Mist'd Memories

COLLABORATION~ Jack & Frieda

I still see you clearly through misty memories

feel that breath upon the nape of my neck,

warmth of ravish'd strength within my loins

your aura still renders me powerless 

buried deep in my heart, under my skin

when it rains in the spaces of my soul

I feel your tender caresses of yesterday 

Left of lonely storm cloud's simmering

in shadowed alleys of secret beliefs

touched skin and fingers softly, smoothly

outlining each sighed whisper and

contoured curve, stimulating senses

in breathless desires of your passion’d taste

and tantalizing heat as our bodies met

Our love story a wisp of an interlude 

wafting through my chamber'd heart

once our jazz played perfect harmony

the dance stopped playing our song

waltz'd to a beat of an off connection

of sad violin arias constantly screeching

without a chance at charm'd destiny

Portfolios wrap tear stained sheet music

drenched notes bleed, ink runs black streaks

piccolo puddles in high pitched weeping

applauding silent wing'd butterflies

in rhythm with distant thunder...crashing

rumbling in echoes of sorrow

and shattered heart ovations in the rain...

Author's Note

Reviews

[m.s.early]

You two combine sweetly and in warm embrace. You two compliment each other anyway and together is a divine union. Wonderful lamenting words capture the heart caught in yesterday.

"applauding silent wing'd butterflies
in rhythm with distant thunder...crashing" - incredibe imagery and the delicate wings in nature's violent booming contrasts paradoxically.

Great job guys.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much xavier, you picked my favorite lines too!

[Jack...]

Thanks so much X. We each write our own stanzas when we collaborate but you my friend have picked out the two lines that we shared. I was a bit lost on these lines and asked Frieda to help me, needless to say, she made it beautiful.

[:o]

The two of you work so well as a team. Your words blend together like harmonies. Lovely poem.

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille Lacey, glad you enjoyed.

[Jack...]

We do make a good team, Frieda is the Captain and I am the water boy...but it works. Thanks so much my friend.

[Frieda P]

You're a barrel of monkey laffs Jack, very funny..... ;-P

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

You two seem to belong together because your writing speaks of it, and conveys those strong emotional feelings.
I love this and I want to keep it in my favorites to read again.
Thanks to both of you!

[Frieda P]

Woo, doing the happy dance Josie, thanks so much!

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

You are welcome! :)

[Jack...]

Josie, you are so very kind. Thank you for your sweet words on our poetry.

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

YOU ARE WLECOME, JACK! :)

[Scott Metro]

It must have been a beautiful symphony...You are lucky to have had it in your life...sometimes dreams are all we have.
You always paint with your words..such a splendid snapshot of a once was.
My admiration Frieda.
Well done my sweet friend.
Scott

[Frieda P]

Muchly appreciated Scott, but Jack had much ado to do with this one too, jazz'd you enjoy'd our collaboration.

[Scott Metro]

:)
Scott......

[Vikrantsingh]

Great work together as always :)
Jack and Frieda :)

Cheers!
-Singh :)

[Frieda P]

Woooo, looks who back!! Nice to see you again Singh ;-) Thanks so much my friend.

[Vikrantsingh]

My pleasure :)

[Jack...]

I'll second that...welcome back my friend. Happy you stumbled on this one and thrilled you enjoyed our work. As you can see, Frieda is still making me look good.

[Horizon K.]

...when it rains in the spaces of my soul
I feel your tender caresses of yesterday...
Wow, I can't tell how this was a collab, seamless in style and voice. Such a sad and lovely song of past love... Music, that has become the rain...

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much for this luverly review Horizon....!

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Horizon. Your beautiful review is the best music...

[Dhaye]

I love the last line "and shattered heart ovations in the rain..."
I love memories in the rain, happy or sad. It's my fascination now- making pieces with the touch of rain.

This is another excellent product of your collaboration with Jack. You're ( you and Jack) a perfect combination.
Bravo!

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Dhaye. It's like a favorite family member is visiting when you stop by to read our work. I appreciate your kind words on this poem collaboration with Frieda...she is truly amazing

[Dhaye]

You're both amazing! And you flatter me, ha? Favorite family member...lol

[sharonlee]

Simply soul-stiring imagery ... bravo Frieda & Jack

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Sharonlee. I am thrilled you enjoyed our poetic duet. Frieda is an amazing poet and I am fortunate to be able to write with her.

[Sami Khalil]

You both get standing ovations in the rain and in the echoes of love. You bring the breathless desires into full action. A great collaboration...:)..............

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Sami. You kind words are always welcome on our work. I am the fortunate one to have such an amazing writing partner as Frieda. Thanks again.

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...Any time...:)................

[Cassie]

I told you my friends Jack and Frieda, you collaborate so well and this was another lovely piece I loved. good job my friends.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Sunshine. Frieda is a dream to write with, her pen always provides beautiful pictures for me to color inside...if only I could stay inside of the lines.

[Pryde Foltz]

piccolo puddles in high pitched weeping

Really wonderful work. Beautiful music.

[Jack...]

Thanks so very much Pryde. Happy you enjoyed this work...it seems as much as I enjoyed writing it with Frieda.