I keep Sye on top of reviews and all so you know she'll review this again once she's back.

Amazing work and you write so powerfully in such few lines. Absolute mind blowing.

[Frieda P]

Thanks for your sweet words Kylie, keep the spot warm for Sye...