Echoes of your stare...

I drank from your cup of darkness

     my lips turned cobalt blue

the shadows whirl'd engulfing,

   your piercing eyes pour'd into me

there was no taste left for breath

i lie gasping, waiting for a miracle

   only thing i could hear,

      was the echo of your stare.......

Author's Note

Reviews

[redzone]

"the echo of your stare", great line to end this poem Frieda.. I would say back away from that"cup of darkness", but probably too late for that huh.. I don't think there are miracles for these shadows, just our own resilience and the help of friends who would shout Breathe Frieda, Breathe.. one of those wonderful poems you write that tears at our hearts... ~~redzone

[Frieda P]

No hope for the darkness, now you tell me, I'm fook'd. Thanks curt, always appreciate your thoughts. Are you ready yet sir? ;-)

[redzone]

remember that song "Anticipation"?? well that me.. all nerves and silliness.. the real question is and will always be.. "ARE YOU READY FOR ME!!!! this is way too much fun Frieda...

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Many have drank from my cup od darkness, however their lips normally turn orange! well done, good read.

[Sasha]

"only thing i could hear,
was the echo of your stare......."

Amazing !

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Sasha!

[Sasha]

your most welcome ! :)

[Trace]

What a great metaphor. . I can almost see it in my mind.
You have a wonderful way of writing that brings out the emotions and feelings.
Very nice. . Trace

[Frieda P]

Whoops hope you didn't catch the darkness, thanks Trace ;-)

[Trace]

The very dimmist light is only visible in complete darkness

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

The last line makes me think and savor!
Nice write and reflection.

[Frieda P]

Woo thanks so much Josie, so thrilled you did!

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

You are welcome! :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i've gone to this darkness...you write "dark" so well ---the imagery is chilling.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much for your kind words jacob, means a lot...

[Emerald Seas]

Love the title! Wow, girl... We must be cut from the same cloth. I can relate to this one. This is saturated with the emotion and stagnation of a dark place that grips the soul. Wonderful penning!

[Frieda P]

Thanks ES, doing the happy dance to your review!

[NeiL ArandA]

Wow 200 view right away in just single a single day. I can taste the flavor on every line.Its really a strong flavor... This is well thought of piece .
If relationship is the muse...Its a very tense and awkward moment. Cold and silent treatment and I can hear the echos of a pin drop ...Sometimes the eyes say it all. A flip of the eye lashes or rolling of the eyeballs. No miracle ...no smile .... just engulfing indifference ...

[Frieda P]

Ha rolling my eyes, were you sneaking a peek Neil, thanks muchly!

[Clariblah]

The ending is lovely! The use of two contradictory senses, hearing and sight to depict what I interpret as a sense of nothingness. A good melancholy read!

[Frieda P]

Thanks Clariblah, unusual pen name, I like it....

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

I love your poem. Fantastic write! :)

Kaze~

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Kaze :-)

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Your very welcome. :)

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

"I drank from your cup of darkness"... this one had me at hello.

[Frieda P]

Why thank you muchly Mr Maguire ;-)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Lol... show me money! ;) haha

[Frieda P]

LOL... ;-)