~EXpir'd Dance

untimely teeming downpours,

     my tears slid down your cheeks

as your heart bled unto my soul

    without concessions revelation's pulse,

alas, beating eyes speak in disclosure 

    proclamations etch'd in blood

envelop'd the yielding surface skin

    strapped to a behindhand'd watch

that read a confession of surrender

   at quarter past indignity and 

half past sinful indulgences

   rollback was warranted

but time had earlier run out

   faith expired on the second hand

dance end'd when the music laps'd

     love died an untimely death

...whilst the band play'd burning violins

Author's Note

Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

Time dripped into the bottom of the hourglass at the same speed in which the rain poured, the tears fell, and the heart bled and dribbled down, only to have your lover realize far too late and try to fix things that can be repaired no longer. I quite enjoyed this one; it's a clever take on the hourglass concept presented uniquely with a metaphor twisted in delicately . . .

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille Tai, exactly, always jazz'd to read your reviews..

[Pryde Foltz]

at quarter past indignity and
half past sinful indulgences
rollback was warranted
but time had earlier run out

Alas … that kind of love seems to be going around. Great one.

[Frieda P]

You noticed that too eh? Thanks Pryde.

[Anand Sehgal]

half past sinful indulgences
rollback was warranted
but time had earlier run out
faith expired on the second hand
dance end'd when the music laps'd
love died an untimely death

beautiful work. Loved it :)
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[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Anand, jazz'd you enjoyed :-)

[Sami Khalil]

This poem is marvelous along with the reference to Leonard Cohen. Those burning violens are like your burning pages of lively fires and warmth...Bravo........

[Frieda P]

Ah thanks Sami, gotta love a burning violin ;-)

[Sami Khalil]

So true. I love that song. That one inspired me to write my dance poem ...
Welcome muchly...:).................

[Frieda P]

Did it, you know it's not really a love song?............

[Sami Khalil]

Yep...You know it...:).......................

[Frieda P]

I didn't know that for the longest time and I don't think most realize it either...sad.

[Sami Khalil]

^^~^^ :>)....................

[Sami Khalil]

For the holocaust...:)......................

[Frieda P]

Yes, took on a whole new meaning after I found that out............

[Frieda P]

I love the song even more now.

[Sami Khalil]

Me too...A very humanitarian one and sad indeed...:).......

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

I almost feel like this is a piece written from the point of view of a gifted empath, well done.

[Frieda P]

Yes, it's my special power Thomas, thanks muchly.

[WILDERNESS]

astonishing................. I was just listening to Legend of Zelda, a beautiful medley on violin ................to go with this beautiful poem.............Ah

[Frieda P]

Love violin music, thanks Wilderness. :-)

[WILDERNESS]

welcome ...................... may we all be drowned in true love.................

[Frieda P]

What a way to go................

[Scott Metro]

You manage to etch tenderness into your passion...that's just darn cool !
Very lovely write Frieda...the video too a great accent.
Admiration always Frieda..
Scott

[Frieda P]

Hmmm 'etch'd tenderness' now there's a poem, thanks so much for your kind words Scott.

[Scott Metro]

(((kiss)))
S.

[KeeD]

It reminded me of a silent movie for some reason. Just had that slow haunting waltz feeling but with a sizzling salsa effect, if that made any sense? :D haha. Loved it.

[Frieda P]

Usually you don't Kee, but yes I get it. ;-) I meant thanks so much!

[Jack...]

This piece is hauntingly beautiful, Times moves quickly, fear reigns down and the band plays on...burning violins. My sweet friend, each new day, each new poem is an amazing ride. I love the clock references with the music keeping perfect time...even if the steps are heavy. Very nice.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much my friend, you've made my day and you know how that started....always appreciate you Jack.